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Life at Crystal Prep is tough, but so is Sunset. The school demands the best from the best, and she’s happy to prove she’s the cream of the crop. Having an amazing girlfriend doesn’t hurt either.
Even if thinking too hard about that girlfriend does.
An entry in the Sunset x Villains Crystal Prep contest, Sci-Fi Contest III, and RockstarRaccoon’s final Crackfic Storm. Mostly to see if I could. Rated Teen for brief mentions of assorted work-safe bodily fluids.
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I was ready for a "I love my multiple-possibilities-at-once girlfriend", not Changeling-based corporate. The Rainbooms IP thing was too real.
Still, this was enjoyable in its own weird dystopian way, and very worthy of being part of three contests at once.
Well done.
Is... that the Matrix filtered through a used cyberpunk coffee filter, EqG, and my nightmares?
Or possibly just Abacus's Basilisk.
This story is both weird and funny...and it lives up to the promise of the "science fiction" label.
I think most of all, this story shows that by writing characters well in a way that instantly works and keeps working, you can really get a story off to a good start and keep it running. (Even a story that spends some time being oddly surreal in some ways, as this one does.)
I like how in the story's last part (SPOILERS!)
- you fill us in so efficiently on some backstory of how the world got this way
- you use details such as lighting and (bad) interior design to portray an environment that isn't really catering to HUMAN tastes and preferences, but nonetheless (with a few words about that view through the window!) you let us know that even if Sunset may feel trapped in a dystopia, it's a very LOCAL and possibly TEMPORARY situation for her.
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That, too, is a good story idea though...or at least part of one.
As expected from this particular Author, even if you first favourite and like the Story before actually reading it, it does not change the outcome.
This summarises Ultrakill's two moods better than I could and now I have to consider writing about Lemon playing that at some point. She'd probably like the soundtrack.
A nice short story, even if already dated in some respects (they have already gotten better at fingers). I've considered including AI in my own potential Sci-fi contest entry but the site doesn't really allow for what I'd have planned. It's a bit of a shame people are only exposed to the more limited and filtered writing applications, they'd be surprised by what can be achieved if you know where to look and ignore a few legal issues.
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I don't usually go for the school of sci-fi that holds up a stark mirror to reality, but that's how this one developed. Though "quantum-superposed girlfriend" is definitely a fascinating topic.
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Hang on, adding "Used Cyberpunk Coffee Filter" to Lemon's notebook. Though that may be more of an album title.
But yes, while I didn't mean to channel your nightmares specifically, that is a good summation of the story.
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Glad you enjoyed it on so many levels. And yeah, even when I write corpro-dystopian cyberpunk—but I repeat myself—I can't help but add a light at the end of the tunnel.
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Glad to hear I lived up to your expectations.
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Let's face it, all you'd have to tell Lemon is "Mankind is dead. Hell is full. Blood is fuel" and she'd spend the next four hours doing coin shots and combos. At minimum.
Also, I'd rather the only legal issues I ignore when writing be those relating to Hasbro's intellectual property.
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Actually, it's Blood first, then Hell. And wow I have to assume my previous comment was misinterpreted looking at the amount of dislikes. Unless some people are really big fans of Amazon.
As I was reading this, I couldn't help but get distracted by the idea that Sunset actually just had six girlfriends, which extended into the idea of an MLP version of The 100 Girlfriends Who Really, Really, Really, Really, Really Love You. Picture this: Cadance, still growing into her powers, accidentally gives Sunset 100 soulmates, and their shared love is what redeems her instead of the power of friendship. It'd have different vibes, since Sunset wouldn't be as much of a gigachad as Rentaro, at least at first. I'd read the hell out of that. Don't have the time to write it myself though, unfortunately.
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don't think you ever did in any of your stories.
outta my wait straight girl i'm aboutta get it
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Ignoring legal issues is a crime. You are endorsing crime. Why are you surprised that you're getting downvoted for endorsing crime?
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Writing fanfiction is already "ignoring legal issues" depending on how you look at it. A lot of things fall into a grey area. I wasn't suggesting anything actively illegal. The use of public proxies hosting scraped access keys is questionable, but the service providers themselves turn a blind eye to them and if it even was a crime it would be for the people hosting or scraping rather than for those using them.
Taking on three contests with one fic, you absolute madman
This is equal parts confusing, disturbing, and amusing. I was worried for a sec that Twilight had, erm, kicked the bucket and Sunset was in denial, hence the other Shadowbolts helping her through the process. I have a very dark mind, what can I say? :P Still a thought-provoking read; you did it again!
Feels unusually bleak for you. But admittedly I'm not in the best of moods lately, so that might be coloring my perspective.
Excellent story. Didn't expect the rather bleak turn at the end. I was half expecting a multiple secret girlfriends sort of thing.
One of these days I need to figure out a story to write with the Shadowbolts. Much like the ladies of Helltaker, there's a lot of personality and potential in them.
Also, like the cover.