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WELCOME EVERYONE, I AM DALEK-GALVO, MLP EQG FANFIC WRITER, AND DALEK EMPEROR OF THE 11TH DALEK EMPIRE. ALL WILL READ THESE FANFICS MADE BY YOUR NEW DALEK MASTERS. OBEY OR BE EXTERMINATED!!!!

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In the town of Canterlot, on a very stormy day, Sisters Celestia and Luna are trying to get home to escape from the storm, that was until Celestia heard the sound of a baby crying in the distance. The sisters came to see what it was and it was in fact a little infant, who was drenched from the rain and crying uncontrollably. Celestia's maternal instincts kicked in and they brought the little child into their home. Since Celestia saw that the infant was inside of a cardboard box, meaning the child's parents must have left her there, the two sisters decided to raise the child as their own, and after the storm ends, and they see the suns rays, they name the child Sunset Shimmer after the shimmering rays of the sunset. Since then, they have been raising a very friendly and energetic little girl. Now come, and listen to the journey of the human world Sunset, from childhood to adolescence to her college years, to her adulthood. It's going to be a wild ride.

Cover Art was found by Tempest Shadow and was made by Rockset, Thank you, Tempest You're awesome. :scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

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Ooh! Interesting! Can't wait for more!

the cover makes me think this will include Sunlight shipping despite the lack of a romance tag

...unless it'll be added later

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I'll be sure to add that, the romance stuff will come much later in the story since this is a Sunset coming of age story. :twilightsmile:

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oh so the cover was intentional. that just cinched it for me, I'm definitely keeping an eye on this.
any chance of the events from the movies being included in this universe? In ANY capacity?

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Later on in the story, there will be a moment where Human Sunset encounters the equestrian Sunset. Chaos and Hilarity will ensue.

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I'm glad you love it.

BTW, Be sure to write a comment telling me why you liked it. :twilightsmile:

Man, it is so much easier to make these cutesy slice of life fics than crossover fanfics. I'm definitely making more of these for now on.

First off the feels secondly just how small is sunny for her to fit in what I am guessing is a shoebox at largest but then that would have to be some big jacket pockets. Digressing the feels are nice although kind wish we knew a bit more as to why exactly Sunsets birth parents cant support them and a baby but, that's just a small nit pick really looking forward to more.

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Don't let go to your head, Scare.

It’s an interesting start. I’ll have to stay tuned to find out if I continue to like it haha.

She's small enough to fit in a box that can fit in a coat pocket, yet she can speak and clap? Something isn't adding up. The tone if the parents would imply she only a few weeks, maybe a month old at best, which would like up with the box thing, but a child that age shouldn't be able to speak, even a prodigy like the Equestrian Sunset.

You need to remember to form separate paragraphs if two people are talking. You did that twice, once with the abandoners and the other withe Celestia and Luna at the end.

Also I think it’s weird that baby Sunset would instantly adjust to two strangers so quickly. Especially if she’s old enough for her to talk.

This is an interesting idea...

But the part with the parents arguing is a bit weak. It would've been more...mysterious if Luna and Celestia found Sunset alone.

And the dialogue is a little clunky to boot.

You've got a good idea, but you need to do less with more.

I liked it a lot, i am very fanatic of reading comics online, and i must say that I really liked your story.

The part with the parents arguing is a really amazing, keep letting out your creativity I'll be waiting for the continuation

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Thank you for your kind words. I will be continuing this great story. :scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

intrestingt start i look forward to more please update soon

Dialogue is a bit clunky, especially for the arguing couple. Might consider reading it aloud to see how it sounds.

the man got out a little cardboard box from his coat-pocket,

The only way this makes sense is if the father is a wizard. Harry Potter tie in and they had to abandon the baby to hide her from death eaters maybe? Babies are small, but not that small, and if she can already talk you're going to need a slightly bigger box than what'll fit in a pocket without magic. :unsuresweetie:

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Don't worry, I'll change it so that it makes more sense. I'm trying not to include any magic in this story.

Preferred the previous cover art and is the current one even made by Rockset?

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