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She could've been many things after leaving Canterlot High. A baker, a comedian, a singer, a professional party planner.
Yet instead, Pinkie chose another path in life. A road nobody thought she would ever travel. For Pinkie Pie, being a police officer is almost second nature to her.
Written for the June 19th short story Writeoff Group event using the prompt "A Matter of Perspective".
"This story is why Schnapps is a bad idea." -- Bradel
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Lovely little one-shot. Needed this after all the cop drama us Yanks have been dealing with lately.
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Enjoyed it in the Writeoff, enjoyed it here. Though I do wonder whatever happened to Rarity. And why Wildfire never considered the Internet as a way to get his art out there. I suppose he prefers real materials.
Still, a novel interpretation of what human Pinkie Pie might do with her life. Celebrity really isn't her, but being a pillar of her community? That works. (Besides, she has an excuse to eat all the doughnuts she can stomach.)
I could totally see Pinkie doing this
#headcanonupdated
Nice, fluffy little slice-of-life story, good soft read...this is the kind of thing we need to be reminded of, in these troubled times, about police officers. That they're not all cold-blooded racist murderers. That some of them truly ARE public servants.
Anyway, you want to get this edited. I caught a half dozen or so errors in the first few paragraphs alone, and a lot more sprinkled throughout. I'd pick through it for you but I'm a little busy at the moment.
I really loved this story; It was so sweet and simple. I especially love how unique and logical it was. Obviously, I haven't read every fic out there, but I have never seen anything go in this direction before, especially with Pinkie. The characterization were really good, it had a nice message at the end, and it felt so much like an actual day in the life of cop Pinkie. The humanization of the graffiti kid was a nice touch too; we're all human, after all. Wonderful work! :D
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In the competition, someone posted the exact same gif in relation to the same line.
Something just got confirmed.
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Rarity is working her fashion career in Manehattan, or some other big city. I didn't explicitly state that in the fic because it would've felt a bit telly to just outright state what each of the Mane 6 are doing. What I hoped is to show it through Rainbow commenting on how herself, Pinkie and AJ are the 'ol' reliables'.
If I continued with this idea (which I likely will), expect to see Rarity pop up at some point. Sunset too, although she's doing something super important.
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Exactly one of the messages I wanted to convey. The people who risk their lives for us on a daily basis need more recognition.
Very nice one-off. I'd never really thought about Pinkie Pie as a cop before, but the way you handled her definitely makes sense. After all, she's a very community-minded pony/person who wants to make the world a better, happier place.
This was a nice little one-shot if I say so myself. Very interesting take to Pinkie Pie's character which is usually made to follow the status quo of the show or some of the more controversial fanfics. I always love when an another puts effort into adding onto Pinkie's character instead of throwing her out to the readers as the comedic effect. Definitely adding it to the fav's.
I gotta admit, there aren't many stories anymore that can leave me with a genuine smile on my face.
Sure I can laugh about something when a chapter ends, but comedy can only go so far with comedy fics. When you can have someone feel good about their day afterward, you know you done something right.
Overall there isn't much for me to say that hasn't been said already. But all I can hope for is that I could encounter more fics like this in the future and maybe hope that my own weird writing can someday reach a level of professionalism like this.
It was so nice, I smiled twice. Very good entry, sad to see it didn't make it to the finals, though.
Thanks for writing this.
This was a bit strange, I think. Not sure how I feel about it. Definitely nicely written, but there wasn't much there. It took a kinda deep topic and simpliflied it... too much, perhaps. Sanitized it, if you will. Not sure I like that.
I loved how Pinkie handled Wildfire.
Congrats on the feature
That cover image though.
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Wait, WHAT???
Loved it!
Nice... really nice.
I always wondered what Pinkie would be if she had a real job as a human, the same problems of a comedian you have her of course is present, but I also saw it as a rather lonely profession, Pinkie likes to make a real emotional connection to people she laughs with so it wasn't really an option, also baker but it seemed rather stereotypical, it was a job, she was good at it but I didn't really see it as being 'her' job.
A cop... now that made a lot of sense how you explained it, being connected to the community at large and inspiring others to have happy life's for the future, it seems to fit her to a 'T', at least from a quiet town perspective.
I now want a fic where Pinkie is a police officer again, but not a oneshot and instead slice of life mixed in with a little action cop styled awesomeness like you'd see from a movie.
PINKIE PIE STYLE!
This is a great idea of Pinkie's character, here's a favorite.
Very eye catching cover, where did you find it?
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I would love to see more of this sort of thing. I think this works even better with EG Pinkie.
I particularly like her time with Rainbow Dash it just felt right.
sequel pls
Who's the artist for the cover?
This was awesome, you are an amazing writer my friend
new headcanon acquired
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Artist is someone called Daikoku
Linking the derpibooru page here because they don't seem to use deviant art. Plus they speak a whole separate language.
Seriously, why are some of the best humanized artists found in the far east?
Thumbs up for quality of execution only.
This was a very distressing story.
Haven't read yet, but the concept means I have to ask: if Pinkie Pie is a cop, does that make her-
The Fun Police?
Your British is showing,
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"Mandatory fun days for everyone!"
This was a pleasant surprise. I never would have thought of a premise like this, but you made it work and I liked it. My only complaint is about the conversation between Pinkie and Rainbow Dash. It stalled the action so you could just tell us her motivation. If I were writing it, I would either cut that conversation altogether and just show Pinkie's motivation through her actions, or make it the climax of the story to explain everything after you'd shown it.
So Dash turned out to be one of those people who peaked in high school, then came back as a teacher so she could try to relive it?
....Ok, that's scarily accurate.
Every good cop dreads the day that their weapon comes out of its holster and has to be used.
This is an odd but somehow plausible look at adult human!Pinkie's life choices. I can see her choosing to be a community cop. After all, what better way to make everyone happy than to serve and protect?
Of course, after the revelations of 'Slice of Life', we know that Officer Bonbon is actually a former FBI special agent from another city under the Witness Protection Program. Her real name is Sweetie Drops.
this needs more starship trooper lines
"ARE YOU DOING YOUR PART ?!"
xD but it was fun
Loathe to admit it, I didn't particularly like this.
Sorry, Jake, I'm about to leave a horribly long and negative comment here. Didn't realize this would happen when I started typing, so I'm adding this disclaimer here to cement in that I think you're a pretty cool dude, and that I really do like the concept. It's incredibly original, certainly, and that in itself is a point of pride.
It's well-written in large parts, certainly, technically speaking. As in, the technical aspects of your writing are quite strong. A few niggling dropped words here and there, but all of them are certainly things I wouldn't have noticed if I'd been enjoying myself more.
The biggest problem is that this is almost entirely dry exposition of your headcanon. You've had a genuinely interesting idea and, rather than follow it through, you've had Pinkie loudly announce the reasons for her life choices to everyone she runs across. Literally, in the first scene, to a drive-thru team.
You don't give her a real situation to prove her grit, either. it's perfectly fine when Pinkie just has to deal with a spray tagger of this kind, her kind of light touch might be great there, and it's a fantastic scene when they actually get caught, but a lot of the time police officers don't get to pick and choose who they deal with, and not everyone is as simple as that. I don't think Pinkie has the... I don't think Pinkie could handle the darker pockets of society, and this story did nothing to assuage those concerns.
Even in the case of the spray tagger, a situation that was heartwarming yet incredibly twee. What does Pinkie do when she learns that the kid is out tagging because, say, the alternative is being at home with a horribly abusive single parent? She can't keep the kid. Law demands she hand them back over to that situation. There's nothing she can do to deal with the parent either. She's just got to watch it happen, and hope she can catch the kid tagging again soon so she can talk to them again before they end up in a much worse situation then they're already in.
I don't mean to get all dark in My Little Pony. This is a safe and fun and happy place of magical sparkles. And magical Sparkles. The problem is that the way you've portrayed this, now, it's a non-story in which nothing happens except the premise is explained, as loudly and as often as possible, and it's done in such a way as to be vaguely condescending to law enforcement -- any members of said, please feel free to correct me on that one, I'm talking from the experience of a police family, not as a police officer myself here (and if Jake himself is one I'm going to feel an utter tool) -- without ever proving Pinkie's competent, or even incompetent, at her job.
I'm going to go back to the "police family" thing, because I'm going to try to talk from what little experience I have, rather than just from conjecture and stereotypes. I think the best example for my point would be my grandfather, a detective in the little town of Tamworth, Australia. It's about as small as a town can be without becoming one of those towns with a population so small they are in and of themselves a problem. Probably the happiest size a town can be for law enforcement to deal with. Pretty comparable to the setting of EG in a lot of ways. Small, but urbanized and with a strong local education system.
Professional duties involve cleaning up after suicides both physically and emotionally, drug deals gone bad, houses that reek so badly of corpse that you need to take a slug of brandy at the threshold, interviewing the families of missing children absolutely poker-faced because you know the odds of getting them back after this long are so low but you can't break the professional mask. One time PaNumbers had to miss Christmas lunch with his family because he had to clean up after a murder involving power tools and a little girl the same age as his daughter. That's a particularly awful example from a long career, but it's not unique.
Even if this isn't all Pinkie has to do. Even if this isn't most of what Pinkie has to do. Even if she gets to do her community service almost all of the time. One day, Pinkie's still going to be at a railroad track at some point with a thin red paste over here and a head over there and she's going to have to cope with that. How? How does Pinkie Pie deal with that? A vehicular collision is infinitely worse than a demon at the prom.
Some of the worse things only happened after he started advancing through the detective ranks. It's understandable Pinkie wouldn't be subjected to all of this, again. How does Pinkie handle working with the people that do, though? Does she help them cope? Do they brush her off as hopelessly naive, if not downright insulting and infuriating?
It made references to her maybe one day having to draw her gun and point it at people -- again, delivered entirely through expositional sentences like "that's a mean question Rainbow Dash Who I Have Conveniently Never Discussed My Life Choices With Until Now"[1] -- but instead focused on her being a light and fluffy Good Cop who didn't want to think about it.
That's fine. That's what Pinkie wants to be. Great. We covered that, though.
But what we didn't cover was anything else. There's no conflict. There's no real character exploration. Just a lot of expositional dialogue. Pinkie Pie has achieved her goal and has no issues with it, and now it's the audience's job to work backwards.
We don't even get to see Pinkie struggle through her training working out if this is really what she wants to do. It's already happened and she's done it offscreen. Apparently with no issues, when over a third of her classmates statistically dropped out. No worries. Man, a montage of Pinkie doing a defensive driving course would have been fantastic, come to think. Her poor, poor instructor.
Then inflicting those lessons upon Rainbow Dash...
Echem. Anyway.
It was a genuinely really interesting idea, if you couldn't tell by me having little recursive bursts of delighted inspiration there even after writing so vitriolic a comment, and I could absolutely dig further exploration of the concept. I'm sorry I've left such a long and negative comment on this, truly. and I'm glad I'm in the minority thinking this. I hope you enjoy the feature box and I hope this came across more helpful than unrepentant bastardry. I'm going to add a little disclaimer to the top, I think.
[1] But that's another complaint entirely.
EDIT: I want to stress; My solution isn't simply "Make it darker". I don't need a story where Officer Pie wretches at a roadside next to a hunk of twisted and bloody metal. I don't think anyone wants that. I'm giving extreme examples here. It's just that, if you're going to do a story where you emphasize that police officers are normal, everyday human beings who do this kind of work, it should be remembered that the work they do isn't for normal, everyday people. Stuff that I've mentioned would be happening in the background. I really want to know if Pinkie would still be able to handle that tagger with the grace and kindness she did now after being in that career for another six months. I really want to know how she'd do that.
Pinkie acting like Pinkie isn't enough for me here. Pinkie somehow remaining Pinkie just might be.
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Nice! Got to say I've never envisioned Pinkie (human or pony) as a cop, but you sell the concept very well. It's neat to see such an unusual take on her, done so well.
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To begin with, thanks for the detailed comment. It's clear that you didn't write it to be malicious or anything, which is something I can really respect. So hopefully my response will seem just as non-threatening.
One disclaimer before I start though: this was written for a contest with a limited time frame. Three days, I think. As a result it's not the longest fic and perhaps I could've added more things onto it before publishing but from the responses I got in the competition, I figured it was in an acceptable state as it is.
She doesn't really announce any reasons for being a cop in this scene. Sure, she says she is one but that's because it's the first scene. It's kinda needed.
As for Pinkie dealing with grit, I think she could. In the shown Pinkie's shown to be brave, although she can be over dramatic at time. More often than not, she doesn't back down from a fight, especially if her friends are involved. I think with the task of protecting a community she loves on her shoulders, she would be brave enough to deal with the nastier parts of society.
That said, it's something I do want to explore someday. Most likely in a longer, more detailed story!
Interestingly, something like this was going to be in the fic but I ran out of time before I could put it in and make it good. Although given the tone of the fic beforehand, it may have been too sudden a punch in the gut to readers.
Totally the opposite of what I wanted to convey and I'm sorry it came out like that to you. The point was to show that police officers aren't just things that show up at crimes, dealing with criminals etc. They're people too, just like you and me.
With your detective example (also much respect to your grandfather for doing such a task), even if you do acknowledge that Pinkie isn't a detective, I think you overestimate the amount of bad cops come across. In today's media, what do we hear about? Mostly bad. A cop isn't going to tell you he helped an old woman cross the road safely because it's not as shocking as cold-blooded murder. Bad things tend to stick with us a lot longer than the good, usually. Dumb human nature, I say.
That said, I do agree it's inevitable that Pinkie would come across a terrible crime. I think she'd be shocked and understandably upset. We mustn't forget though that cops can't be stonefaced all the time. They have their limits too. It's not an easy job.
That said, I think Pinkie would actually get mad once the dust has settled. She'd probably be furious that someone took another person's life, or something else equally as bad.
For an in-show example, see her reaction when she hears Rainbow Dash was 'hurt' by 'somepony'.
I mean, that's implied swearing right there, or at the least something quite shocking for her to say. The show is definitely more light hearted than real life, aye, but I think it's not unreasonable to assume Pinkie would want to fight for justice for a terrible crime.
Yeeeeah, their conversation could've been a lot smoother, I agree.
I think you may just have an issue with the type of story this is. And that's fine, you're far from wrong, since it's not for everyone. You're not the only person whose said that they didn't like it because of a lack of conflict either so don't think you're being a grump or anything. That's perfectly fine. Some people love heavy slice-of-life, others want something with a bit of action. Fimfiction accommodates for both.
I'm glad you gave it a shot and commented anyway. Quite detailed too! That's not something anyone can do so don't feel bad, I appreciate what you've said, even if I may/may not agree with everything. That's the beauty of writing, I suppose.
Uhhh.... yeah because cops TOTALLY aren't recorded, caught in the media, and torn to shreds over every single comment made, whether on duty or off right? haha. Pinkie's logic is flawed I think, but if she makes it work then so be it haha.
Despite a few things, this is the only story so far that I have enjoyed today. Thank you!
Where did you get the cover art?
6137979 Who is the guy in your avatar?
6138406 Legolas from Lord of the Rings.
Gah! Now I'm curious what vehicle she drives! I mean she could just be driving a Crown Victoria or Ford Taurus, but at the same time when I think Officer Pinkie that seems way too average. Maybe she drives a muscle car or a big SUV or an impounded exotic. Maybe she's their helicopter pilot?
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So many possibilities! (Also, forgive me for interrupting the comments on a very good exploration into Pinkie's character to talk about police cars.)
where did you get the cover image?
6138836 I like to imagine that she drives this: img2.garnek.pl/a.garnek.pl/021/563/21563427_800.0.jpg/btr-152.jpg
Now THAT'S a cop car.
6139707 Or this 41.media.tumblr.com/2361421bd8bcb4dabd0977eac8101a2e/tumblr_npoy5kOUIr1r9etvbo9_1280.jpg (in pink?)
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And you had to admit, it does make her look hot. Still, TS is best pony.
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People were asking about the cover image, I did a google search for it and found it on derpibooru and deviantart. The original artist is Daikoku-Dahei.
Go take a look their other art is good too
Let's see, Rainbow the teacher, Fluttershy the safarist, Pinkie the officer...
Rarity the painter, Twilight the professor, and AJ the apple seller?
(Rarity seems like a painter to me
Always wondered how'd it turn if pinkie was an officer.
Kinda thought more along the lines of her having a 21 Jump Street (movie, not the old tv show) type of persona. Still a great story. Have a fave and watch.
I don't feel as though this is finished? It has a feeling of more, of wanting almost. I dunno, maybe it's just me.
Whar did you get the pic for this fic it's nice.
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