In the Garden of the Lord
Jesus knelt in the temple garden, deep in prayer. The Passover had only been a few hours earlier, and soon Judas would arrive with the guards. This would be his last chance to pray in private before he was taken away, and he didn't intend to waste it. His prayers weren't so much a string of thoughts, though, as a single phrase, repeated fervently over and over.
"Father, please give me strength for the coming trials, and any comfort you can offer in my time of need."
"Um, excuse me," said a soft, female voice directly behind him, "Am I interrupting?"
Jesus didn't jump, despite the sudden appearance of another person, and instead stood smoothly and turned to face his visitor. Instead of the young woman he excepted, however, he instead found himself looking at a soft yellow Pegasus with a pink mane and tail, like the Roman myths, except it only came up to his waist. She (it was obviously female) looked up at him through her lashes, and said, "Oh, I guess I was. Sorry for bothering you." She turned and started to walk away.
"Wait." She stopped. While Jesus had hoped his prayer would be answered, he hadn't expected it to happen like this. However, that didn't mean he was going to squander the opportunity. "Come, sit with me," he said, placing himself on the ground.
"Um, okay," she murmured, sitting next to him, not quite touching him. She fidgeted in place, making it obvious she was nervous.
"What is your name?" Asked Jesus, after the silence stretched for a bit.
"I'm, Fluttershy," she whispered.
"Fluttershy," Jesus rolled the word around in his mouth, "A fine name, for a fine creature." She blushed, and hid behind her mane, causing Jesus to chuckle softly. "My name is Jesus, of Nazareth."
"Nazareth? What's that?" Fluttershy asked.
"It is my home village, the place I grew up," Jesus replied.
"Ah," said Fluttershy. Silence prevailed.
"So," Jesus finally said, "You seem to be a long way from home, may I ask how you came to be here?" He already knew, mostly, but explaining would help her relax.
"Well, Twilight Sparkle,"Fluttershy said, "a friend of mine, invited me and my other friends over to her house to show off some new spell she'd invented. However, when she tried to activate it, something went wrong, and the next thing I know, I'm out under the stars in a unfamiliar forest. And then I met you." She paused, "Um, what kind of creature are you?"
"I am a human," Jesus answered, "Have you never seen one before?"
"No, I haven't," She said looking him in the eye for the first time during their conversation, "Are you a rare animal?"
Jesus smiled, containing his laughter. "No, humans are not rare, and no, we're not animals, although I could understand why you might think that, given you've never met one before."
She squeaked. "How did you know that?" She asked as she jerked away from him, then winced as her wing contorted. Looking closer, Jesus saw that her wing was missing several feathers and had been placed in a makeshift splint.
"Are you hurt?" Jesus asked, ignoring her question for the moment.
She nodded fearfully.
Jesus started to reach out for her, then paused and asked, "May I heal it?" Fluttershy nodded slowly, then squeaked again as he reached out and gently laid his hand upon her wing. With a quick prayer under his breath, the bones knit themselves back together and new feathers grew in to replace the old. Fluttershy stared at her wing in awe, carefully extending it and giving a few experimental flaps, causing the last of the bandages to fall off. "How did you do that?" she whispered, unable to tear her gaze from the newly restored limb.
"For the same reason I knew you hadn't met a human before," he explained plainly, "You see, I not just a human. I'm also the Son of God."
"God? What's a god?" asked Fluttershy, clearly mystified. Jesus grinned, seeing a perfect opportunity to do what he had been sent to do: teach.
"God, my Father, is the creator of all things. He made the earth, the sun, and the stars," Jesus gestured to the sky overhead, "And all living plants and animals, including me," he gestured at himself, "and you," he poked her nose, causing her to giggle and scrunch her face up.
"Wow, he made the animals I care for? I had no idea somepony like that existed. I bet he's loved by everypony," Fluttershy said happily, although her smile faded as she took in Jesus's somber expression. "He is loved, isn't he?"
"That, my dear, is a long story," Jesus finally said, "Going back to the dawn of creation itself."
"Well, I'd like to know," She stated firmly.
"Very well," Jesus said, smiling gently. And with that, he told her the story of the beginning, of Adam, the first man, and Eve, the first woman, and how they ate the forbidden fruit and lost paradise as a consequence. He told her of Noah, and the great flood, and the first rainbow, which caused her to start in surprise. He told her of Abraham, and Moses, and the Prophets, and the story of Israel, which she drank in with all the focus and rapt attention of a young child. Finally, he told her of his travels, the works he had done, and what would happen when he left this clearing. She did not react well to that information. At all.
"THEY'RE GOING TO WHAT!?" she shouted, "You've got to get out of here before they come!" She grabbed his sleeve in her teeth and tried to drag him into the forest.
Jesus sighed, chuckled, and remained exactly where he was. "It was always going to happen this way, Fluttershy. There's no point in trying to run."
"THEY'RE GOING TO TORTURE YOU!" she all but screamed, letting go of his sleeve to stare him directly in the face. "And I won't allow it! You're coming with me, and that's final!"
Jesus held her gaze for a long, tense second, before he opened his mouth and laughed, long, hard, deep belly laughs. It had been a long time since he'd laughed like that, and the experience was refreshing. Fluttershy quailed under his voice, confused as to why her Stare hadn't worked.
Once Jesus's laughing fit had subsided, she asked, with tears in her eyes, "Why? Why does somepony have to suffer, and why does it have to be you?"
Jesus thought for a moment before he answered her. "This world is imperfect," he began, "Lucifer, the Fallen, is the ruler here, and his corruption taints all living things. Through my pain, and my death, those who believe in me will be able to purge that taint from themselves, and in doing so obtain eternal life. I was chosen by my father to be the best vessel for this change, and I have faith that if a better way had existed, he would have chosen that instead."
"Then why doesn't he just remove this Lucifer entirely?" Fluttershy asked stubbornly, "He obviously has the power to do it."
Jesus paused, searching for a good allegory, then asked, "What do you think of Angel Bunny?"
"W-well," Fluttershy, caught slightly off guard, "He's very dear to me and I love him very much, but I wish he wouldn't be so mean sometimes. I've gotten complaints about him from my other animals, but I know, deep down, that if I push too hard for him to behave he'll just go back to the wild. I don't want him to hurt the other animals, but I also don't want him to get hurt or want to hurt him, and that doesn't stop me from hoping he'll improve." She stopped, "That's the reason, isn't it?"
"They are similar enough," Jesus said peacefully, turning to gaze up at the stars, "Much like your Angel, my Father still hopes that the Devil will repent of his actions and return to his side, and become the greatest of the Angels once again. After the punishment has been dealt there can be no redemption. That is also why he allows his people to not love him. It is better that they follow because they choose, than that they are forced, for forced faith is no faith at all."
"And you are the best way to bring this to pass?" Jesus nodded. Fluttershy sat, hard, as various emotions battled for supremacy on her face, before settling on acceptance, if sad acceptance. "...Is there anything I can do before you, you know..."
"Well," Jesus said, "I was wondering if maybe I could scratch your ears?"
Fluttershy blushed, but nodded, and lay down on the grass. Jesus joined her, and laid his hand upon her head. As he scratched, he felt her soul, and simply enjoyed her presence. Not only did she actually have a soul, despite not being a human, but he'd never seen one this pure, even among those most faithful to him. And so he prayed, and scratched, and Fluttershy nuzzled into his hand as he did so. They lost track of time there in the starlit clearing together, until Jesus abruptly stopped, and stood. "I believe it will be time for you to go soon," he said.
Fluttershy looked up at him in confusion, and mild disappointment that the scratching was over, before her attention was caught by a ripping sound at the edge of the forest. A hole appeared in the world, one that quickly grew large enough for her to step through. "I guess this is goodbye, then," she said. "It was nice meeting you, Jesus."
"Likewise Fluttershy," he replied, smiling down at her. "Although, before you go, I have one last request," he reached into his robes, and pulled out a book that hadn't been there a few seconds previously, one that frankly, shouldn't exist at all yet. It was completely unmarked, save for a golden inlaid cross on the cover. "Spread my teachings in your world. Bring the joy of knowing my Father to your friends and family. If you have faith in Him, he will help you on your path. When you follow him, and by extension me, his will give you various gifts, including the gift of healing. I can tell you have an interest in that one in particular."
Fluttershy nodded her assent, both at his statement and to his request, and took the book in her mouth. She nuzzled his leg in farewell, since her mouth was full and she couldn't say goodbye, and he rubbed her ears one last time, whispering a quick prayer that the Holy Spirit would bless her as it would bless his disciples. Fluttershy turned, walked across the clearing, and stepped into the portal, which snapped shut behind her, leaving no trace that it ever existed. Jesus sighed, sent a quick thank-you to his Father for answering his prayer, and went to go wake his lazy disciples up.
Elsewhere
"Fluttershy, you're back!" Upon exiting the portal, Fluttershy was immediately swamped by her friends, all of whom were clamoring for her attention. She couldn't make out any one voice over the cacophony, but the joy at her return was obvious. Eventually, they separated, and Twilight Sparkle stepped forward, her eyes glued on the book still in Fluttershy's mouth.
"Fluttershy where did you get that?" She exclaimed, "It's a book, a book from another world. Oh, the stories it could tell!"
Fluttershy transferred the tome from her mouth to her hoof, smiling as she gazed down at it. "I know. Follow me, everypony" she walked past her friends towards the central table. "We've got a lot to talk about."
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You touched my heart man....now take this praise to your heart before this comments section becomes a huge messy religious debate!
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5816106 Thank you.
You just made it worthwhile.
This was one of the best stories I have ever read, all the more so because I was expecting something bad. Thank you.
5816220 You're welcome.
There's too much hatedom going on around here. I for one liked this work.
I don't get it why this story has so many down votes.....I for one liked it:)
It was a decent read, not really my preferred medium, but a good one for Fluttershy's character.
Realistically though, people shouldn't instantly see something religious and downvote it for no good reason. This story was at least decently written and apparently thought out.
If I go make a story about the Greek pantheon, or the Aesir, I doubt very much that it'll get some reactionary knee-jerk down votes (unless there's a fundy reading it or something and thinks Satan's infiltrating fimfiction). Why should a story about christian mythology garner them?
People, I'm not religious myself, but I'm not down voting this story just because it's about Jesus.
This is honestly adorable and it also gave me a few ideas from this. Not for all, but ideas none the less. Anyway, good story. I personally want to a sequel where equestria goes into religious turmoil.
Excellent story. Have a ribbon:
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Tag A Long's Book Club
Though I am personally not interested in the story, I would like to apologize for all those people who see a religious story and instantly downvote it.
I'm adding this to my favorites!!!
Emotional turmoil, and chocolate binge, bound to happen...
I'm Glad there are still brave enough to talk about religion. Have a good day...
Instant downvoting like this is why I think that before you can up or downvote a story this site should implement on the back end a form of read detection. IE First check and see if the IP address voting followed the link to the first chapter of the story, then spent enough time on the page to have read it, then if the page has been open for a reasonable amount of time for reading allow an upvote or downvote. On top of that regardless of what type of vote is submitted a comment on the story be required for the vote to count and the comment must be of a minimum length and would show the type of vote submitted.
That would curb (but not prevent) "downvoting to oblivion" and also curb (but not prevent) popular authors from hitting the feature box within minutes of posting a new story. It wouldn't be a perfect system but it would be the most "fair" one I could come up with.
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Here I go ranting and I forget to say how much I enjoyed the story. This could actually work as the prequel to a longer tale that I would happily read. Have my non-anonymous upvote! Maybe give a look to Pilgrim if you wan't to see a different take on Equestria and the Divine commingling.
I'll be honest: I was expecting to hate this story. However, surprisingly enough... I didn't. I mean, it had some weird issues within it (Why/how did Jesus have a bible, for example) but despite that... I actually kind of enjoyed this story. Sure, this is kinda touchy territory for a story, but this story was fairly respectful with it, and for what it is, it's actually... pretty well done. I... I don't know what else to say, except that this was better than I expected. Good story. Cheers
5816861 That bible was his one miracle. It was the only chance for Fluttershy to get one, so God bent reality a little for him.
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Holy cow! This is really good. Thank you so much for writing this, cute, touching story. There is not enough of these in the fandom.
Add in Jesus and wow... great job!
Also, as a former missionary my self, i am more then happy to formally welcome fluttershy into the fold haha
Amen! Hallelujah! Everyone deserves a bit of kindness. You have the spiritual gift of Creative Expression for the Gospel. As for the positive critiques- you might learn from them. But for mockers- ignore them, "Anyone who rebukes a mocker will get an insult in return. Anyone who corrects the wicked will get hurt. " Proverbs 9:7 NLT. Keep on using your gifts, Architect!
Cute story. Not pushy in regards to religion. And well written to boot!
Nicely done.
Very cute, good job of staying in character both for Fluttershy and He Who Was, and Is, and Is To Come.
This is a really touching story to say the least. A well done piece of work and a really good way to commemorate Good Friday.
I'm glad you made this story and I'm glad I could enjoy it.
It was pleasant for me to read, on a number of levels. Thanks for writing it
Believability in art is a very big deciding factor in weather or not I, personally, like the work (at this point, I feel I should note that I am a Christian) so the way you explained plausibility/justification for the story in the notes really nailed it for me... which is nice because now when I read this section of scripture in the future I can remember this lovely little story ^.^
Overall It's hard for me to explain, but, just-- thanks. I enjoyed this on a number of levels
Bless ya ma fellow brony brother in Christ
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I believe who votes and if they're read it are already known, at least to the mods. But you cannot compel comments in exchange for a vote, nor would anyone tolerate that.
As for the feature box, votes are only a small part of the algorithm. View-count, comments, upvotes, and time-of-day are other factors included.
Since that's the second time I've seen some variation on that picture being used today, I do want to make one comment:
That's a really small scale for ponies.
5819357 It's a placeholder. I've got a custom art on the way.
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Unfortunately, there is no sequel planned at this time. To write a sequel, I would need a plot, and I don't have one. I also don't know enough about religious conversion (or resistance to it) to be able to portray it well, which would result in the flame war that this fic has through some miracle avoided (Many thanks for that, btw). However, if any of you have a plot in mind, feel free to write it.
Seriously, why is there so much Jesus fic around here?
Oh wait, I know, easter, right?
That piss me to no end, especially when everyone's saying love Jesus and all that. What about Ēostre? Easter isn't even about Jesus, it's the Ēostre. You can't just kick a god out because you don't like her, than complain that people don't like your god.
I demand equal rights for all religions.
And for those wondering, I'm joking. Kinda hard to be piss off by Ēostre being forgotten when I don't know her well, actually I've never met her before, so excuse me for not standing up for a total stranger.
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This is just my opinion so Please don't hate-comment me back, but I don't think all religions should be treated equal at all. That's just an insult to the vary nature of free speech in general. If a person want's to write a fanfic about Jesus and Ponies, and then some ass-hat says "Nope, there's not enough Buddha or Odin fics, so you can't write yours, sorry!" That's just stupid. Times change, and the world changes with them. Those who don't, are doomed to obscurity... And a distinct lack of pony fics written in there honor
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You didn't notice the white text, did you?
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Well... Now I'm the Ass-hat
Thanks
5820578 It's fine, at least you weren't swearing.
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But here's a serious phrase for all of us
Some of the more... 'devoted' believers may condemn any fan fiction of Jesus. It may not be the atheist that's downvoting, it may the the believers instead.
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Sorry, my bad. Sometimes I see people opining on something like theirs is the comment to end them all, and I just want to argue with them for the sake of the fact that they sound so uppity. I should have picked up on the sarcasm.
5820612 That's their loss, then.
Bravo, great story! Thank you for writing it.
Is it me or is the down votes arthieat or satanic people downvoting
It's Good Friday. I'm a practical Catholic. I just finished watching The Passion of the Christ as is my tradition on this day. I feel compelled for reason to check out FIMFiction, and lo and behold, I find this story. Firstly, grammar-wise there are quite a few mistakes. "Nazareth" has an "e". I'm also well-versed in theology, and there is a bit of theological iffy-ness. But it could have been so much worse. So much. Overall, it's pretty decent faithful story. You earned a like from, but not enough to earn to earn a favorite. God bless you, and have a blessed Easter.
I do not consider myself a Christian (although I do respect Jesus's teachings), but I have to say I did enjoy this fic. It was very heartwarming and cute. Here's hoping that Equestria doesn't abuse the faith like humanity did. Their founding principle of Harmony will complement it quite nicely, methinks.
Also, 'tis a Good Friday miracle that this story didn't get mobbed by overly self-righteous "fedora atheists."
I'm not devout, I'm not really religious...but I did like this story. Boil it right down, and you've got a good man who knows he's facing a terrible ordeal but receives comfort and friendship from one of the sweetest, kindest ponies in all of creation.
And who wouldn't want a visit from Fluttershy when they're facing a dark time? I would.
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I'm both relieved and surprised that there is little to no hate coming at this story (besides the down votes
), anyways I like the fact that you wrote this story it says a lot about you. 
I'd go to a mass preached by Fluttershy any day!
5820822 Pretty much, or grammar Nazi's.
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A very nice story to read before the day of Jesus' ascendance and legacy he left.
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I expected this either to be a trollfic (naturally, because someone put that tag on this story) or to be doctrinally incorrect. However, the first suspicion was wrong, and the errors (Him expecting to face a woman instead of a pony. as for lazy disciples, I don't think Jesus would have thought of them in those terms, and as for the devil, it is clear from scripture that the devil will never be forgiven, as witness the Book of Revelations, which features him being permanently cast into a lake of fire for eternity) do not stop this story from being fantastic. Thanks, and may God be with you!
Funny, good read, +1 veggitale cuccumber
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Nah, just kidding.^^ I´m pagan so I just enjoyed this well written story.
What the world wouldn't give for an actual bible directly from Jesus and not the one we have now XD after all there's so many books and gospels and accounts that were rejected by the church during the first few Councils and lost, not to mention the fact that much of the bible was written down decades after the fact (the oldest parts of the New Testament are dated to around 30-40 AD if my memory serves right, letters from one of the Apostles to some of the early Churches) plus of course this is direct form the Man himself so mistranslations aren't going to be an issue either.
Equestria would have an even better understanding of Christianity than we do, and we originated the religion xD
That said I do hope he omitted some of the stuff about eating babies, genocide and such things. The poor ponies would be horrified. Though granted most of that is Old Testament/Tanakh stuff.
I'm nowhere near religious, or if I am the closest I would describe myself is having 'Buddhist leanings', and though I respect the figure of Jesus and his teachings I honestly came into this story expecting it to have some cringe-worthy fundamentalist or evangelist subtext. I was pleasantly surprised however by the story and I'll upvote and favourite it, one of the few religious fics on here that I'll add to my favourites. Just goes to show that however you much might agree or disagree with what the Christian Churches have done with the figure and teachings of Yeshua the man himself was a pretty awesome guy.
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I think it depends on the church in question. The one I go to, when I have time and not working on school stuff, uses The Bible to teach and we know that he was the Son of God and that he performed many miracles.
Now, one across the Ohio River in Huntington West Virginia, will only allow you to go to it if you make a certain amount of income.
Like I said, it just depends on which church.