Twilight Sparkle knew she was a smart filly. She was in the School of Magic after all, Celestia’s personal student even. She had a great family and baby sitter too. So why did she have to be so stupid and end up throwing it to burn.
Now all she had was Spike, she was alone, and somewhere unfamiliar.
(Inspired by Leave it All Behind)
A promising start! I'll be keeping an eye on this one.
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I thank ya’ dearly!
This seems REALLY interesting... but did Twilight actually kill others?
I cant wait for more its cute, slightly dark, and it has a lot of promise
Can't wait for more
Biggest thing that is surprisingly small that pulled me from the story is Twilight having a beard. Why? I thought it an odd detail for the cover image, but addressing it as normal in the story really threw me.
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Just a thing from medieval unicorns I saw. Some of ‘em will have beards :>
Neat.
I wonder if Celestia is doing the search pattern on purpose (knowing that the rest of the elements of harmony are in ponyville).
I can imagene Twilight's magic growing more Esoteric and occult like, without the teaching of standardized schooling.
How likely does anyone think Shining armor strangling Twilight before giving her a hug and telling her how he, and their family thought they lost her for good is?
Where can I read Leave it All Behind?
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/427890/leave-it-all-behind
Is this story human, Anthro, or is this a mistake? It was jarring enough to knock me out of the story.
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Mistake! Thanks for catching it!
This is a REALLY good story, and I am enjoying it a lot!
Good so far.
Wait she has a beard so is a bearded unicorn filly?
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they way i draw unicorns some of 'em just have beards, Twilight's is short cuz she wants to grow it :>
Really important question!
Does Celestia have a luxurious and millennial long beard?
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Hell yea!
This is really good, and it is funny that Shining and Cadence just missed Twi!
Looks like she has met all five so far though, so I am excited to see where things go next!
Sorry about my comments on other chapters, I deleted them.
That second of herself is unnecessary.
I'm loving these scenes featuring Shining and Cadence.
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Thanks for the heads up!
Also glad! I like writing ‘em!
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Twilight looked perturbed that Rainbow had said that she just blew up.
I laughed at the scenes of Applejack and Rainbow crying. Was this chapter a partial reference to 'The ticket master' chapter?
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Thanks for the corrections! Also, unintentionally I suppose they are! Glad you found them comedic as I was worried if I did it right!
"Wow, my sister has a cutie mark just like that! What a funny coincidence!" - Shining, possibly
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like I said, he's not the brightest crayon in the knife shed.
also I like to think when Cadance and Shining are together they can be adorably dumb despite their intelligence
I though Granny Smith was the only one who knew her real name. Is this a mistake or intentional?
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When writing outside of dialogue I use twilight’s real name, only Granny Smith knows her real name.
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In his defense, he didn't have much reason to examine her cutie mark. To him she was just the cute but obviously not Twilight colored filly spending time with her brother.
I love the story's beginning! Promising start!
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Thankya! Glad ya like it!
I love the direction this story is going in! Honestly, this is making me consider rewriting the original. I've been considering it for a while, but this has really turned me over.
Don’t think I’ll keep reading. The TwiJack kind of came out of nowhere and the fact that Twilight killed millions of students (foals her age and above) by a... grilled cheese sandwich that turned into a glob of ooze dissolving everything in it’s path just doesn’t sit right with me. There’s no need for her to have killed ponies for a "running away" fic since that kind of stuff warrants jail time.
I’ll give this a PRETTY BAD, but don’t give me much thought.
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Oh my gosh, that'd be amazing! Glad you like the direction as well, wasn't very sure for a bit!
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Aye, sorry I couldn't make somethin' ya liked!
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No need to apologise, me having different tastes isn’t your fault.
Wait hold on. Twilight? Didn't she say her name was Sparkling Cider?
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Ooh typo, thanks!