• Member Since 9th Aug, 2012
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Brian Jacko


All ponies need to be shown kindness and love, and Fluttershy is no exception. After a traumatic experience, Fluttershy comes to see the only pony who made her feel safe in the past, and that pony would be you.

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Comments ( 40 )

Walls. Lots of them.

Break your paragraphs apart. Remember, always break into a new paragraph when someone new starts talking. As it is, this is painful to read.

Sounds interesting, I will read it tomorrow.

I loved it, way to go.

What a horrifying set of walls of text.
That was a very feels-inducing story, though. Fluttershy was a bit assertive but very sweet.

Man tears were she today:applecry:

:fluttercry: You beautiful bastard you! There isn't much in this world that easily brings tears to my eyes, but this story is now a part of that short list. Keep up the incredible work!

Well i read the first paragraph... it was 461 words long.:ajbemused:

Sounds good but the wall of text just ruins it for me. It made me stop reading the story. Sorry mate, i just can't read it like that.

Listen to 1341783 he is an author himself (and a damn good one). Break up the paragraphs.

*sniff**sniff* that was beautiful man I'm still crying manly tears now :fluttercry: are you going to do stories like this for the other ponies or no this the only one

Break up your paragraphs, please.

Holy wall of text batman!
I find this difficult to follow due to text wall. Please please break your paragraphs up and have a new line for every new speaker.
I'll add to my read later until then.
(Not ripping in to you, i'm just giving some friendly advice)

Manly tears, dude.... manly tears.... :fluttercry:

Despite the huge wall of text, this is fantastic. I even cried at the end.:fluttershysad:

:pinkiegasp: holy moly thats a lot of holeys- I mean text walls! Split your paragraphs apart and I'll read it.

Despite the wall of paragraphs, this was a beautifully written story. There's a lot that I want say about this story, but all I can say is that it's a beautiful story and one of those fan fictions that I won't forget.

I haven't cried this much in months until I read this story. I'm just glad that I came across this story; manly tears were shed in the reading of this story:fluttercry:.

Whoa whoa whoa! Wall of text! I'll watch this for a while and read if you decide to split it, but I am not reading that.

Normally I would be discouraged to read a wall of text like this, but your the exception.

This in all regards is a very heartwarming, beautifully Shakespearean sort of tragic piece of writing. The premise alone is heart-wrenching,:fluttercry:
but making this a Fluttershy origin story just notched it up to well over balling-your-eyes-out-crying levels of tragedy.:fluttershbad:

You sir, have made such a masterpiece of a Fanfic that this should be canon. This does have the requirements and premise (I think) to become a 22-minute episode, and this would be a great leap of character development for her, and this would push the boundaries of the writing in the show. But the most important reason why this feels so canon to me is because this feels so real. I can imagine Fluttershy going through all of that, and I can feel every single emotion that come from both of them. By the end, all I did was :fluttershbad:! Seriously I was crying.

So in highest regards. Thanks for making a beautiful tragedy. Now would you excuse me, I'll be needing a moment.

I was kinda surprised I died... I was liking my character... but that's the least of my problems... this has gotten manly tears out of me... at least, I hope they're manly...:fluttershysad:

What saddens me most is that my fave pony got left alone for a while...:fluttercry:

This had funny moments, though. Especially the sneeze part! :trollestia:

What I love most about this though, is that it feels like a prequel of FIM, or at least for Flutters. It explains a lot, and it's believable.

Thank you for making this MASTERPIECE... now, if you'll excuse me, I have some glass in my eye. :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

Wait a minute... my eyes, my beautiful eyes... :facehoof:

I decided to read it anyway.

The wall of text was the biggest my gripe. Its annoying to read, especially during conversations, and very easy to lose your place. My second problem was the dialogue. Some of it felt somewhat artificial, as it was more straight to the point, information unloading with a lack of a lot of the smaller, less important details and beating around that make conversation feel natural. Third and final point is the descriptions. To put it simply, you tell, but don't show. I've got a blog post going into a little more detail about what it is and how to use it right here.

I didn't read it read it all the way through, but that was all I saw that could constitute as flaws. Previous points aside, it was a very touching little piece. Good work.

I'm not gonna cry. I'm not gonna..... WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH!!!!!!
*continues to cry*

Even thought it was a huge wall of text there I thoroughly enjoyed it. This was the first fic that has legitimatly made me cry. :fluttercry:

I don't give much a shit about the wall of text. As long as it's a amazing story, It's gets my MisterGTFO Seal of approval.

Don't let it fool you, it's the good one not the "your fic sucks" one.

Read this while listening to today he stoped loving you.
Bad bad idea. :raritycry:

This is an AMAZING fix! :twilightsmile: The only thing besides "My Little Dashie" I've read that has ever made me cry. I really don't mind the walls of text. Overall feelings:
Sooooo saaaad!!! :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::raritycry: :raritydespair:

i had someone who was dearest to me die and it was my nana i miss u:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::raritycry::raritycry::applecry::applecry::applecry::pinkiesad2::fluttershysad:

I am so very sorry that I have not been able to keep up with responding to all the comments here. I have been so very busy with writing new stories and responding to other comments from my other stories, that I really didn't have much time to post my responses to this story here.

I thank you all for the kind words and for taking time to read!

Good lord! I had to hold the feels! I loved this and this could be a prequel for fluttershy... I will engrave this amazing tragedy in my memory. Thumbs up man.

3222105 Thanks! I'm so happy it was a good read for you! :pinkiehappy:

You son of a bitch you made me feel again!:raritycry::fluttershbad::raritydespair:
Good story.




The Fruits of the Spirit
and Self-Control

3677082 I hate to be nit-picky, but it is "The Fruit of the Spirit" (singular). It's a package deal. :pinkiehappy:

This is the most heartwarming story I've ever read :raritydespair:

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