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Draconian Soul
Proof that I'm not dead. I was just in a slumber, waiting for reason to rise again. I might have found that reason.
Draconian Soul
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11k of pure awesomeness.
Always fun to see a Sparity clopfic done right.
AND THAT PICTUREEEEEEEE.
~Skeeter The Lurker
About time.
Huhuhahahaha, i must say interesting.
Damn................just.............damn, now that is how a Sparity clop fic is done!
I don't normally read pony Mature-Sex fics. However, the concept here called to me, so I gave it a look. Very well written and very in character.
I can't wait to read this.
Dat cover art:
Dat fic~ enjoyaccess.info/wp-content/plugins/rss-poster/cache/da2ba_6.gif
Yeah Rarity! Taking advantage of a little kid for your own sexual gain!
>>>Rarity stood frozen, shocked by the accusation, and the suddenness of it. “Twilight! That is a terrible thing to say! Spike is not a pet!”>>>
"A pet would never be intelligent enough to handle complex tasks, Twilight!" Rarity huffed. "Spike is a slave, completely different!"
Twilight decided at that moment that she should just stop trying to make sense of all the crazy ponies in Ponyville.
Pretty sure I know what the rest of that image is. Thanks, IR.
AH! YOU CLEVER SON OF A GUN! This is genius!
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Done right? Um... you do realize she just basically molested him, right? Like... guilted him into doing something he didn't fully understand, all but ordered him to continue, and manipulated him into a sexual act? I mean, that he enjoyed it doesn't really enter into it. These actions are the damn near exact actions taken by a pedophile when he molests a kid. Spike said no multiple times, but she used his crush to her own ends. Even if a kid has an orgasm while being molested... it's still molestation. Done right would have been more... well, consensual.
On top of the issues with the premise, there were some grammar derps, singular/plural mistakes, a tense conflict once or twice. Probably needed another editing sweep.
3918380
True enough. But they felt in character to me.
Also, I'm no editor. I never was.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3918380
Jake, lets talk pony for a bit:
Rarity is a unicorn that wants to be considered a high society pony, now when you look at most pedophiles, most of them actually come from wealth and high class. Considering the slave like mentality we have seen in the show, this works into the mind of people (Rarity) and they find there status being able to get away with things. Rarity will led Spike around by his dick, a sad fact that is true either people belive it or not. Using him to get herself off is a common thing for a master to treat a slave but with Rarity's generousity she got him off in return. She cares for him but knows very well she can get away with leading him around and using him as she sees fit.
tl;dr Rarity can use Spike like she did in this story because a darker look at her generosity characterization allows it.
You can argue the pedo-nature of it and how it's a world of pastel colored horses and dragons and such, but it would only beat around the bush.
“It can’t be that causing
"It can't be that bad," causing
So aside from that little error breaking my mind for a sec, dude! The whole things was great and awesome, but holy hell the ending, best thing ever. Spike's face when Rarity made that comment in the new episode good.
I appear to be the only person at the moment who appreciates that Spike and Twilight set Rarity up.
Oh and for my comment on this fic. When you first talked to me about the idea, I blew it off because of 'ew, Sparity' however I will not deny the characterization you used for them. it was spot on and while some may not agree, I don't think you could have nailed it any better. I may not be the biggest fan of Spike but out of the millions of Sparity fics on this site, you did one that is right. So, take my fav, and my like, and knew this will most likely be the only Sparity story I ever read without vomiting
i finally got it at the end when spike and twi were talking it sounded like they planned the whole thing except for the sex part
3918543 i didnt comment as fast as you but i saw it at the end also
3918534
Eh, I guess you're right. I think it's just my usual distaste for dark clop that is coloring my opinions.
Carry on.
This seemed a little... dark.
3918380
Yeah, what he said.
I don't think I was okay with this.
Not bad, not bad at all. Like and fave from me.
Also, dat cover art!
>“It can’t be that causing Spike to once again drift into a love-struck trance
did a quotation mark and several words vanish?
3918380
When Jake The (motherfucking) Army Guy says 'no' then you know your clop has gone off the deep end.
3918534
I'm sorry, but can we really not see Rarity understanding 'no' means 'no'? Can we really... No? Porn logic?
Fuck I hate those two words next to each other.
Look, justify it all you want, and justify it as well you do, it was still... utterly disturbing, and very callous about the pedophilic, rape-tastic subject matter.
yay
let me guess, Spike rips rarity into pieces to get at the gem, Man, I'm so good at guessing plot!
3919053
Now debating on whether to add "motherfucking" to my user name...
3919127
- comes to mind.
Do I feel uncouth introducing another, more lighthearted story to this comments section?
Ask me again in a few minutes when I stop laughing.
There's a typo in the chapter title (or perhaps a misused word). It should be "whetting", as in sharpen, not drench in liquid (unless that is an absolutely horrible pun, in which case, shame on you, author!
)
wow
This was really disturbing, why did you have to make Rarity evil? She isn't eveil!
Yes I know Spike and Twilight kinda set it up but it's still wrong.
ummm...dang!
3919127
Wait, it wasn't already? Well, I be damned!
3919053
3918380
God.... fucking.... dammit....
That was never my intention for the story. I made Rarity manipulative, yes, but I never wanted this story to be viewed as a pedophile/rape story. I tried to keep it from that ground as much as I possibly coud, but it's apparent that didn't go so hot...
Actually, my main intention was to make something that Pia would like, so this really shouldn't get me as down as it is, but shit....
3919954 Don't let an opinion (of two very well-known members) get you down. This story was AWESOME, and you better not let them get to you. I, for one, definitely viewed this story as more manipulation than rape. He wanted the gem, and he has to work for it. She's just using him again, just like every other single time. I may not be well known, but I know enough to knoaw to stay true to myself. If this is your true self, stick with it.
Keep writing. I can't wait for more
DAT SNACK... dame, that was a good clopfic, done the right way
3919954 You never defined a age, so of course you're going to get the whinney Pedo people, even if you did you'd have probably gotten a few. Spike has a direct and complete understanding of sex, which basically shows that he's at least at point in his physical maturity that sex is considered applicable. Hell, you basically have it say that he masturbates, which isn't something a child does. You have to understand some people aren't exactly the best at figuring out characterization and events that aren't spoon fed to them, which really is no fault of your own.
Honestly, especially with that ending, I can't see it as anything but Spike playing the bit and manipulating Rarity a tad, which is kind of awesome in this context. Spike never said no, he was hesitant, but Rarity didn't force him into doing anything, he did it of his own will. They're basically grasping at straws to try and make a rape/molestation claim without actually knowing what those words mean. Spike made his own choices, period.
P.S. Indecent Exposure, which is about as close to anything as Rarity came, is not a form of molestation, which requires forced unwanted physical contact of a sexual nature. Isn't it funny how the law defines things and words have actual specific meanings?
3918380
its a fic... nothing more nothing less
the whole sparity could be accused of the same "flaw" spike is a minor (depends of the fic) but thats all it is, a story. in this case Rarity goes extra bit and as you said forces spike to "eat" her... is it wrong? as per story no... will i have issue with it if it was real? yes... but it isn't
3919053
If I may:
Let's take a look at the new episode Simple Ways for a minute shall we.
The main premise is... Rarity wants something, she wants to affection of Trenderhoof. Considering he's more into Applejack, he's basically and subtly saying 'no' to Rarity. Now what does Rarity try to do in return? She tries to manipulate it and playing to what Trenderhoof loves. Do you see the connection I am making?
3919954 I'd say the story was well written. Here's a cookie
What do I have to say about the concept and morals?
Absolutely nothing.
What I do have to say is that I read it and enjoyed being sucked into the story.
You can take that any way you want to.
I read it beginning to end, and still felt somewhat satisfied.
Perverted? Im not sure how to answer.
3919954
Looking back, I realize now that I came off a bit too mean-spirited. I apologize for that.
I really do think you nailed Rarity's character in the beginning bits. Her struggle between selfish and generous was really well done, constantly justifying her using Spike as "Oh, well, he doesn't mind." Really felt like Rarity Takes Manehatten there for a bit.
If I was to give some constructive criticism, I think it would be to remove Spike's hesitancy earlier. As it stands, he only really gets into it once he is getting pleasure. You mention that he doesn't mind the taste too much, and that would have been the best point for him to come around, as it were. Realize that this isn't such a bad thing he's experiencing, and he's giving the lady he loves a lot of pleasure. It would have played into his character of wanting nothing more than to please Rarity, and would have alleviated a lot of the overly-pedo undertones. Spike is a bit uneven in the show when it comes to his age and maturity, which is actually the strength of his character, I feel; he can have childish shenanigans one minute, then turn around and play the straight man for Twilight. If you had made Spike get into the act before he actually felt any pleasure, it would have more seemed that he was a willing participant than a victim.
Sorry again if I made you feel like shit. That was not my intent. I've recently blogged about some really horrible clopfics, and this was far from that.
3920861
At least I got that much. I probably should have seen it coming though. I try to avoid justifying any form of molestation in any of my fics, so it kinda hits hard if that task fails. It's something I try not to be associated with, ya know.
No worries though. I've gotten over it. I'll take whatever comes next in strides, and pray that whenever I do fics again, this doesn't come off like that...
.... Good Writing.
I happened to be listening to this song as I was reading...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lkzMXiIcc0g
Yeah... I'm a Bad person.
This was a rather enjoyable little fic if I do say so myself... Very well done and tantalizing!!!
3920341
Because love triangle equals rape.
Yeah, no.
3919954
If it makes you feel better - and it really, really should - my opinion was why *I* felt it made me highly uncomfortable subjectively and peronally, not why this was a bad story.
Not once did I criticize your grammar or dialogue. Objectively, this fic is pretty damn okay.
Did it still make me uncomfortable as all fuck? Yes. Does that mean you should feel awful about it? Not really. It had to be written well enough for me to develop such a strong opinion of it, which is a win in and of itself.
You're a damned good writer Draconian, when you want to be, but risque has 'risk' right in the name.
Oh you posted it. Nice.
