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applezombi


ALL MY THINGS ARE HORSE THINGS!

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Pinkie Pie breaks her leg while hiking.

Twilight Sparkle falls in love with a mystery girl at a concert.

Sunset Shimmer carries on a long distance relationship with a magical pony princess from another dimension.

Multiple melodies, weaving in and out of one another, sometimes overlapping, sometimes competing, sometimes complimenting one another. Voices join in then fade away, adding to the collective whole. And in the end, maybe this symphony will lift the heart and dry the tears of an old foe.

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I'm liking this so far keep it up

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Thanks for reading, I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Awww I love Twinata.

I'm liking this so far!

Maaaan. It kills me a little that there's a sloppy, lazy siren-focused story in the feature box right now and this one's been so ignored :facehoof:

But anyway. Liking it so far! Obviously I haven't seen enough of the sirens to have much of an opinion on them, just one chapter in, but I liked the back-and-forth going on with all the not-sirens in the café, and Sonata's line at the end is a nice hook. There are some bits I'm inclined to be skeptical of, but as a whole this felt competent enough that I'm gonna not fuss too much over them.

I do have some nits to pick, though!

farm girl and fashionista

I didn't notice this kind of thing happening often, but as far as I'm concerned it's still too much. It's a lot harder to overuse names than you think, and if you are overusing them, this is the laziest way to fix that.

“It’s the body’s physiological response to injury or extreme stress. Basically, the body’s organs, like the brain, aren’t getting the blood they need and can start to operate weird or even begin to shut down. It usually shows up with an injury, but it can happen with stress or panic attacks as well,” Rainbow said. As soon as she stopped talking, she noticed the shocked stares from the five girls around their booth. “What? So I know a bit about first aid. That doesn’t make me an egghead. Look, this thing,” she gestured to her body, “is a finely tuned machine, like a sports car. Ya gotta know how the bits and pieces work in order to take care of it, right? And that sometimes means reading the owner’s manual, and knowing when you can tinker yourself, and when you gotta see a mechanic.”

This part threw me for a loop at first because it wasn't clear who was speaking right away. In a shorter paragraph, I think that's fine, but when you have almost three whole lines of dialogue before you clarify who's talking, it gets confusing.

“Well, the Captain Marevel movie just hit the cheap theatres, and I’ve already seen it a few times, but I thought it’d be fun if we all went together.”

ok so I was about to be like eww real-world reference in eqg world blah blah immersion shattered but then I realized that'd be kind of, uh, not a thing I should say here because it'd make me look like a dumbass. So I won't say that.

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I really appreciate the time you took not only to read my work, but also to leave some very insightful and constructive comments. I'm really grateful.

I hope that everyone's influence finally gives Sonata the courage to tell her sisters to get a job or get out of her home.

So when's the next chapter?

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Sorry, was delayed due to internet problems. I'll be trying to post the next chapter later today, once I've done some finishing touches. Thanks for reading!

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Thank you for the reply :)

So, what's the upload schedule for this fic usually? Could you explain, please?

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TBH, a little erratic depending on inspiration and other real life things. I was going to finish this chapter up and post it yesterday, but I ran into some issues with my internet. The next chapter is about half done, but also my quarantine has ended and I'm going back to work full time tomorrow, so I don't know.

In a perfect world, I'll be posting once a week after this point, until the story is complete. Maybe more frequently depending on how inspired I feel.

I like how you write Sonata in this story

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Thanks! I've always seen Sonata as a bit of a blank slate. I feel like she's kinda like tofu, absorbing whatever's around her. She's a bad guy because she lets other bad guys push her into being a bad guy.

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And I like it!

I hear the winds of an uncertain sequel come forth.....

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I agree. A follow up sequel, even if it's composed mostly of vignettes, would be nice.

Well done, Applezombi. :twilightsmile:

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I actually do have plans for a very short sequel, and a much longer prequel. I have no idea when I'll have time to get to them, though.

The sequel's going to be about Agent Oracle spending her weekends and free time chilling in a park in Ponyville, reading Equestrian books and maybe falling for a pegasus pony.

The prequel is probably going to be the story of Sunset and Princess Twilight falling in love over the course of a friendship map mission. It's going to have a bit of a mystery element to it.

A good combination of both verses meeting and a positive outlook for the future.
And Sunset doesn't have to choose she can and should be part of both worlds.

Would love to see more of it :yay:

I saw your other fic update, which prompted me to check this out. A great start, so far, you really captured all the characters well, such that you don't even need to specify who's speaking. And don't think I didn't see what you did there with the meal orders.

You wove together all these separate plotlines using the shared theme of pushing through internal roadblocks to be there of others and form relationships. Which is basically the theme of EQG as a whole, so the result is a story that feels very real to the franchise. And I'm only halfway done!

Damn, things got real tense, real fast. My heart aches for Twilight and Sonata both.

Great chapter I really liked it, just wanted to say that

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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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