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Having been defeated by the Rainbooms, losing their dark powers, and even their ability to sing, the Dazzlings are all but happy with how Adagio's plan went. But, as they did when defeated before, they will brush themselves off and keep moving forward.. Now they have to continue living in this world, without their powers this time. As they go on, however, they will start to notice some changes amongst themselves, and realize just how this tragedy affected each of them.

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It's not fair that they lost. They don't belong in the human world. Maybe there is some way they could get back home to Equestria.


5084890 Twilight's spell on the mirror. It made the portal active all the time, so there's a chance that they could return sometime...

5085006 I don't think it's *active* all the time, but that if necessary, she can use Shimmer's book to reactivate it. She does need to read and return messages now.

Besides, leaving it open like that would just encourage Pinkie Pie.


It DOES suck that they lost their powers. But compared to being turned to stone, banished to the moon, or imprisoned in Tartarus, having to live as non-magical humans seems like a pretty tame punishment.

5084890 5085279 Unless they starve to death... :rainbowderp:

Story seems to be off to a strong start; I can't wait to see where you go with this!

5085118 You know, I just found that song today before I posted this. I was looking to see if "back to the good life" was better instead of "good times" and found Weezer lol
Also, that song is unofficially Adagio's theme for the story, and I will keep it in mind when I am writingher.

5085797 Weezer's good, mang. Pinkerton's worth a listen if you like power pop/90s alt rock

Interesting start. Hope you can capitalize on it.

Awesome! I'm excited for the next part :twilightsmile:

I'm loving it so far! :twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::heart:
Hoping to see new chapter soon! :D

Interesting so far; a fair number of these kinds of stories have cropped up, but this one does seem to be taking a bit of a different tact than the rest. On the downside, I did spy a fair number of typos. For example, "each other" is incorrectly written as one word, and the dialogue punctuation is a bit off at points, specifically the usage of periods rather than commas when using said tags. For an excellent explanation of what I'm talking about, see here (actually, reading the whole section on dialogue punctuation is useful, but the linked part is the big thing to fix right now).

Editors are available on FIM Fiction and can be used to avoid these issues!

5090346 thanks for the criticism. I felt that because I didn't know anyone, all I could do was review it 5-10 times before posting. I'll look into a separate editor person if its that easily done here.

I hope you update soon!

NIce job! I really liked it! Very nice writing and interaction between characters. Also, (bonus point!) you got me to see Aria and Sonata's rivalry in more of a friendship kind of way, like how some friends give each other a hard time because they like them. I'd very much like to see where this goes. Until the next chapter is up, all I can say is keep writing. :pinkiesmile:

i like this. i really do. it's good! also, i think if they REALLY wanted to go back. they'd ask sunset or take the book and write a message. it's twilight. if sunset could be reformed...so can they. or they can fake it and just write a message asking to come to equestria.

Kudos for keeping them in character! A like and a favorite for you!

5093356 i really analyzed their interactions and wrote down their traits to remind me while I write. It helps, I just hope I can develop them without everyone hating the new Dazzlings.

To everyone else, I plan on updating slowly so that I don't rush it and make it look bad. First story in a long time. :P

Great story. Not sure what you've planned for future chapters, but if you're still planning, I would suggest having the Dazzlings do some interacting with the Canterlot High group (as opposed to moving out of town and never seeing them again).

Loving it :pinkiehappy: Can't wait to see the next chapter

Wow this was really good. I like the story so far and hoping for more ^.^

I wonder what'll happen to Sonata with Rarity. It probably won't be good, so a juicy story awaits us! Yay~

Ah, just when I was wondering how I was going to get my Dazzling fix for the day, this little beauty pops up! :pinkiehappy:
I can't wait to see what happens next!

Very nice. tell me are they sisters? I havent watched the movie. Or did you add that in there as your own thing?

That was actually not bad. I'm even looking forward to the next chapter.

Man, what are you doing reading all these stories, then? So many spoilers.

5111087 They never say in the movie that they are, but I thought about how they are still together, even though they constantly argue with each other. Kinda reminds me of my siblings, we argue a lot, but never hold it against our relationship.

Smart move stockpiling some money, but they are still going to need a HS diploma to get a job.


In the Dazzlings´ case. It seems like they have problems dealing with affection or emotions in general, when feeling them rather that feeding on them.

Oh, Rarity...things are about to get real!

Why cliffhangers, why u do dis :fluttershysad:

Another great chapter! I really like your take on the Dazzlings' interactions, and your writing is solid. Can't wait for the next installment! :pinkiehappy:

So far so good. I'm shivering with antici- *long pause* -pation

Awesome. I can't really say much more than that. Great job, and I can't wait for more!

I'm enjoying this so far and am quite interested in what comes next.

Man, this is why normally I just tag an interesting story as "read later," then forget about it for months until coming back to it and catching up on it. Then I don't have to wait for updates...

This is so good, I hope more comes soon!!! :yay:

This is really good!
I'm enjoying this story very much!:twilightsheepish::pinkiehappy:
I can't wait for the next chapter!:trollestia:

Interesting, this story now has my curiosity.

Please continue this story. So good! :heart:

“Oh, you know. Thought I’d go and hang out with some fiends.”

That's a pretty funny typo, as a fiend is another word for villain.

5133248 This is why I love multiple people reading my stuff. they will catch things my poor eyes can't :twilightblush:

I'm waiting and waiting when the next chapter! :fluttercry::rainbowhuh::flutterrage: I am of Polish :raritywink::twilightsmile: greet :heart: i love this :yay::pinkiehappy:

I feel bad for them.

Maybe they could go home. The portal is there.

I think I like where you're going with this.

However, it is at times hard to follow. Your grammar could use some work, especially your dialogue punctuation.

5111087 It DOES say in the movie that they're sisters, though only in a single line. Twilight says they're siren sisters when explaining their backstory. But, the line is so short that it's often overlooked.

Loving this story! The interaction between Sonata and Rarity was honestly pretty great, and I continue to adore how well you're writing the sirens. :twilightsmile:


Yeah, the dialogue punctuation is a bit off. I really can't recommend this guide on this very site for dialogue punctuation. It tells you everything you need to know to avoid 98% of dialogue punctuation problems.

On a positive note, you already are correctly setting off names in direct address with commas. It's mostly the all-too-common using periods where you should be using commas that adversely affects your dialogue punctuation.

In terms of the story itself, I did find Sonata and Rarity's interaction a bit humorous.

Is the guy who helped Aria at the grocery store supposed to be a character from the series? When I see descriptions like "He had pale skin, with light brown hair, wearing glasses and had a bit of facial acne that he didn’t seem to notice." I feel like it's describing some character, possibly a background character, from the series.

5150266 Thanks for the tips for my writing so far, Seth. I havent been able to contact an editor who can help as of yet, so I may end up editing a lot when I do... :twilightblush:
As for the character, it is Poindexter, the pony with the asparagus from the Iron Will Episode, and Shining Armor's friend from the comic series :pinkiehappy:

5150096 SWEET! :pinkiehappy: Thank you! I was just going off of a hunch, because I can get that way with my siblings at times.

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