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After a huge airshow in Cloudsdale Soarin meets a young fan of his and decided to get to know her better. This leads him to discover that her family is much like his... cold... mean... and heartless. So soarin decides to do some thing about it which leads to new priorities in his life.
This is mainly a Scootadoption fic but it has some Soarindash moments in it
Anyways i have wanted to write this for a while and i have no idea how long this fic will be. So lets get to it.
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Found these for you, good start.
Chapter 1 Fight to "home" [ flight ] ???????
“You did an awesome job during that show.”
“Well… you see… your date for tonight isn’t gonna happen… sorry.” [ our ] ??
“Spitfire is telling me to do a sponsor event at a local orphanage [ told ] ???
knew she would give him the boot [wouldn't ]
Two time wonderbolt derby winner and second
case of stunned wings [ you use stunned each time in this paragraph did you mean stunted ?? }
Scootaloo Said in excitement [ cap not needed ]
looked at the filly as his back [ on ]
Unfortunately… You just had to ruin our family name with our stupid wings.” [your ]
7700492 thanks
i would have never spotted any of those...
Soarin-Daddy?
Love it already
I'm already enjoying this story please update soon!
Also I have a group dedicated to Soarindash and Scootalove stories. I would love to add this to my group!
7702035 I've already got 5 chapters ready so expect daily updates this week
7703385
Cool. Hey if you need any help to get you're chapters out faster, but keep the same or better quality then I'm your brony for the job.
7703604 i'll keep your offer in mind
there is a couple things happening this week that might have an impact on my writing schedule... but i'll talk about it tomorrow.
I pray he makes the right choise
I felt like Luna had a lack of vocabulary and wasn't very articulate, I suggest getting an editor. Other than that nice chapter
7706409 i tried to give her the canterlot accent but... im crap at accents
so i gave up
Everything is proceeding as I have forseen.
Let’s Hope it isn't true
I'm dying I need the next chapter
Uh oh! Mad Rainbow Dash incoming! It's over! (Plays tactical nuke sound)
Scootaloo will never fly? Damn now I feel like crap.
WHERE ARE SCOOTALOO'S NOSTRILS
Falling apart? I don't think so! But I'm sure Scootaloo's folster parents will be nicer then her real father Pretty good, keep it up. (Ocelot hand gesture)
I really need to stop with that
Wait what rainbow and soarin just broke up
but still very awesome keep up the good work
Hm...... interesting.
No words dont worry I think it's gooooood
Take your time. Something tells me that Spitfire will not be happy, (And that Scootaloo's real father will try to get her back)
okay.... hm... I got a bad feeling about this.
Oh that sounds interesting
Lighting Dust as Scootalloo's mother. Good work!
I can see that Scootalloo will be VERY HAPPY to see Soarin again
Hey um buddy...pal. You have two chapter 8's there. Um might wanna fix that unless you want to make it like a second part to Chapter 8, if so make it Chapter 8.5 or something like that
7751989 thanks
i probably would have never noticed
Not the first time I seen a racist unicorn father in a story.
Do I see a ship between Scootaloo and Rumble?
Scootaloo deserves a nice heart warming eve after all what happened
Good work!
keep Up The Good Work 
7774825 thank you
i'll try my hardest
7774828 didn’t you mean best?
You're Finnish too? YEAAAAH!
7776265
Good Chapter!
Hope her father dosn't find her
7779860
I would be more worried about her mother.
7781235 and why? I'm afraid that scootaloo's father beats her brutal after finding her
7781759
It was said that her father was already found to be an unfit parent. Likely he is being watched by the authorities. Her mother is still at large.
7781769 right,could be. Only time will tell
Interesting story so far, going to be keeping my eye on it
Some reason, I have to think of Lighting Dust who he bumped into it. Or an old friend or a relative
He bumped into Scootaloo's mom.
Mery Christmas to you too
7816074 thank you
7816125 You're welcome
Five bucks says RD gets pregnant.
If I could, I would make the foals pay for hurting Scootaloo's feelings
But Scootaloo, here's my advice: Just ignore them.
One issue I have is that the bullies seem flat and there only purpose in the story is to be mean. This is considered bad writing by many. I honestly don't mind it as much but I do think it is something to work on.
Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom
Take your time, no need to rush
Scootaloo will like it here for sure. I also had to think of metal gear when i read cardboard Box for some reason
Okay, I'm enjoying this story, but I need to be blunt. You need to get an editor or write this in google docs or even in Microsoft word. Either of these options are something you should consider because of the spelling and grammatical mistakes you have.