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Undome Tinwe

The lamb misused breeds public strife/and yet forgives the butcher's knife


In the distant future, Princess Twilight Sparkle and Spike enjoy Hearth's Warming with an old friend.

For Regidar. Happy Hearth's Warming.

(2020-09-20) Featured on Equestria Daily!

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Hearthswarming in April? I must be a foal again!

Thank you Melesse, this story is just as gorgeous as the first time. :heart:

I absolutely adored this. Touching, a bit sad yet uplifting, just the oldest friends in Equestria reconnecting. Fantastic job! :twilightsmile:

Is this story going to be a sad one?

I believe "bittersweet" would be the better word to describe it.

Trust me, you should read it—it's really good.

This was fantastic! This is a really interesting idea for Fluttershy and Equestria's future that was fitting and made sense in-universe. Her collective consciousness form was presented very well, with her needing to use speech-capable animals to talk and the animals themselves exerting their influence when she's stressed. Twilight and Fluttershy's conflict was good, and Twilight forgetting that Spike is a big dragon now was a nice detail. Hopefully that orb is sturdy enough for Fluttershy to carry it around. I also liked the little details hinted at, like pegasi largely depending on weather control devices and thus most not knowing how to control the weather.

Adorable. And you can just see the hints of how Equestria has changed over the centuries. Weather Modulators and all.

And Fluttershy as an immortal collective... poor Discord. "The King of Dreams Chaos realizes he must change or die, and makes his choice." Irony was always going to be the death of him.

Twilight's gift and the conflict here, very well meaning BUT... yes. On the other hand, that technology is probably going to ultimately allow immortality for everypony who wants it. Or near enough at least.

And it was wonderful to see her getting her voice back, and singing with Spike.

Endless Forms Most Beautiful is also an excellent quote/song.

Oh, this was beautiful. Thank you.

That was a beautiful story. So sad, but happy. I think the thing with discord is probably the saddest. A life given, truly, is the most valued.
I think that if twi made a body that shy could enter and leave at will, it would be a very great gift.

You're right its a step in the right direction, but then they need a way to get the soul, spirit, and mind out of the body intact and together before they can put it in a shell.

Well their soul and their mind are probably the same thing. But you’re right that they need to also move their magic. Their cutie mark is a part of both their soul and their magic, so not sure if that counts as separate or if it would move with the rest it.

I wonder if Fluttershy’s hosts have butterfly cutie marks while she’s occupying them. That would tell you a lot. Then again it’s also chaos-magic gifted immortality so the answer you get wouldn’t be definitive. But it’s a starting place to investigate. Along with Starlight’s old notes of course.

Nicely done! I have a minor and a major quibble, though.

Minor: three centuries is not "all these centuries." It's three. :pinkiehappy:

Major: Twilight, Spike, and Fluttercollective are the only ones who remember the Bearers? The implication that Celestia and Luna are going to die soon (in "millennia old" terms of soon, anyway) now that they're retired does not sit well with me at all. (And then there's Cadence...)

Very nice. :)
Thank you for writing and posting. :)

That could also be a word for it, though, yes; it's definitely not lacking in some sadness either, but I think it's done well.

Regarding Celestia, Luna, and Cadence, I suspect that the centuries haven't all been quiet, and that it may not have been just time:
"Twilight flinched and instinctively began conjuring a shield around herself, memories from two hundred years ago flashing across her mind."

It was the title picture and cover that drew me in. Also, now it's actually fitting I still haven't taken down my holiday avatar.

What a story. You know they say never to judge a book by its cover? Well, I did it again, and I was not disappointed. Great story, my friend.

Beautiful and heartfelt. This basically took two separate stories of mine (conceptually) and did them better in every way. I am honestly tearing up over here. So, thank you.

Love everything about this, without a doubt my favorite take on immortal Fluttershy that I've read to date. And you bet I got the reference in the story and chapter titles.

I'm glad I chose this moment to peek my head back around this area of town

Your writing voice is always so measured, hitting beats right as it feels like it should. Really liked this one.


Sounds like some ones a fan of nightwish as well

I read and "liked" this story some time ago, but didn't comment. Having found it again I thought I would do so.

Others have pointed out how beautiful it is, so I want to just single out the story's title.

It is beautiful as well, and it warms the heart just to read it. One knows a good story follows because the title speaks to the heart.

Over the years I've noticed here and there that some fan fics have really clever names ("I Have No Mouth and I must Squee"; "Rainbow's Gravity"), and some truly beautiful and moving, like this one and a Tale-Spin fic I once saw entitled "Their Fearful Symmetry."

I know your title probably comes from a song or something (which I've never heard), but I just wanted to say that it is extremely moving and it fits this story (and formless Fluttershy) beautifully.

It's the title of a song, but I didn't actually know this when I picked the title. I took it from Charles Darwin's "On The Origin Of Species."

There is grandeur in this view of life, with its several powers, having been originally breathed by the Creator into a few forms or into one; and that, whilst this planet has gone circling on according to the fixed law of gravity, from so simple a beginning endless forms most beautiful and most wonderful have been, and are being evolved."

Similarly, "laws of variation" is the title of one of the chapters of Origin.

Wow. Nevertheless, out of context and by itself it implies something wonderful.

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