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TheVoidPony


If you stare into the Abyss long enough the Abyss stares back at you ~Friedrich Nietzsche

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Thanks for the fav on my story, The Ones From Beyond.

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Don't mention it! the story is starting off well and you're setting things up in the right direction. Though I suggest you work on the pacing of each chapters, it might just be me, but I feel like it's a bit rushed at times.

Like first it starts off with Octavia viewing Vinyl as just a friend and roommate, but then when Mrs. Cake mentioned of Vinyl being Octavia's "Plus One" then she starts to question their relationship.

Again, it might just be me, so you don't have to take my suggestion into account. But other than, the story is going to the right direction! I'll be waiting for the next chapter patiently! :rainbowkiss:

Thanks for the favorite I really appreciate it, if you like this story, feel free to check out my library. :yay:

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Power's up water type moves, of course it's strong! but that don't beat the good old Snorlax!

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Blastoise in my case. Rain Dance was strong.

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