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Pastel Pony


Just a girl doing her best to write semi-entertaining whatnots. I'm a female brony, not a pegasister ...Get it right.

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With the defeat of the sirens and her subsequent acceptance at school, Sunset Shimmer had thought her life had made a turn for the better.

She thought it would be easy to simply forget the Dazzlings.

However, a run-in with Sonata Dusk brings in another perspective on the whole Battle of the Bands episode, one Sunset had never really stopped to contemplate.

After all, it takes one monster to understand another...
Right?

Featured 11/1/14 - 11/5/14

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Wow! great job!:pinkiehappy:

This was quite sad. A very different take on Sonata there.

Love the backstory for Sonata here!

I do wish that Sonata would be reformed

Beautiful. Simply beautiful.

school heros

*heroes

Also, for emphasis, I'd recommend using italics instead of bold. From my experience, italics gets the job of conveying emphasis done much better than bold.

invasion of Equestria.
“You were created with

If it's the same speaker over multiple paragraphs, there is no ending quotation mark at the end of a paragraph. There is only an ending quotation mark when the whole speech is over.


That was a pretty good story. A bit rough around the edges, but I enjoyed this. Nicely done.

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Thanks for the tips! :twilightsmile: I never knew that about quotation marks, learn something new every day.

Excellent story! Thumbs up and faved.

Have problem with Sonata,


I don't have belief men are born to be killer,be monster,evil.

That is my ideology, not hers

(Why did people down vote me)

So good... :pinkiegasp:
I mean it, this is just... wow. :pinkiehappy:
Your back-story for the sirens is really interesting. I don't think I've ever seen that take on them before. Oddly enough, it reminded me of the Powerpuff Girls. :moustache:
Maybe someday, Sunset will tell Sonata about the Canterlot High portal. Unless I misread this, and she can never return home. Then again, Sonata could have been lying...:rainbowderp:

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Technically, Sonata can actually pass through a portal now, but due to being effectively cut off from her internal stores of magic, she doesn't have the magical capacity to make the jump without risking injuring herself or seriously depleting her remaining power levels, which could shorten the amount of time she has left to live.
Basically, my headcanon (and the canon to this story) is that portals require a bit of natural magic from their user to charge them and allow the subject to make the jump between worlds, so power inherent that resides in all equestrian beings (like we saw Tirek steal). Since Sonata is unable to access her own magic, the portal can't properly either.

Sounds like my bearded brother should've laid off the chemical X.

There's already a fic with this same name.

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Meh, with a site this big, it's bound to happen more than once or twice.

Not bad. I don't quite agree with the headcanon here, but it's a pretty decent story.

“So, what exactly did those pendants… channels, do?” She blushed slightly at her own outburst. “Sorry.”

Sonata waved away the apology and took another sip of her tea. “They were our cores, obviously. A way to store our internal magic and give us the ability to release it in a… controlled way. Similar to how a unicorn’s horn works, or a conductor for an electric current.”

“Right.” Sunset nodded. “A unicorn’s horn is necessary to properly channel magic and give it a point of release, without it, everything internalizes, and…” She shuddered slightly. “Well… I’ve heard stories.”

“So, our pendants were our channels for our brand of magic. Of course, in Equestria, they were much more… internal.”

You know, I thought about this after seeing the movie, and I don't think it quite makes sense: If those jewels were literally part of the sirens, and turned into amulets when the were banished, shouldn't Sunset and Twilight's horns have turned into, like, magic wands or something?

It would actually make more sense if the jewels were a set of magic artifacts from the beginning, because we know for a fact you can bring those from Equestria and still use them. (Twilight's crown, natch.) That would also explain why there aren't any other sirens terrorizing Equestria.

They're looking for new magical gems in Beijing? Huh, the Chinese really do manufacture everything nowadays. :rainbowhuh:

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Actually, the jewels became external pendants via a spell by StarSwirl when they were being banished, so that he could place the curse on them.

And part of that was mostly just inspired by the holographic Sirens in the film, which literally did just have giant fucking jewels bursting out of their chests.
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5216688 That is actually a fault in the movie my girl friend hates about the EG universe. She hates how Rarity and Twilight have no manifestation of horns when their magic pops up. I don't think that is a flaw in this story, considering the movie already screwed that up.

Well, that was unique. It bothered me a little bit at the time that they'd been banished for so long... I put it down to the fact that maybe time doesn't quite run the same way between the two worlds, but this is an explanation as good (and a little bit darker) as any,

Great work.

Just out of curiosity, have you read the comics? Because your description of how Sunset ended up going through the portal doesn't match up with what happened in the comic.

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No, I've always intended to read them, but never got around to it.

Regardless, I don't factor the comics into canon material when writing my stories, as quite a few people, me included, consider them their own sort of mini "this might have happened" universe.

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I've read pretty much all of them. Quite a few of them actually go above and beyond the show's average quality, especially the ones by Cook & Price. There are some absolute gems in there, like a two-parter where Big Mac goes into Ponyville to get a single nail to fix a wonky board.

Anyway, I think the comic detailing Sunset's time as Celestia's pupil is actually the official prequel to the first Equestria Girls film, so that's a thing.

I liked this a lot. When I saw the film, I was certainly not a fan of Sonata. She was just the usual ditz with the obnoxious voice. Seeing this story, however, and seeing the sirens' history through her perspective, is rather refreshing. Even though Sunset was on the other side and saving the school, it only becomes a reminder that she was like them once, so this can be a way for her and Sonata to connect.

any chance for MOAR?

And that's why I adore sunset and sonata being friends. :twilightsmile:

This was an awesome story! :twilightsmile:

Interesting take. I kind of thought the pendants allowed to channel magic (so destroying them put an end to that), but my personal headcanon was more along the intrinsically immortal, but unable to access magic end which would make for a pretty miserable existence. That and the inability to access the portal has less to do with a lock/spell than it does with not having the right kind of magic to activate it. I certainly wouldn't have considered them as created beings. Honestly, based on their forms, I'm surprised no one has a story about them being transformed Windigos or at least related to such.

I like it. I never connected sirens to anti-changelings, but it works incredibly well...
I'm a little heartbroken by the fact Sonata will die :fluttercry:

Good play, I'd like to see more but its excellent as a one-shot.

Huh, interesting. I don't agree with the headcanons, but I liked the story itself, so yeah. Nice. :pinkiesmile:

It's good to have characters work off each other, in this case it is no different. Great job, Pastel! :pinkiehappy:

5216913 I agree with you. No horn, no worth. May as well be Earth ponies.

I like it .

I was sad for Sonata. Tragic, really. Its like she got cancer (fuck cancer), nobody deserve to die like that.

Then it got better with Sunset's intervention. "Monster" by nature VS "monster" by choice, yet neither are monsters in the end.

I'd like to see where this could go, but its a good piece on its own too.

Maybe their tentative friendship will blossom into something else (or not), maybe they'll find a way for Sonata to not waste away (or not).


The gem bit made me think that , maybe, Celestia/Luna are the Dazzling 2.0, with most of the bugs taken out. She's wearing her golden gem-collar nearly all the time (luna seem to have a different variant of her own, not a gem but maybe a shaped semiprecious stone shaped as a moon?)..

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Holy shit. :rainbowderp:

Someone else finally thinks Celestia and Luna are artificially created life forms

That's more or less the basis of my personal headcanon, except that in the case of the princesses, they learned their lesson and started out with... live beings, so to speak.

One day, I will get around to writing that Celestia and Luna origin story. :twilightblush:

Damn, this is something I'd love to see continued, intriguing idea, and you're one of the more talented writers on this site...

meh I'll settle for a one shot.

I like it another.gif
Are you going to make more or just leave this fic like one-shot? Just wondering.

cute little story (Y)

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Just me speculating here..

IMHO there's plenty of weird coincidence and probable explanation that could justify that they aren't "born", but made. Maybe they are the result of a fully powered up EoH, eating all the bearers and combining them all into one (2?) uber-alicorn beings (for Twi , S1, they are at "bearer" stage, then S3 they are at lesser Alicorn stage, S4 they powered up to gestalt/shiny status, next would be fusion to alpha alicorn? Look at how OP Twi is already. Where Celly and Luna rule, Twi is the chainsaw that solve all the annoying problems they can't be bothered to blast themselves (maybe they even hold back, as to not obliterate everything everywhere if they cut loose).

Just the fact that the princesses have a "move the sun/moon at will" cutie-mark is a big point in favor of "there's no way in hell someone is born with that cutie mark and expect it to work on that scale". Imho they have been made to do that job by design, so massive teams of unicorns could do something else.. like planning the fight against Discord (of old).

And they (princesses) have mastered the EoH to the point they had 3 each.. without being normal bearers, and no one without the EoH could hope to defeat him (discord).. they happen to have it by chance? Nah. it was planned.

Heck, maybe Disco/Tirek are artificial too, older experiments in controlling the forces of the universe (Discord) or failed weapons of war (Tirek, the energy sucker) that turned bad (Changelings, love-powered bioweapon that didn't turn out quite as planned).

I am indeed an anti-changeling

We weren’t meant to be good. Hunting is our nature, ponies are our prey.

:derpytongue2:
Other than that, yeah, this is a great fic.

Rainbow Rocks turned me into a Sonata fan, and I have to say, I'm glad this story shows off the less ditzy side of her.

And she's going to die now? Well, going from immortality, I'd say that would actually be a relief after being trapped on that world. I'd definitely like to think that each of the Sirens aren't going to just drop on the spot at some random time, rather the detachment from their jewels and therefore from their immortality will actually set normal aging back in motion. Sonata (and possibly Adagio and Aria if they chose to) would then have the chance to live a normal life, grow up, get old, and then die. Call it a personal headcanon, if you like. :scootangel:

But seriously, great work. Love Sonata, love Sunset Shimmer, and LOVE this story! <3

You know, I always figured the sirens were evil because they were apparently the only beings in that school, and probably both worlds, who didn't have inherent musical talent. I mean, seriously, everyone sings in these movies! The Mane6 don't even have cutie-marks in music and they were still able to beat the likes of Octavia and the Dazzlers in a contest of music! Imagine if your destiny, the thing you're best at in life is something that literally everyone else can do, plus other things like making dresses or throwing parties. I think I'd be pretty bitter if that were the case.

I love your version of Sonata.

The Sirens were Sea Ponies who decided evil would be more fun than singing Shoo-Bee-Do all day long. :trollestia:

That title makes me think of Eternal by Evanescence. I think it fits, personally.

Anyway, that was beautifully written. It's definitely been interesting seeing what kinds of headcanons people have come up with for the Sirens. Starswirl being their creator is a new one, and it's honestly quite brilliant.

I've also seen enough of the "curse of immortality" theme to know why Sonata would accept her imminent death so readily. It's still a sad thought though, to go from being immortal to slowing dying.

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Jesus Christ, how have I not considered the possibility that Luna and Celestia are artificially-created life forms, created with a specific purpose?

She's wearing her golden gem-collar nearly all the time (luna seem to have a different variant of her own, not a gem but maybe a shaped semiprecious stone shaped as a moon?)..

I imagine that, like the Sirens in this story, Luna and Celestia's power would be internal within the realm of Equestria. Still, I could see Luna's regal symbol being made of mithril or something.

This is good. I'm not very good with words, so i'm not going to waste them on incoherent babbling. Though I would like to point out something to some people who are sad for Sonata dying and/or saying her defeat is like cancer, it's probably more like her age resumed from 16, and now she'll live for maybe 80 or so years(depending on health and medical advances) and then pass away from normal, human old age. So don't be sad that she'll die, be sad that she will have to go through that much longer of time until she can finally rest. Curse of immortality and all that. Also, for Sonata saying "a few years", you have to remember that to immortals, 20 years is like a blink of an eye. So a 'few years' to Sonata probably means '80 to 100 years' to us.

TLDR: The Dazzlers defeat didn't give them cancer, they'll just live relatively normal human lives now.

Well, that was rather nice.

Doesn't quite mesh with my own headcanon, but very little does. Thumbs up.

I see I'm not the only one to see the whole Battle of the Bands incident as basically a death sentence for the Sirens. Now they're probably doomed to slowly starve to death.

Interesting headcanon, perfectly wrapped into a somber package. A great fic, and a great song too.

After all, it takes one monster to understand another...
Right?

Fuck? :rainbowhuh:

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