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Undome Tinwe

The lamb misused breeds public strife/and yet forgives the butcher's knife


In a world of extraordinary mares, Lady Rarity hunts for her next victim: a scientist by the name of Twilight Sparkle.

Inspired by The League of Extraordinary Gentlemen.

Edited by garatheauthor.

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Masterclass of fiction, all i could think about while proofing was: "fuck dude i want Rarity to chomp my neck."

This is a delightful story!

Great story! I loved the interactions between Rarity and Twilight. Good job on making it so that neither really came out on top in their confrontation, and their unusual viewpoints allowed them to become friends easily. I do wonder if the other League of Extraordinary Gentlemen details did more to distract from the core story than support it, though, especially if there isn't a continuation of this ending. That said, the literary references were fun.

Love the original movie and if you are making a full series of this I can't wait to see how it turns out.

This is a thing... I want more of. While I'm no RariTwi fan, the whole MLP version of the League of Extraordinary Gentleman has me extremely interested and desiring for more!

I know this story is marked complete but it serves as a great introduction to this world and I'd love to see more... bravo!

Hmmm... So if I'm matching everything right, Rarity is this world's Mina Harker, Pinkie is the Captain Nemo expy, Applejack is this world's Allan Quartermain, and Rainbow is the Invisible Man, but seemingly with a twist of the Flash with that whole "vibration" thing taken into account.

Twilight and Fluttershy are a little harder to pin down. There were only five members of the original League, and Twilight doesn't really ring true with Doctor Jekyll (especially with the comments about Luna at the end). The way Twi's attempting to uncover the secrets of life and death seems to ring a little truer to Doctor Frankenstein than anything else. Or possibly Herbert West.

And Fluttershy is apparently just straight-up the Wolfman.

Great stuff! I'd really like to see more of this universe. It'd be really awesome if this story were just a prologue for a larger adventure!

Huh. Interesting. :)

Why does this have a complete tag? You are such a tease.

this is awesome looking forward to sequel:pinkiehappy:

Interesting. I wouldn't have pegged Sunny as Dorian Grey, but, I can dig it.

Color me interested if this continues.

Both the RariTwi and the overall plot leave me wanting more. We need a sequel! :pinkiehappy:

Also, 4D chessmaster Pinkie was super cool.

Oh Twilight, you're going to eat those words once the ultraviolet catastrophe hits. (You'll be having fun with all the new physics tumbling out of that, thought!) :twistnerd:

Overall, this is looking like a really fun take on LotEG -- or should it be LotEP, here?

This was fun. Is there going to be more of this?

is kinda putting a square peg in a round hole but Flutter could be Jekyll/hyde. She kinda does have a dark side, with Fluttercruel, or the Iron Will episode, for example.

And with her thing about mysteries of life Twilight could Dr. Mare-au. :pinkiehappy:

And would it offend to say I want both Raritys backstory and more of this story to read?

Oh this is good :3 Like others, here I do hope you consider making this a series,

I would be totally on board with reading 100,000 words of this. But this one shot is amazing in its own right

This is pretty cool, I was kinda saddened that you didn’t have Spike in there living with Twilight as a kind of Renfield type characters, but then again I’m not too familiar with the League of gentlemen characters characters so maybe he’ll fit somewhere better

Usually I rate stories with 11 thousand words as medium-sized, but this one has so much potential that it feels as short as a book's description from the back cover. I love how the mane six, while different, are very much the same people (and incredibly well written, too!)

Is there any possibility of a sequel? I feel so teased by the complete tag

I was half expecting Twilight's refusal to believe in the supernatural to be a front to hide that she was an Alicorn.


That said, it’s been a while since I read the original but doesn’t it end with the heroes failing and war breaks out anyway?

I actually rather enjoyed Pinkie's dynamic with the characters. I would certainly enjoy seeing more of this even better if inspired rather than more directly following the plot of the movie/comics.

Somehow, despite numerous reference to hooves, I keep thinking they're bipedal.

It could have ended with Rarity sleeping but you put in that final passage as a sequel hook...right? I would love to see this world expanded...

Bravo on this by the way.

so where is the sequel?

Oh my god, that was an awesome ending

This is awesome ! Sequel please.

Top notch RariTwi. Fingers crossed for a follow up.

Second time reading this story since I found it back in May, still enjoyable and I'm still hoping for a sequel. :raritywink:

Nice. If you ever decide to expand on the League idea I would love to give it a read :twilightsmile:

Sequel, please.

Oh c'mon, where's the rest? This is just straight up torture!

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