• Member Since 8th Aug, 2012
  • offline last seen Apr 22nd, 2019

Brian Jacko


T
Source

My Little Pony Friendship is Magic has become an obsession in my life and I have lost focus about what is truly important, until one day, I am met face to face with Rainbow Dash, and she has a very special message and an important mission for me.

Chapters (5)
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!
Comments ( 70 )

I enjoyed it, it had a good message. I was rather nervous reading this at first, I was a tad worried this was going to be a religion bashing fic. I hope you continue writing. Although if I may make a suggestion? Please double space your work. It makes it easier to read.

3040167 Thanks for the kind words and the fav! I will do my best to continue to write. Doing the double spacing might make me cringe a bit, but I understand it would be easier to read. I can't make any promises on that. :twilightblush:

Praise the Lord and pass the ponies! :pinkiehappy:

I can't imagine what this story is actually about, do I dare delve in to find out? :rainbowhuh:

Such a good story. Love the message too! Praise the Lord forever and always. :twilightsmile:

3040421 "For God so loved the world that He gave His only begotten Son, that whoever believes in Him shall not parish but have eternal life." John 3:16.

Jesus died on the cross to save all of mankind from sin. He did because he loves you and always will. Like in this story when Jesus said "I am the ultimate sacrifice for sin" it's completely true. He was beaten, spit upon, and nailed to the cross for you. It's not too late to accept him as your Lord and Savior, if you do you will spend the rest of your life with him in paradise. It's never too late.

3040454

I was actually just talking about the vague description. :trixieshiftleft:

3040421 Go for it! :pinkiehappy:


3040454 Amen! Thank you for throwing that verse in there. Thanks for the fav as well as the kind and encouraging words! I'm glad you enjoyed the story and the message! :heart:

3040478 Oh...well still check out the story. It has a very good message. :twilightsmile:

I.... Um...
That was nice.
I mean, I cried and had many a feels. It was a wonderful message to be had, and I wish I had the talent to express that in a more poetic way.
Instead...
"Thou shalt love the Lord thy God with all thy heart, and with all thy soul, and with all thy strength, and with all thy mind; and thy neighbour as thyself." Luke 10:27
I think that's a good verse to end on. :twilightsmile:

my god.....this just crossed a new line of pathetic.

3040939 That's a wonderful verse, and it does fit perfectly with the end! Thank you for reading and for the fav! :scootangel:

3040966 I am always open to criticism of my stories, but openly trashing someone's work does not interest me, nor is it very Brony like of you to say such a thing. Remember, you're in a fandom that preaches love and tolerance to all...I don't think it's appropriate for you to go around saying something is pathetic or it sucks when someone worked hard to create something even if you don't like or agree with it. Just keep that in mind.

My eyes hurt. Please, please double-space your work before placing it online. It works with books, where pages and ink add to the cost of publishing a work, but indenting just looks bad on web pages. I tried to read it, and got a rather painful headache. I will say this... your two opening 'paragraphs' need some work. They're very dull, I hate to say it. It's basically some guy, who we have no emotional attachment to yet (too early in the fic for that to have formed), blathering in a big lump of text about his opinions on MLP. Honestly, I could get that from someone's blog, if I cared to look (and I don't, because those blogs are generally really boring). Past that, it starts to look better, but the headaches got worse. Break it up a little, please.

3041269 I understand your complaints. If I am struck with any ideas how to make a story better or to spruce up a certain section, then I usually go back right away and try to add or take out things depending on what I'm feeling. I did rush through the opening a bit as you can tell. Someone also brought up the double spacing issue. If I get the time and actually feel the motivation, I might double space it because it is proper and it should be done. I would also have to double space the rest of my stories too. It's just too time consuming right now and I have so many ideas running through my head. Thank you for taking time to read and comment.

3041032 yes and i am very sorry i am in the wrong......i suck (no sarcasm intended)

3041803 It's ok! I am pleased that you were able to humble yourself and admit your mistake. We all make mistakes and I have done and said some pretty stupid things that I should not have said because I can be a bit compulsive sometimes. No hard feelings here. Have a Pinkie Pie hug and feel the love! :heart::pinkiehappy:

3042914 Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the fav as well! :heart::scootangel:

I, too, have become pretty obsessed over the show. Truth be told, I'm called to ministry in Brazil, and I won't be getting anywhere by obsessing over this show. I don't think I'll stop watching it, but I think it's time for me to finish my fanfiction and stop writing the stuff. Y Thank you for shedding the light on this. I don;t normally read stories on fimfiction.net, but I did happen to read this one, and it came at just the right time. Thanks, man. :scootangel:

3045134 You're welcome! It is always possible to teach Biblical moral lessons through the show though. I would hate to leave this show myself because it is such a good show, but if you ever feel called to leave it to focus on other things, then I will encourage you to follow your gut feeling because God might be calling you to something even greater! :pinkiehappy:

3045134 Wow, fancy running into you here. Brian did good, huh. Did you get my messages?

3045445

I did. You might wanna check your inbox. I've been SUPER busy lately and haven't had time to respond:facehoof:, but I finally got around to it. :scootangel:

3041803
'Ahem'... time to write to Princess Celestia? :twilightsmile:

3059949 I do love to write letters to the Princess in many of my stories, but I think it was a better idea to go with praying to Jesus instead of writing a letter to Princess Celestia with this one. :coolphoto: :scootangel:

3060341
oh no doubt! I was just havin a little fun with the guy... :derpytongue2:

'taps fingers together'

...hmm.... I am conflicted with this one...

on one hand, I am skeptical when it comes to placing Jesus in any fictional story because there's always the danger of misrepresenting the Lord our God with our imperfect words. Another is that we may have Him performing certain tasks or do something in the story that may seem very touching but in reality, especially if it doesn't align with the Bible, He might not even agree with it.

THAT being said, I can't deny that I don't have my own little desires and wishes that I would love to see being fulfilled. But I dare not bring them to Jesus because a part of me feels that the matter would be silly and petty, not worth the attention of an Almighty God who holds the world in palm of His hand.

What I'm trying to say is... your story touched a spot I didn't expect.

The part where you had to sacrifice Rainbow Dash I completely expected it and thought it was just going to be an Abraham and Isaac moment where God or an angel comes to stop you. But that speech about idols in life hit home and eerily made me remember the real dangers of allowing something into your life and having it overshadow Jesus's love for us. Not just MLP but relationships, games, career, alcohol, drugs, pornography... and it is hard to sacrifice the things you love most, that comfort you in your darkest moments when the world seems like a senseless place to live in. But if only we knew just how much more we gain from Christ and that His love is more than enough, we would give it up in less than a heartbeat.

That's where the part of being in Heaven with our Lord and receiving your just reward comes in. Though I still stand by my view that it will never happen, the thought of having the characters we've come to love and cherish be with us for eternity is emotionally tugging. And even if it's just fantasy, I can't help but smile at the idea of it being a reality. Imagine, living, talking, innocent ponies sharing a Garden of Eden life with humans, like little ponified angels that God created just to bring joy to His precious children... Like I said, one of those silly ideas I don't like asking our Lord for, what with far more important things happening in the world, a request like that seems selfish and childish on my part. But, there's that small part of me that asks 'what if...?' :pinkiesad2:

I guess I do like this story afterall...

3065588 I'm pretty sure the Bible says that He cares about our every need and desire that we have in our hearts. "Cast your burden on the LORD, and He will sustain you; He will never permit the righteous to be moved." I think God wants to hear everything you have to say. He cares about the greatest details and even the ones we feel aren't that important. Tell Him all about it!

We are only given such small details about how wonderful Heaven will be. We see cute and colorful little cartoon ponies and get so inspired by them. We want them to be real, but I don't know what will happen. God is creative and he has a great sense of humor, but if colorful little cartoon ponies happen in Heaven or not, know that life will be perfect and there will not be an ounce of sorrow or regret when we enter Heaven. Our minds can't even begin to comprehend how great it will be since this is God we are dealing with here.

Thanks for reading and for the kind words. :coolphoto:

*cue snowflake* YEAHHHHH CHRISTIANITY AND YEAHHH RAINBOW DASH

3066068
Ah yes, heaven will indeed be perfect. I was expressing a moment of weakness I guess all of us tend to feel every now and then...

I can't really talk to anyone about this new found passion of mind as... well, you know how most of the world think of guys who are into MLP, and none of my friends or family members are into the show. Even my best mate can't seem to shake off the view that the brony community has a bad reputation and isn't keen on watching the show because of that, despite understanding that it has good animation, storyline and voice-acting...

...and sometimes, it sucks feeling like a rejected weirdo just because you like something society deems that is not meant for you... as bad as being a brony is, it's worse being a Christian brony...

3071406 This is what I am going through as well. I believe that I have lost quite a few friends and contacts that I have made because I am involved with this fandom. They didn't tell me that MLP was the problem, but I assume it was because when they find out or I tell them that I love MLP, they seem to cut off contact with me pretty darn fast. You can't blame them all though. You don't have to go far to find just how huge the clop craze is. Just look at what is "currently" the number one group is for this site, and take a look at some of the other popular groups that follow up behind that.

I agree with your statements. Being a Brony can turn other Christians away from you because they think that you're weird and that you download pony porn all day, and being a Christian can turn Bronies away from you because they think Christianity is wrong or offensive. It's often a lose-lose situation, but I'm not going to get discouraged by it, and I will do my best to keep writing. :twilightsmile:

Wow. Just, wow. This story is amazing. It's really thought provoking and practically explains everything that is wrong with the FIM fanbase from the mouth of Rainbow Dash no less. And I like how she mentions the fact that fans frequently make her out to be a lesbian simply because she's a tomboy and has a rainbow colored mane. But more importantly it made me examine my own life and all the idols I've placed before Christ lately. And MLP has been one of them.

3097613 Thanks for reading and for the kind words! I think each and every one of us has had idols in their life time, and most of us will probably always struggle with them. He'll always come back for his sheep that have wandered away from Him, just like Jesus said in the parable of the lost sheep. :heart:

What's this? A fanfic that is leaving me here with actual emotions? And a fanfic that combines religion and fiction without it being corny? What the heck did I stumble into? Whatever it was, it's amazing.

3104189 Thanks! I really appreciate that! :pinkiehappy:

3040454 One of Jesus' parables mentions a man who hired people to work for him. All day, until the work and the day was done, the man paid people to work for him. Some of those who had come first were upset that those who had come late were paid as much as those who came before them.

The message is the same as yours. If you truly accept Christ Jesus into your heart and beg His forgiveness, He will save you from the fire.

If you don't believe me, remember what happened to the robber who went up on a cross with Him. One of the criminals mocked Him, saying that if Jesus was really God's son, He would save them. The other man, however, rebuked him, saying that they, the criminals, deserved their punishment, but that Christ had done nothing wrong. He then asked Jesus to remember him when He came into his kingdom. In turn, Christ said, "Amen, I tell you, today you will be with Me in Paradise."

As for MLP, I try hard not to let it rule my life. I have no idols (though obviously I love the show), and my faith has helped me immensely, even when things go badly for me.

This was a great fic and it remind me of what I should really be doing in life rather than what I am doing with my life as of this moment... It was a sad truth that I myself struggle with a problem just as this person faces and I am so happy I came across this! It's reminded me that ponies aren't the only good thing in life and as a fellow christian I should be spending more time with the lord than I should be with any other thing. I sometimes struggle with temptation and disobedience with my parents but that nagging feeling that when I pass Jesus will be there to say "I don't know you, you are no child of mine." scares me and I pray that nothing bad happens between me and the show... But in the end I will stand up for the faith in christ my messiah! btw it made me cry :( :pinkiesad2:

3168293 Thank you. I'm really glad that you liked this read. Hopefully, you can find ways to enjoy both God and this show together just like I mentioned near the end of the story. Ponies and God do not have to be two totally separate things. Put them together and connect the show to Biblical stories and examples. The show already preaches many Christian morals. :twilightsmile:

It was not the best written but its message was in the right place... Praise the Lord our God. King of the universe.
I've forgotten much:pinkiesad2:

3256479 Thank you. Getting the right message across in my Christian fics is so very important to me. I think I worry about the message of the story way more than how well the stories are written, but I have been improving with my writings and have come a long way. Thanks for reading. :heart:

3256551 No problem I just wish you could of made the characters in character honestly:applejackunsure:
As it is it looks like God made angels to look like them. Plus going into having them in heaven lessened the impact.
Though I do like the similarity to that one story where that man took his son up the mountain under the command of God.

3256574 I didn't want Rainbow Dash to be arrogant, impatient, or hot headed. That was going through my mind, trust me. I have her behave differently because she is a gift from God and I have her as this younger more innocent version of Rainbow Dash. I know the speaking roles were a bit awkward. I actually thought about using Fluttershy or Applejack instead, but I ended up going with Rainbow Dash for other reasons, mostly personal. :twilightsmile:

3256591 completely understandable. I would of captured the core of her personality is some way. But that's just an artistic choice.:rainbowwild:

I almost got teary eyed from this. Thank you for this great reminder in such a beautifully written story on how to not worship idols. Right now, I'm trying to have a more powerful relationship with Christ and this story helped a lot. I still love My Little Pony and all the loveable characters, but Jesus Christ always comes first. Thank you, my friend. God bless. :pinkiehappy:

This read reminded me when I recently decided to not put my whole life's worth on My Little Pony. I realized that I wasn't spending as much time with God because of this beautiful, yet earthly thing. Thankfully, I now spend more time with the Lord, though I still very much enjoy My Little Pony.

You sir, deserve all the kudos in the world. This was beautiful. The Lord has shown me things about my life through this. I'm getting better about not making this show my idol, but I will work much harder. Thank you, sir.

Login or register to comment
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!