It was short but extremely enjoyable. Thank you.

Agreed with Khaos, Really enjoyable!

“What happened?” Twist asks with interest.
“He woke up in another world.”

I like this part at the ending.

If only it was longer I'm still happy though It was a great story and really shows how great a short story can be without a bunch of world building. Thank you!

This was great! Short and sweet! I would of been ok with the last chapter ending but the moment Twist called him "dad", made it all the sweeter!

Bravo!

More of the same!

7040846 To follow up, the story jumps about more than I would like but this is one I'll come back to read more than once.

Dude! Lyra got owned! I didn't know you could call anyone a whore so vividly and still keep going. Great job on that!

The dialogue/interaction during the "sentencing" with Celestia was kinda rough, but otherwise it all good.

As you guys know, I'm not really known for short stories

It does explain a few things, still a very good story

Twist talks into the bathroom and has a letter in her mouth

Talks = walks

So Tia wanted didn’t want to make her student wait to talk.”

So Tia wanted didn’t want (???)

Them are the only two errors that I found while reading the latest two chapters. This is a wonderful story, it has action, romance, and drama! It is done very well and I enjoyed reading all of it! You have done a wonderful job good pony, keep it up!

7057416 Still, Anon was only suspicious, so he was still on the fence (I believe that's how you use that expression). to suspect the truth and to uncover it is completely different. But I suppose it can be debatable whether it could have been done better or not, It's just that Sarcastic Brony likes to make his Anon characters very logical but somewhat emotional unstable. In his other story (How many friends/lovers have you made today) Anon appeared emotionally dead but was having a lot of emotional turmoil on the inside. I guess we can just chalk it off for being a short story, and therefore Sarcastic Brony did not want to delve to deeply into Anon's feelings

Final verdict: Good story, but not what I would expect from Sarcastic Brony, and I say that as a compliment

Liked the story, but the final, was cliché ¬¬

as cliche as the ending was i really enjoyed it!
nice short and sweet!

7057734 Because it's shocking. If you hear your loved ones say that they think you're a monster so bluntly and with no any real reason it would be quite the shock, even if you did suspected that they might not love you anymore.

But ultimately it doesn't matter, different people react differently to the same situation

break ups in a nut shell, very sweet ending

All of life is a story.

Very satisfying ending good sir.

One pro of short stories is that they are easy to pick up without being intimidated by word count, or by the amount of chapters. On the con side, however, if the stories good enough, it kinda leaves one wanting more. Not that that's a bad thing, mind you.

I look forward to reading more of your shorts

That was beautiful....

This was a short sweet story. I loved it.

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Except it wasn't. Yes, he meant to cut it off, but the letters he used are still the WRONG letters. He used 2 "s", instead of a "c".

Keep in mind, he has since fixed it.

Lovely little short story. Well done.

One of those great stories that I want to read more of but at the same time don't because of how good it is now

oh my goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooosh

That ending... just wow, it tugged at my heartstrings. (no Lyra relation)

This is so well written, easily one of my faves. Good job i love you.

7056809 It was worth it.

I really enjoyed this as a family conflict/romance and found the contrast between the fanon Lyra and Bonbon and this one interesting to think about. It's also good to see Celestia getting some spotlight as she really is an under-appreciated character in comparison to the other princesses.

I've never read a story with Lyra as the antagonist, I didn't dislike it like I thought I would. I was pleasantly surprised with this, Great job!

WOW. This was very very good. Please keep up the awesome work.

only girls cry!
MEN weeeeep!
such a nice story!
woot!

That is one hell of an ending. I applaud you, my good sir.

Kinda hurting that Lyra is the "big-bad" in this

But you realized Anon and Bonnys relationship so well I can almost overlook it...almost

I really, REALLY wanted to get into your story based on the comments. But your constant use of present-tense verbs is very distracting and kills any flow this story might have. I won't down vote something that seems like a stylistic choice, but just.... Damn.

I love all your fics I'm happy I finally got to reading this one!

Somethings wrong...
I can't seem to press the like button enough times to do this story justice.

While there were spelling issues and a few problems with the plot, it was an overall great fic. Despite the short length of the story, it was surprisingly deep. This certainly caught me by surprise. I give this story my David Crespo stamp of approval.

9/10 only complaint is pacing and some minor orthographical issues, but I finished the story already knowing that it was purposely short. One of the best AiE fics I've read in some time wish I could give it more than just one thumb

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Fucking this. Who writes in perpetual present tense. OTL
The story is not bad but.. I cannot read this.

Interesting story. Also felt weird seeing Lura as a bad guy. Not something I've run into too often.

This was a really wonderful story
Thank you, and have a lovely day

I liked this. Oddly, I like BonBon x Human (even if they're just buds) stories. Anyone interested in another story with Bonnie and a human might want to check out 'Bonbon's Acceptance' (sequel to a much shorter story, entitled 'Lyra's Confession').

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Yeah, I find she tends to be written in one of a handful of ways; Obsessed with humans to an unhealthy degree, sexual harasser Lyra (sometimes with bonus attempted rape), merely more curious than average, and on rare occasions she's played against fanon (not aware of or interested in humans/hands to any particular degree). I find she gets cast as an antagonist (usually not a main antagonist though) often enough. Usually in the form of harassing the human(s) due to an obsession., not being an outright bit of filth like this story portrays her. As often as not in those stories, she ends up getting redeemed, at least to a degree.

this was really good i wouldnt mind a sequal of a possible kid

I always picture Lyra as being a little loony(but the fun kind, the quirky background pony kind) so seeing her as a total asshat was a bit weird for me. But again, that's my personal head-canon. I absolutely LOVED this story and the fact that Twist is Bon Bon's daughter makes me squeal inside(and outside, loudly...)

Just realized this is a Sarcastic Brony fic. Shoulda realized sooner with the quality and how much i loved it.

wow man it was really a wonderful story.78.media.tumblr.com/a0a666d9b48db08ee96b0e6812301f9a/tumblr_inline_o4sdm5skwK1u4l8c0_500.gif

I have one minor gripe. I think Lyra was a bit too over the top horrible in her characterization. Still favoriting and giving a thumbs up because the rest is good.

very nice story very heart warming

This fic is not badly written, in fact, it is quite decent, better than average. But I can't say that I liked what you did with Lyra, I don't feel that was necessary. However, I liked your head-canon about Twist being Bon-Bon's daughter, never seen anything like it.

Anon shrugs. “I can’t tell you why, Bonny. We just kinda never got to that point. We tried, but it just never felt right. We’re a lot closer because of it but there's no romantic feelings shared between us.” Bonbon lets out a sigh of relief. “Were you worried?”

I love the fact that despite Tia and Anon tried a romantic relationship they didn't break off when things didn't turn out well. Instead they became even closer friends!

The Celestia of your story is one of my personal favorites of any fanfiction that I've read over the years.

As for Lyra I enjoyed this iteration of her, you made her into a good antagonist that made the story that much more interesting. A very heartwarming story I thoroughly enjoyed!

Wow, Lyra is the bitch now

wait.. there was a third chapter? whoops! better read that...

Love the story but I don't like what you did with Lyra.
But I'll overlook that since this was a sweet and spicy read.

This masterpiece is the very first story I read that was written by you, and it's still one of my all time favorite fics in Fimfiction. This story will be forever be ingraved in my mind as the story that made me love Human in Equestria/Anon in Equestria. And I have you to thank for that Sarcastic. Thank you so much and again, I hope you do well in your future.