Twilight Sparkle uses a teleport spell and goes into the future. It works.
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I can't tell if this ending is happy or bitter sweet.... odd. But good read.
All those years of being pushed around had hardened his heart...
On a more serious note,
This was an interesting read. I say that because the concept of the story immersed me, as in, I loved what you did.
The structure of the story was a little rigid, but a good editor could help you smooth some edges. I felt like there were some unnecessary narratives. Then again, I like a more dialogue-driven story, and some prefer explanatory narratives.
The interaction between future Spike and Twilight was neat, and I enjoyed that part the most, especially Twilight's sudden realization and subsequent question to, Spike the Wise (his inner baby dragon being evident with this name
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All in all, a nice read. I liked it.
I've never read a one-shot quite like this, I don't know what do feel but that makes it even better. 4/5 stars.
Eh. Decent story. I feel like you could have played up the ennui of being 2000 years in the future a bit more, especially with Spike.
I really enjoyed reading this story. It was very well written and went in a novel direction, especially for a time traveling tale. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful idea.
The hearts of dragons burn bright with love...
Me gusta
These were the words of a masterpiece. I have enjoyed every second of reading this book. Bravo, sir! You deserve a like and a favorite!
Not bad at all, dude.
I quite enjoyed this.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I liked it. I could see ways that it could be better, but I liked it. Seven mustaches of 10 my good sir.
-Clay the Draconequus
I think the idea of Twilight travelling into the future could've been fleshed out more but other than that good story
I love the concept of no hoard = no growth, it makes way too much sense.
Good one. Nice ending. I wonder if the old Spike had same experience after Twi casted that Time Spell, probably yes since he remembered that experiment.
That was... nice. Okay, really nice.
There was only one hulking red beast, unless they changed the episode.
That needs a question mark instead of a period.
Extra space in 'you've'.
Seems more like a question than a statement.
I have no idea how to react to this, there are too many emotions swimming through me. So for now I'll just settle on crying.
"Vein," not "vain."
Also "dragons" (plural) rather than "dragon's" (possessive).
Having said that -- really good story.
I am glad it ended on a hopeful note.
Hmm, I shall have to read...
And seeif the dragons eventually ate all the ponies.
3815978 Two thousand years since he last saw her not necessarily from the point of origin of the spell.
I've been thinking about this story quite a bit since I read it. It's really grown on me.
I love how it implies Spike never grew because the ponies' latent specism, even Twilight's, never allowed him to have much self worth. We know he's grown a little bit because he's not a hatchling any more, he has some self worth, but in the present time of the story he still sees himself as "the number one assistant", he's still beneath Twilight and doing the same job at the library.
It's a bit of a neat character study of Spike. I like how the dragon aging gimmick is used to show what his life was actually like in Ponyville.
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Someone who Spike finds annoying, either a dragon or a pony, who might play a trick on him. Probably a pony, given that he believed Twilight might be Rook.
Or changeling.
3816783 YOU ARE FUCKING EVERYWHERE ON THIS SITE!!!!! WTF!?!?!
FantabulusticcherryontopupendousdeepfriedanddippedInchocolate.
Someone please try an separate these words, it would make my day.
This characterization of Spike is really interesting. Being pushed away after Twilight became princess hardened him up and made him much colder overall, but still caring. I wish more stories made him interesting like this, because he's a much better character when taken seriously and written about in this way.
The story was really enjoyable, and interesting to see how Spike would be in the future after Twilight and the rest of the mane 6 would pass away.
Nice work!
DJRD
I find this both strangely compelling and beautiful. Thank you for writing it.
3818506 I agree he does pop up a lot
This was a lovable little story and at first I thought this was withholding its sad tag and it did feel sad in some parts of the story but the ending made it really sweet.
Great job I enjoyed it.
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I bet you I could do that too, but the trick is, you have to comment on every page you ever visit. Not too many people have that kind of patience.
I salute you Skeeter.
Excellent story. I really liked it. The way that you portrayed Spike was really unique; I've never seen anything like it.
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Indeed. Or... I try to be...
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WRONG.
I only ever comment after I read. In reality, I've looked at more things possible.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Hey, not bad. I liked how the focus on Spike and Twilight overshadowed whatever was going on in the future. We got a few hints, but noting concrete. All the better to imagine for ourselves, I suppose. Left me hoping that their relationship would get better.
3819088 Erm... I didn't mean to imply you didn't read stuff... Sheesh. I've favorited 2,280 fanfics, all of which I've read. I just comment on so few of them... I have 1,222 fics in read later, and there are probably more fics I've read that never made it to either list... I was just saying you commented a lot... I could do it too, but I take a huge amount of my time simply reading the fanfics, And I love to leave more meaningful reviews than "wow I really liked it". (Not that there's anything wrong with that) But I do on occasion to something I REALLY liked... And am moved to write words of praise. Sorry.... I didn't mean to insult you.
More like trying to compliment...
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Oh, no... You just forgot that portion of how I am.
My mistake.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I'm can't help but imagine old Spike with the voice of the lion-turtle
Loved it. There needs to be more stories like this on this site than half of the garbage(The clop is referred to here) that's here. But that's just my personal opinion.
3818541 Fantabulustic cherry on top stupendous deep fried and dipped In chocolate. Is that right?
loved the story but kind of sad too
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
3819232 I feel like smacking myself in the face right now.... I remember one of your praise comments vaguely. But what I was trying to say was that I almost never leave comments unless it gave me that level of awe. Not that you didn't write longer, more descriptive comments. I must fail at communication. Sorry about the misunderstanding.
I almost cired
Vague, enigmatic... but quite nice. Simple, too. Twilight goes to the future. That's it. No messing up, no being stuck, just going and seeing Spike. And it works so well, too.
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And this piddly detail is important... why? Are you trying to correct me for the sake of correcting me?
Pick something less inane if you want to do that.
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I can't help but read your comments in Discord/Q's voice....
Almost cried
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That's because I'm awesome.
3818541 fantabulistic cherry ontop upendous deep fried and dipped in chocolate
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I think it's the profile pic.
Yep, definitely the profile pic....
"The one who stands shortest will always stand tallest when all fall."
I was hoping for a more creative name, like Spike the Nameless or Spike the Last. Both of these names give off a aura of strangeness. The Nameless could be because once one truly is seen, they lose their name. And the last because he was all that was left. Spike The Wise just sounds generic.
3818506 you must be new here.