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JaketheGinger


There are a few Jakes on this website. I'm the ginger one.

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After repeatedly being excluded and left behind from the Mane 6's adventures, only to do his chores at the library, Spike begins to feel bitter about his role as Twilight's assistant.

But upon seeing a shooting star one fateful night, he makes a wish that turns his life upside down.

The results of this wish will force Spike to discover the true meaning of purposes in life, friendship and most importantly, being wary of what you wish for.

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Chapters (18)
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Yay for a Spike-centric story! :moustache:

I have a lot of free time at the moment so...what better way to spend it by doing something creative! Hopefully this idea hasn't been done already but if it already has...

I'm sorry and I'll give credit to whoever thought up of the idea first!

Just thought I'd put that there because it seems polite :twilightsmile:

Anyway, hopefully you'll enjoying reading this! Comments and constructive criticism are always appreciated!

Thanks for reading!

FIRST besides the writer o course:rainbowkiss: great story

646505 Even if someone has used the idea before, (which i don't recall anyone doing so yet) the stories could both still be massively different!

Personally, i sort of enjoy when i find a story that has the same base-idea as one of mine. Its fun to see which direction they take it.

Anyways...your idea seems like a good one, wish ya the best of luck. :pinkiehappy:

Lookin good so far, meng.

Seems like this story has potential. Be careful what you wish for Spike.

You are now on the "popular story" list on the side, and moving up it quickly. Shoot for featured!

good start to a good story but what spike is saying is true

At the end, it says "What. What?!" is it supposed to be that? "Wait. What?!" would sound better if it was.

I like the idea, but I have serious gripes about this first part. It's a whole lot of nothing, to be honest. The premise of the story is that Spike supposedly trades places of power with Twilight, but this idea isn't even mentioned until near the end, and doesn't HAPPEN until the actual end of the first chapter. While it is important to set up premise and the idea of his mundane days of jealousy for his mistress, it took ages to come to the conclusion of the story's main idea. As readers, we don't care to slog through paragraphs of Spike getting up and going through his normal routine. Even movies use cross-fades for this. It could be explained in a single sentence. Perhaps a paragraph or two of exposition would have done better for the opening, and we could've hopped to the waking up scene and discovered more early on.

Is Spike in one of his larger incarnations now? You never say he looked down at the filly, but if the horseshoe fits-- Spike might be in one of his more adolescent growth phases to suite the idea of the story. If he's going to explore being in a position of power, it serves as good symbolism that he literally looks down at Twilight now. Just food for thought.

I'll be watching, and hoping for improvement now that we've set the stage and have the pieces moving.

~Aegis

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It can be either since they both work, a double "What" dosn't sound that bad.

Very nice story idea, can't wait for the next chapter! :rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy:

. . . .There IS going to be a next chapter, right?. . . . . .THIS ISNT A ONE-SHOT, RIGHT?!?!?!? D:

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Hey, my mind was rented out by datdamnface. Don't expect me to have the knowledge of literature I used to.

I'm likeing where this is going. :pinkiehappy:

ooooooo i'm verry interested :pinkiehappy: plz write more :moustache:

Great premise, I've always thought Twilight takes Spike for granted.Looking forward to the continuation.
I agree with the previous comment about how Spike should be described as 'looking down' on filly Twilight. A little detail that goes a long way in setting the tone.

Phew, this certainly was a challenging chapter to write but also a very enjoyable experience too!

Word of warning: Don't expect updates to be this often (I do have other stories to work on) but I just had to update this after the response I got from the first chapter! :pinkiehappy:

If the characterization of any of the characters seems off, tell me A.S.A.P and I'll do my best to fix it!

Comments and constructive criticisms are welcome as always; I love to gobble them up! :derpytongue2:

Hope you all enjoy it! Thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:

Twilight....

*Hugginates like the almighty voice of Luna.*

Herkkk,...... filly Twilight,... IMAGE TOO CUTE TO COMPREHEND!!!!!!:twilightoops::twilightoops::twilightoops::twilightoops::twilight oops:

*brain breaks*:derpyderp2::derpyderp2::derpyderp2:

Here's to hoping Spike dosen't go insane with power (a little lording over while he's still new at this would be acceptable) and can actually make everyone's life better, seeing as he now knows how both sides in his relationship feel.

SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH WIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I'm finding that I'm gradually becoming a better writer through this. Hopefully I am anyway! :rainbowwild:

As always, comments and constructive criticisms are very welcome!

Enjoy! :twilightsmile:

I'm liking this story, but as far as plot goes, it felt like nothing significant happened this chapter. Twilight herself dismissed her own use of magic, making it seem pointless and boring. Speed it up.

Well, I now have an insatiable urge to off a certain dragon for being an insensitive prick. Joy and rapture...:ajbemused:

Meh, I keed. What was that meme again??? Oh yah.

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Spike don't be a jerk and hypocrite. Help Twilight out or I WILL DESTROY YOU.:twilightangry2:

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Well, this was originally going to be in Chapter 2 but I felt that having two vastly different emotional tones in just one chapter would be too jarring for readers.

That said, I have taken your advice on board. Thanks for the comment! :twilightsmile:

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You want it? It's yours my friend, as long as you have enough rupees! :pinkiecrazy:

Nah just kidding, you'll get it for free of course!

672143 tsk tsk.... Terrible business policy you have there, bru... thoughicantreallytalkw8wut:rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh:

Something tells me people are going to start noticing spike's memory problems and behavioral quirks. :unsuresweetie:

Wait if twilight went all said and crying what about Spike when he was back in his role.

I still feel bad for twilight really bad but know i feel i should know more about spike.

I hope you have a sweet moment with the two later on.

Oh man, I knew something like this was going to happen in this chapter. Now I feel like I'm going to cry in my sleep! :raritycry:
But, now I wonder what Spike will do when he finds out about the day that Filly Twilight has been through.

Spike at least would get much stronger as he grows, but Twilight losing her magic, she is doomed to a life of disappointment unless everything goes back to normal. Though if things go back to normal and Twilight remembers this she may be alot more considerate to Spike and try to include him far more often.

Anyone else just wanna go give twilight a hug and then go get her some ice-cream all through the chapter? :applecry: Oh, and a very nice piece of writing you've got going on here Gingerhooves :twilightsmile:

I liked this chapter. It let us get to know more about this universe's Twilight. It also showed some slight character growth for her.

I'm liking where this story is going so far. Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

Twilight Sparkle should join the CMC

As you can probably tell from this, Fluttershy will be in the next chapter! And her arrival will herald a new age of happiness to take a break from the sadness of recent chapters! :yay:

Regardless, enjoy this chapter and let me know what you think.

Thanks for reading and have fun! :twilightsmile:

Good on spike. Because if he didn't try to take responsibility for this I was going to punt him to the moon. I eagerly wait for the next chapter.

Is there gonna be a chapter were it shows the other spike?:rainbowhuh:

you know, like when he made the wish, it didnt change the world, but he switched places with the spike from that world who didnt know about the wish, it be funny to see the other spike freak out about him being the assistant!:rainbowlaugh:

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An interesting idea but no I'm afraid!

Simply put, the whole world changed around Spike. He's the same (except for his appearance) but everything else has changed.

this is so sad and fantastically written. i wish i could write half as well as some people on this website :applecry:

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Can someone please give Twi a hug? Like, right now? Before my heart breaks?

Now this, I like. :D Spike is taking responsibility for his actions, and wants to be there to Twilight. That was just very sweet of him to be there for her, to help her in this tough time she's having within this dimension. He's not just in charge of her as a role reversal, but also to help her grow, to find her place in the world and feel better about her life and herself. I like that! I like how this has taken a bit of a serious and relateable turn that just really works and isn't at all out of place. What's also interesting, as we saw in the previous chapter, is that we see things from the new Twilight's perspective! It isn't just Spike himself seeing this new world, we actually get a sense of this new world through the eyes of somepony who thinks that this is reality, from their eyes! That was a very nice turn to take this story to give it something interesting, and to also give Spike a whole new lease on what this is. None of it was out of place, and flowed beautifully.

I'm really enjoying this, I can't wait to see what's to come along the way! Well done! :twilightsmile:

Okay, NOW this is getting awesome!

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