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Mystic Shadow


Won't be as active, apologies >_<

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//HIATUS: Edited 10/1/17


Rainbow Dash keeps on avoiding a certain colt and keeps on making excuses to not come head on with him, but how would she avoid a future wing-mate? She just can't stop hating him. It doesn't help that the exact colt is trying to get closer to her. Rarity and Fleetfoot gets suspicious and they try to see the problem between the two.

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seems interesting :duck: definitely following :pinkiehappy:

a little rushed , but seems awesome otherwise :trollestia:

7176432

Yeah. Thought that, but thanks anyway :3

Not that much that he had to force her

Hahahahahahahahahah
I have read WAAAAAY too many Yandere stories to not laugh at that!!!
Great so far, can't wait for more!!

7178223

Ha I have no idea what that is but okay! And thank you! XD (if its a big fandom im sorry... Dont kill me)

7179150 Yandere
I guess the easiest way to end describe Yandere is... um imagine a story were the person your dating is a killer, is over protective, easily gets mad, and loves you uncontrollably. There you go Yandere I guess

7180282

Oh... right X3 Thank you :pinkiesmile:

7179151 LOL :rainbowlaugh:
I read my comment again and I understand why u put a question mark. I just said "good".
Lol
It's actually very good. Like u should update good. ;)

7182012

Oh, thanks XDDD Im at 859 words on chapter 2 so far so hopefully I can get it out soon

7178104 Lol this is the calmest I've ever seen you in the comment section for a Soarindash story :rainbowlaugh: Because you usually write in all caps lmao

I like it so far :twilightsmile: It does feel slightly rushed however lol but overall really good :twilightsmile:

7183692 I KNOW RITE
IM USUALLY CRAZY
BUT I FELT KINDA CALM

7184048 Lmao I see that you're back now :rainbowlaugh:

Before I read this...


Darn it you got a story for the new episode up before me! XD

7184303

Hah, its not really for the new episode, it WAS originally but I changed it. The inspiration just came from that. Its just a follow-up from Rarity Investigates. You're an awesome writer, either way it probably would have been better X3

7186257 im sure this story is better then anythin i can write :twilightsmile: ima read it now

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that was really good, i feel like you shouldn't just start off a new scene with dialogue...maybe add a paragraph or two just explainin who is in the scene and what they are doing...

i really like this story...seems a bit rushed but its really good.

7186273

Oh, thanks for the advice ^^ And Thank you! <3

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Comment posted by Mystic Shadow deleted May 13th, 2016

Really good, the plot is interesting. Does have some grammar mistakes, and seems a bit rushed at the end. But overall, I think I'll give it a 3.5/5 moustaches.
:moustache::moustache::moustache:... how do I do the .5?

7269042

Um... I dunno... Its weird... when I was on chapter 3, I was positive there was 21 likes and then I saw 22 and I was wondering if someone was reading and there was...

Well, I know that its rushed because I can see it myself but I'm trying to change that. I don't have an editor or proof reader or whatever so I just quickly check over it once then post it and if theres problems, I'll let people point them out if its bothering them.

7269047 Have you tried Grammarly yet? The free version works fine. Unless you have a really harsh English teacher you really don't need the premium version. It works as a free proof reader for grammar mistakes. For the rushed part... there's some authors on FIMFic that offer editing for free.
Am I rambling? Probably XD
But as I said, it's story is really good, so keep up the good work :)

7269057

Oh. I've seen that add loads of times but I've never really considered it. I'll give it a shot.

I was going to add more to this chapter but I need inspiration.

RE-REALLY!!?? :flutterrage:
GRRRRRR!!! :twilightangry2: FINE!!! I GONNA GIVE YOU INSPIRATION MYSTIC!!!! ok I'm really don't have any idea to how... but I gonna give you inspiration... I think... :unsuresweetie:
~Monbom is not sorry if she'll fail :trollestia:

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XD Oh gosh School sucks


Thats random but its why Im not updating XD

I didn't think people really wanted to keep on reading lol. It's cringey so thats why I wanna rewrite~

Im just watching so much anime now, AHHH its so addicting >.< Im sorry. I'll see if I can start on the next chapter ^^

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asdasdasdasdas
sorry I'M CRAZY!!!!!!!!!!!! :pinkiecrazy:
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :yay:
don't worry MonBom is happy :pinkiehappy:

7710169 XDD Yah everyones crazy, THERES NO WORD SUCH AS NORMAL XD

In this story, Rarity reminds me of Effie Trinket from The hunger games :duck:

Comment posted by Mystic Shadow deleted Jun 20th, 2018

Will there be more? It’s really good right now.

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