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bahatumay


Simultaneously able to type 94 wpm and still take three years to finish a story. If you're feeling generous, throw a ko-fi at me.

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While out practicing, Scootaloo misses a jump, and Rainbow is curious to know why. Scootaloo admits that she's distracted by something a classmate has said, and now she's wondering.

What is beauty, anyway?


Just a little Scootafluff one-shot written for (and winner of!) Weekly Contest 26.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 19 )

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...you're not wrong. :derpytongue2:

She crash landed, disappearing with a poof into a large pile of leaves and sending a shower of leaves up in a little mushroom cloud. Uninjured, she popped her head out and spat out a mouthful of the dry, crunchy leaves.

I realize that it's hard to find a good synonym for "leaves", but you may want to think about somehow rewording this anyway. Seeing the word "leaves" three times in such a short span disrupts the word flow just a little.

I like what I'm reading, though.

...and now that I've read the ending, I have to say I'm a fan of the story. :twistnerd:

BRB, gonna add this to some groups so other people can read it.

Go get 'em, Scoots! Knock 'em dead!:rainbowdetermined2:

Oh, what a Twist!:raritystarry::twilightblush::facehoof:

:facehoof: I thought it was apple bloom who won :rainbowlaugh: Love the "Twist" ending. Nice little story.

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There really isn't… :unsuresweetie: That did feel clunky. I'll see what I can do to it after work.

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Thanks! I'm terrible at groups.

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:twistnerd:

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Thanks! I figured that would bother Diamond the most. :trollestia:

Clever ending! Very nice story! :rainbowkiss:

:scootangel: Did you see Spike? He was a cool MC.
:applecry: He just did it for Rarity , We all know that.
:raritywink: He's such a helpful gentle drake
:twistnerd: He sure ith!
:moustache: Anything to help, Rarity
:unsuresweetie: Awe Kiss her already!
:raritystarry::twilightoops::rainbowlaugh::pinkiegasp::yay::applejackconfused:

Cute little story. . .

I really enjoyed this piece. Great job!

What's got your feathers misaligned?

I love this line. It add to a story when the slang and colloquialisms are representative of the world. And it's sooooo right for pegasus to ask that, instead of " What's wrong?"
On the whole, I love this story. MORE VIEWS ARE NEEDED!

This is even better! I love the ending. So Twist straightened her mane, huh? Diamond Tiara should have seen that coming. Add in a cute lisp and sweet personality...yup. Twist takes the prize.

....I want peppermint now. Or a candy cane...

I was not expecting to enjoy this and yet I did. Good job.

Short but sweet. Glad I read it. And Twist winning was a laugh!

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