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Meet Cyr. He's one of the last of his breed: A Changeling Behemoth, living battering rams that are selected and mutated from the worker caste of the Hive. Aged from centuries of labor and service to his Queen, he grows disgusted and weary of the Changeling's plots and malevolent attempts to feed on love, especially after his capture during the Canterlot wedding. Thus begins a new (and possibly more enjoyable) chapter of his existence.
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Very interesting...
Can't wait for more
Nice! You've earned a favorite. Also, props points for originality.
I kinda wondered if someone was gonna make something like this. I'll give it a shot, don't screw this up
You have my intrest.
Keep it coming.
You have my attention. Don't dissapoint.
tracking.
You have my interest. Treat it well and feed it regular chapters.
You might just get more than a reader out of me yet.
Hmm. Not bad. I'll be keeping an eye on this.
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Unfortunately with the amount of school work I have (why did I have to bucking take all AP classes this year?) and I'm working on a short one-shot atm (this story got delayed because of tag contradiction or whatever its called) so I might not get back to this story for a while (give or take a few days)
But don't worry. This will get my full attention after I finish that one-shot today.
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Yes, sir.
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Thanks bro!
I'll try not to let you guys down!
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My brain thanks you for the props.
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I'll try not to make a mess out of this
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I'll try to maintain that interest of yours
BTW, lovin that profile pic. I wish I could be that badass....
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Hmmmm...so if you're the tracker....then I must be the trackee?
The hunter will become the hunted tonight!
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Thanks man!
I like it
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Oh my Gosh! THE Hank J. Wimbleton? Liking my story? [faints]
1220625 Ah a madness fan eh?
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Yessuree! Sad that he decided to end the series tho
1220788 He hasn't ended the series
There's going to be an eleven an possible more
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Really? Well i've been clearly misinformed
1220870 It seem so
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WAIT! The madness series? Here? Interesting. I too am a fan. Eleven you say?
This must be looked into.
1222977 Yay :D
Two great new stories in one day? Don't overwork yourself, man! Also, the behemoth (or as I like to call it, Behemy) sorta reminds of the Big Daddies from Bioshock.
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I made two stories in one day?
Oh yeah....time differences
Well thanks man! And yes, "Behemy" kinda reminds me of a talkative Big Daddy...just without the giant drill.
can't wait for more
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Sorry for the wait. Had a slight case of writer's block.
Tell me if you guys like where the story is going (And don't worry. Cyr, the Behemoth, isn't dead)
1245501of course not, or there would have been alot of hate mail...
I am liking this, but for a second there I thought you killed him or something... And don't worry about making us readers wait. After all, you're writing the story.
Considerable need of spellcheck.
I love this! Moar! Moar!
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Thank you for understanding!
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Fixed some errors. Sorry, but next time could you point out some of the grammatical errors next time you see them?
It makes the editing process so much more easier (for me, my pre-readers, and my editor)
Thank you and enjoy the story, you adorable little Grammar Nazi, you!
P.S. I have nothing against my fellow Grammar Nazis!
Keep em coming!
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Thank you for the appreciation! and the mustache.....
Well I wouldn't personally describe this as beautiful, but I'm glad your enjoying it!
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Yes sir!
Hell yeah! New Chapter!......At the risk of sounding like an ass,
any idea when the next chapter will be?Or rather, is there a schedule for this story?Mabye it's just that I, as a reader, know that Cyr is a victim of circumstance. Mabye I just think that the princesses are already like this. But seriously, in situations like this they SEEM to be bigoted asses. (Pun intended)
i'm eager to see where this is going
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Nah you don't sound like an ass. I get a little douche-y when it comes to chapter releases too.
This was actually pretty short. I'm working on the next one right now, so expect another one tomorrow.
Sorry for the wait. I'm getting gang-raped with work and my AP classes.
But anyway, thanks for reading!
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Sorry for, again, supplementing a piece of fiction on this site that supports the whole "The-princesses-are-a-pair-of-complete-bitches" stereotype. But again, Luna is still pissed that Cyr kinda charged her through a city block and prevented her from saving Celestia.....
oh well
AND ARE YOU HAPPY NOW? I FINALLY RELEASED A CHAPTER!!!!!!
Hey, I overheard you mentioning that you encourage people to point out spelling and grammar errors in your story, so I thought I'd help out.
"Celestia could only ask, "You wanted die?"
Pretty sure that's self explanatory.
Oh, also, one more minor nitpick. (Sorry!
)
I think it's a bit awkward when you write out AJ's dialect in her writing. I mean, it's just my opinion, but I think that you should just write it normally, and leave it to the readers to fill in her accent.
Other than that, though, I really, really like this story. The way everything is described makes it really easy to envision what you had in mind in terms of voices and visual effects and the like. Can't wait for more!
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Thanks! I'll edit that straightaway!
This one was pretty short, so I'm releasing another one either tonight or tomorrow!
Cheers! And Thanks for reading!
1276164 Damn straight.
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Oh and I'll release another chapter tonight.
Be ready to feel all of your feels.
Oh goodie goodie! A new chapter! ... Um, how would they wrap his entrails on a pike when the Changelings are insect-like? They would most likely have to coat the pike in his bodily goo...
Ew.