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Rainbow Dash has always been loyal to her friends and Equestria. Such loyalty was unmatched, legendary even. That is, until the day she discovers a strange creature lying in the Everfree Forest. Her friendships are put to the test, when instead of simply handing the creature over to the princess, she finds herself caring for it in secret.

She soon learns that some secrets come with high costs. But is it really worth betraying a friend's life even if it means remaining loyal to the ones you already have?

Rated Teen for possible violence just in case. Random tag because I have a good idea where the story is headed, but I haven't worked out all the details.

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 76 )

Fascinating, I will have to keep an eye on this.

Looks promising. The premise sure is eye-catching, though the grammar could use some work, and the story itself has a lot of potential... it remains to be see how you handle all the standard cliches and pitfalls of an HiE. I'd recommend finding a decent pre-reader and/or editor to help you out. If you do, you should be golden.

Oh, one more thing: the word "forest" only has one "r" in it.

Will you release one chapter every day ? Or more ? Or less ? :rainbowhuh:

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I'll try and update as often as I can, but right now i'd say once or twice a week

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Thanks for your input! Do you by any chance know of someone or where I could find someone to review/edit my story? I'm kind of new to the whole thing :derpyderp2:

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No problem at all. There are actually various groups on this site dedicated to helping you find a very special some-pre-reader. Here's a few you should look at joining:

Proofreaders and People willing to proof-read

Looking for Editors

author help (a group made to help new and old authors with fic's)

Author Support

i like where this is going:twilightsmile:

A... twin? Of Chaos? Hmmmm...

Wow can't wait for the next chapter :rainbowlaugh:

1224227 If you have any trouble finding an editor, I'm willing to have a crack at it, I dabble in editing here and there, but nothing major; plus I seem to have quite a lot of spare time at the moment, so if you're interested, just message me with any details and whatnot and I'll help how I can. :twilightsmile:

MMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAR!!!!!!

ooooh this fic just got interesting:pinkiehappy:
i cant wait to see what happens next:twilightsmile:

this is too short for once a week i need MOAR

How is Rainbow going to pick up the diamond?

Guess we'll find out!

Eldritch creature seance powers GO! :trollestia:

Very good!
MOAR!

I DEMAND MMMOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAR!!!!!

Did... you just make a Sonic crossover?

1400973 Sort of... it's more the concept of the Chaos Emeralds than the actual thing, so there will probably be some differences

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Is there Seven of them?

1401386 Well, if the Chaos Emerald is /that/ big, it's more of a Master Emerald. Don't you agree?

As you can't just rip pure Chaos off of it's shell. :3

I like this story, its a nice story. I WANT MOAR

1403401 Well, it's not really a crossover. There are some similarities but no Sonic characters :twilightsheepish:

LESS !
...see what I did there ? :rainbowwild:

Sounds like a reverse My Little Dashie... Interresting.

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My thoughts exactly. Ouch @_@

HA... i can't wait to see where this goes!

Intriguing... despite the ominous descriptions of what's to come, I am eager to see how this little relationship plays out.

Uh oh... last time we saw Dashie bite something in the show was... well:

images.wikia.com/mlp/images/8/8e/Rainbow_Dash_Biting_Wood_S2E3.png


Hope she's just giving him a warning nip, or he can probably say goodbye to his whole arm.

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Now would those be the Jaws of Life or Death?

Great chapter, but I wish it was longer.

GOD DARN IT DASHIE!!! THOSE ARE NOT GUMMIE WORMS!!!

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:rainbowlaugh:

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It was originally going to be much longer, but I ended up rewriting it like three times

I hope she realizes that fingers are, by no means, edible to a pony.

I feel his pain, I too have been bit by a pony

Grrrr why do all the really great fics get to the really good parts, then taunt me with the whole not having another chapter thing?

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