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A special guest speaker arrives in Ponyville to teach Cheerilee's class about the inner workings of Equestria's government. And, well... it's Prince Blueblood.

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Haha! very good.

dude, that was awesome. I would very much enjoy doing a audio version of this.

Your writing style is very enjoyable and easy to follow but with good inquisitiveness.

I would very much enjoy a sequel to this story; i would be in the front seat waiting.

Very interesting and excellent story telling, keeping to plot, i look forward to more.


We Demand a SEQUEL

I wanna know what happens to blueblood in the forest and see how he changes

It's a good story :twilightsmile:

Thank you, all!

I'm piecing together a sequel in my head. Honestly, I didn't expect the story to end as it did, but poor, depressed Blueblood kinda took it in his own direction.

I'm pretty sure the next one will involve Zecora. Beyond that, still brainstorming.

That was very well written. I, like the others above, demand a sequel.
I couldn't say exactly what made it good. It simply had the right touch to make a great story.

Keep up the good work.

I. Love. This. This was a great story that kept my attention. I loved the way the characters all retained their personalities. I loved how all the details were neccessary. I just loved it. So much. :heart:

I am impressed. I was expecting something else from this story. Keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

At first I was like... Not HIM!:flutterrage::twilightangry2:

Then I was like... What the?:rainbowhuh::unsuresweetie::applejackunsure:

But when the end came I was like... NO! DON'T GO IN THERE! :raritydespair::raritycry::pinkiesad2::fluttercry::applecry:

SEQUEL >.> i know were u live sorta kinda somewere you currently on the left half of the hemasphere

I liked it, it's nice to see Blueblood not being a complete snob


i like, going to read the sequel naow.

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Whew, that was a lot of li'l word bubbles to click.

For those of you who were hoping for a sequel, I've got some news.

There is totally a sequel.

Enjoy! :twilightsheepish:

WOW that was good!


^Died a lil' of laughter right about that part...dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Scootaloo_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Applebloom_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Sweetie_Belle_lolface.png

And just finished...

Well then.

Often times, writers will go through a maturity process with a character through something very deep, emotional, and full of angst.

You did it with a schoolroom full of bright-eyes foals and a pompous prince.

Some breakthrough writing here. Well done, well done.

I made someone laugh so hard that they made a screencap comic!

I'm honestly grinning like an idiot right now. Glad you enjoyed the story :yay:

Excellent! All of the characters were well written, including and especially the secondary characters like Scootaloo and Big Mac. And I'm glad to see that there is a sequel in progress. I will have to give it a look! :pinkiehappy:

I tip my hat to you, sir. And have a thumb as well.

Only at when Cheerilee came back into the room, and I absolutely love it at this point.

The farmer regarded him silently for a moment. And then, to Blueblood's surprise, he flashed an easy grin. "Don't worry, buddy. You'll find a filly. Yer alright."

The prince stared after him in shock.

Awww... fanon Mac is one of my favorite background ponies.

And that was some of the best writing for a ponyfic I've ever seen. After reading every 6-star fic and many of the others, I really mean it.

Back to editing fics! :P

I'm guessing there are no big banks in the Everfree Forest.

Wonderful little piece here. (Is this where I yell "Bravo!"? I never could get the hang of those fancy protocols.)

I came here expected a story about Blueblood being an idiot. I got that... and a touching story about Blueblood's character. Well done.

Also, Cheerilee reminds Blueblood of Celestia. Both are voiced by Nicole Oliver. I see what you did there!

Huh, interesting take on Blueblood's character. It was a very satisfying read, and I have this sudden image of Blueblood running into Zecora and having some sort of character-building misadventure with her.

A zecora/blueblood couple? that should be fairly interesting.


After taking exactly 3 steps into the Everfree Forest, Blueblood was pounced by a manticore and devoured.

Fluttershy was at first horrified by what her forest friend had done, until she saw who the remains had belonged to. Then she gave the manticore a medal of honor.

And Celestia totally never missed Blueblood at all. In fact, she kinda forget he ever existed.

The End! :trollestia:


Huh. I expected a dumb-but-passably-funny, forgettable comedy about Blueblood being Blueblood. Instead... this wound up being pretty good. Blueblood was hilarious, and actually learned a lesson that apparantly set him on a life-changing journey. The foals were equally hilarious and believably in-character. And (a big pile of icing on the cake) we got some CheeriMac! That doesn't happen anywhere near often enough, in my experience.

So, good stuff. Thumbs-upped, and I'll defintely read the sequel ASAP.

Wow, thank you! That's a massive compliment. Some of those six-stars are flat-out phenomenal. I'd better put on a hat so my head doesn't swell too far :twilightsmile:

There might have been banks, once. Hrm. That was a missed opportunity for a gag... :fluttershysad:

Haha, yeah. Was wondering when someone would point that out. But then again, crushing on Cheerilee because she sounds like his aunt...man, poor Blueblood has enough issues without throwing in an Oedipus complex. :moustache:


Well, not exactly, but things don't go a lot better...

You know, it's ironic that the show's one obvious attempt at ship building has been largely ignored, while basically the entire fandom's agreed that Lyra and Bon Bon are a thing. Nothing wrong with that, just odd.

818089 Ohhhhhh...

So he gets eaten by a hydra instead of a manticore. :trollestia:

Wow. That's convenient. I have some reading to do, it seems. :pinkiehappy:

Yep! The hydra just snaps his spine in half with one bite, so he barely even feels his guts being ripped out. If the manticore had killed him, he'd have still been aware of everything until he finally bled out.

It's a fun story. I'm gonna submit it to EqD with an "Everyone" rating.

818196 Wow! That sounds amazing! I'll bet it'll hit 6-star in 10 seconds flat! :rainbowkiss:

The jungle is dark and full of diamonds, Blueblood. Unfortunately, that particular tale ended in disaster.

I'm with Poptard on the Cheerilee/Celestia reference. When Blueblood compared Cheerilee to Celestia, I leaned back and said, "That's so meta."

The story is well written, but personally I find the nerverending stream of hatred for Blueblood to be disappointing.

He was written the way he was to make a point. He was a deliberate gender reversal. He expected everything of Rarity that the traditional prince-loving fangirl expects of a prince. Expecting Rarity to pay for him? Standard thing for girls on a date to do. Expecting her to put her cloak on the puddle for him to walk over? Cliche thing for a guy to do. Just like the cliche of a girl sitting and waiting for a guy to open a door for her.

The point to all this was not to paint him as a bad pony, but to point out how ridiculous it is for women to expect these things from men, by showing how ridiculous it looks when a man does it.

Bashing Prince Blueblood for being a jerk is completely missing the point of his character.

This.Is.Amazing!! I need more!:pinkiehappy:

Well, I don't know about that. I think you're definitely onto something--he's a gender reversal of the typical helpless damsel archetype--but he's also an example of the classic snobbish, detached-from-reality noble. I mean, this guy didn't even know who Rarity was. She helped save the frickin' world, and he was so wrapped up in himself that he thought she was just another hanger-on. So in addition to the gender-oriented aspects of his character, there's a bit of good, old-fashioned "down with the aristocracy" classism taking place as well.

Plus, look at the show's primary audiences: kids and young adults. A lot of those young adults are male. And I think it's safe to assume that a lot of those males are pretty nice dudes who couldn't imagine treating a date like Blueblood did. Hence, he gets the same kind of hate piled on him that a jerk linebacker treating his cheerleader girlfriend like crap would.

Not that I'm trying to change your mind, here. Just explaining what my own impressions of the character were.

Loved it! The writing style is very easy to follow, the banter from the CMC was funny, and I like the characterization of Blueblood!

Off to the sequel I go! :pinkiehappy:

There was at least on fic where he was a jerk to Rarity because Luna was trying to 'help' and gave him horrible advice.

And another where he was deliberately trying to get her to buzz off because he was sick of annoying fan-girls like her.

Excellent story. It was very well written and I had a great laugh out of the disruptive class scene, right before cheerilee tossed the two trouble makers out. I could CLEARLY imagine that scene.

I'd like at least two sequels and maybe a prequel. First sequel would be of him facing the everfree forest and changing for the better, or facing that his failure is down to his nature and he cannot really change that. Sorry, I'm a cynic. Anyway, the second sequel (maybe an epilogue?) would have him return as a better pony as we get to see his changed life. If, along these lines, there's still very little details on background going on him, (how he got his life like that in the first place) I'd like a prequel explaining some of it.

Well, you're no Santa I know. I know. And by no means think of this as a list of demands or whatever. I just liked it soo much, I'd like to see planty more :pinkiehappy:

I think the "children are so honest and candid that talking to the right one works better than a trained psychologist aren't they adorable and innocent bwaaaa" is done in a sort of cliche way. Although it's still funny at the beginning when they're calling his bullsh*t and slowly tearing him down. As for Blueblood himself, this is a really original take. The idea that he was once next-to-useless, now rendered TOTALLY useless by circumstances outside his control, and he's totally aware of it.

I'm also praying that the follow-up doesn't ship him with Zecora. It's already up, so here goes!

Well, that episode also had the lesson 'Don't try to force two ponies together, even if you think they're perfect for each other', so maybe that had something to do with it.

That stoic muffin tear from Dinky and I just lost it.

Very nice piece of writing, I do always like these Blueblood redemption fics and this maybe my favourite :raritywink:
My heart absolutely broke when Dinky started crying though :fluttercry:

This was very good, and it felt like an actual episode! Redemption and Self-Actualization are always excellent topics for fan fics.

I've been a teacher before, and I can tell you that you nailed a room full of children excellently. They are cruel, never-tiring, ever-curious and always wanting more. If they see you squirm it's already too late to recover. I particularly liked his interaction with Dinky Doo, that was just darling. This could've been a very awkward stream of self-loathing, but you made it into a nice build up and although this was VERY dialogue heavy-- I enjoyed it quite a bit.

Big Macintosh was surprisingly stoic, and frankly that made him as a character in this story. He could've made a mean face, said nothing, and gone on. That would've been the end of that, and I would've thought nothing of it. Of course he would threaten the Prince away from his mare-friend, right? Well no, you took the higher road with him and that showed a real level of understanding for Big Mac as a character. The words you chose and the actions he took gave him a lot more staying power than I can usually conjure in the mostly-mute stallion.

I will CERTAINLY be reading the next bit of this series, and I'll give my thoughts as I go! You've got me hooked. :pinkiehappy::heart:

~Aegis Shield

P.S. I've written a blog about this story, and am sending some of my readers your way. Expect an influx of comments soon. :)

Read off a recommendation, heading for the sequels now :D Good work!

Thanks To Aegis Shield, you have a new follower. I had initially written off this story since I never thought much of Prince Blueblood other than he was a complete jerk. As I read through this, you transformed his character from being completely pompous and self-centered to somepony that hopefully get a second chance at that all important first impression. I really like your writing style and look forward to more of your work.

Wow! Thank you for the compliments and the recommendation :pinkiehappy: I'm thrilled that the story's turned out so well-loved. When I wrote it, I definitely didn't expect it to spawn two 25k+ word sequels, but Blue just turned out to be a fun guy to write about. Though I've taken him to some darker places than some folks were expecting... :scootangel:

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Thank you for the kind words :pinkiehappy: Hope ya enjoy the sequels, too; I tried to stretch my writing boundaries with them, and they go in some odd directions, but I've had fun writing them and I hope that shows in the work.

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