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It seemed like an ordinary day. Go to school, take a nap, do nothing... and suddenly I'm hiding in my room, trying not to scream, as I become something that just isn't right.

*My twist on a HiE fic, which I mindlessly ignore. Based on a nightmare I had after the season finale.
**'Other' tag stands for 'changeling'.

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** This story was written when I was 14, and the quality and content reflect that. Please be aware that my position on topics contained within may have changed in the time between publishing and now, and I apologize for any offensive material that I may have condoned in my younger years. **

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Comments ( 195 )

Very original! I like it!:raritywink:

Not bad! Not bad! He seemed a little too calm about it, but overall, it's pretty good!

She's just lucky you didn't have one of those industrial metal ceiling fans or else she'd be about a foot shorter.
Also waiting for this to show why it was a nightmare.

"Based on a nightmare I had after the season finale." :rainbowlaugh:
Did it scare you or your mind...... like were you scared during the show...

A nightmare?
From what I've read so far, it sounds like you had a grand time.

Ooh, I am gonna like this! But I agree. Way too calm about sudden transformation. Let alone into a changeling. I mean, even though I would positively love it, I think I would freak out slightly if I suddenly became a pony while doing my homework in my room. Yeah...
Love it though! ^^

That last line is GOLD!:rainbowlaugh:

and then she found the fan...

never before has this thought been so goddess damed funny.

Perfect. Ending.
I love it! Absolutely perfect start, and I can't wait to see what's coming up next!

that last line made me laugh so hard XD

The Changeling queen has just hit the fan....... lol:moustache:

i loved teh end haha

Ah dream logic... makes perfect sense... it wasnt a nightmare im sure... at least you remember dreams that dont involve sex in one way or another

Liked AND Faved! Keep up the awesome work!

sclegacy.com/forums/image.php?u=4564&dateline=1272295541 Awaken my child, and embrace the glory that is your birthright. Know that I am the Overmind; the eternal will of the Swarm, and that you have been created to serve me.

well at least she found the fan

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I believe you have an appointment with a Templar and his Carrier. :eeyup:

I was in near agony at the last line:rainbowlaugh:

thwack thwack thwack thwack thwack thwack thwack thwack thwack thwack

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:twilightsheepish: I'm putting in the actual nightmare as a story-end bonus - it involved me being noticed as a fake Changeling and getting eaten. :ajbemused: It was very nightmare worthy.

ok...

This story is turning out nicely.

Also...Dat Ending!

I, personally, find Chrysalis to be 'Creepy Cute and Adorably Evil' more than anything. But yeah, the mental image of her being smack'd by a ceiling fan? hilarious.

however, my naughty mind conjures it less 'smack across the face/horn' and more 'epic unexpected spanking'

i found i really liked it but like many people have mentioned before by other people the start is a little jarring
in the way she goes "hey i'm a changeling" cool and then its just accepted. Its very interesting and i love the concept but i also have to wonder how if it is just a hive mind then how is it that she seems to bump into The Queen,surely if its just a hive MIND then its not physical :rainbowhuh:
maybe there's something i'm missing.
Also for me i just felt as if it was a guy as it wasnt specified until it was said to be a female and i was like :rainbowhuh: i mean its fine but as a guy im kinda predisposed to thinking of it as a guy unles stated otherwise
Also if it is a Hive mind then shouldnt they share all thoughts? if so then wouldnt the queen already know where she had been
if its just that she had been disconnected from the hivemind then i guess its fine just what's coming into my head as i write right after having read it
Also it was still well worth my time to read and thank you for the story, now im off :ajsmug:

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After the feedback, I'm thinking about rewriting a few sections of the first chapter.

And, for the hive mind;

I believe that the Changelings can move around in a mental state too. Anything other than a Changeling couldn't notice this, but the blue hue of a Changeling's eyes can detect the aura of another 'hived' Changeling. It would also allow them to check out a potentially dangerous area before moving in. Using this method, Chrysalis can summon her hive at will, and she can interact with the outer hives without letting herself be seen. While I'm in the Hive, I'm simply in an aura state. The Queen can see me, as well as other Changelings. If someone had walked in whilst I was part of the Hive, they would be quite surprised.

And for the shared thoughts;

I've been away from the Hive for quite a few years. In future chapters, it will be explained how I got stuck on Earth, why I forgot, and why Chrysalis hasn't been able to find me. Because I'm kind of new to the hive mind altogether, I don't know how to tap into the mind yet, so mine isn't viewed either.

To everyone else; 100+ alerts in two days? You guys are awesome! :yay: Thanks for reading, thanks for everything!

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thanks for explaining it to me :scootangel:
I can accept all those reasons sooo yeah thanks for cleaning things up:scootangel:
I like to try understand what the author was thinking when he was writing it.
--now im off:ajsmug:

496686 I think that there's kind of a mental override thing going on.

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true, true. But still.
Hehe. It makes me want to defy my laziness and procrastination and write out a descriptive mental process XD

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You took the words right off of my keyboard.

Interesting thought process here. I must study it more closely. To the Trackingmobile! :rainbowdetermined2:

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nice chapter once again! but i kinda felt you rushed into the 'war'/'enemy' thing a bit too fast

Heh. Gonna be fun if "female 3217" discovers "she's" been feeding on the rough equivalent to "royal jelly."

Which may well be, since "she" succeeded in transforming into Luna.

well it is a good story what do you expect

yay good chapter look forwards towards the next one I think a good idea would be for her to go back to Equestria and tell Princess Celestia, Princess Luna and Princess Cadence about her being a Changling and about the plot for Earth

You have piqued my curiosity.
I will wait for further details.
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Again, how is this a nightmare?
You seem to be taking these events fairly in stride.

Great chapter and cant wait for the next one. :pinkiehappy:


>>MyLittleBurger For the swarm you say? For most Terran commanders, all they hear is "Your base is under attack" before they send a huge ass wave of Hellions to KILL EVERYTHING WITH FIRE:pinkiecrazy:

Or, if they are like me and think :twilightoops:'F**K' while lifting structures. But thats besides the point.

This...is an interesting turn of events

so the main character can change into anything? bitchen

So female #whatever could change into a headcrab or xenomorph?:moustache:

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