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The Descendant


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Yesterday, the Cakes put Pumpkin and Pound on the train to head off to their first year at college.

Yesterday had been a very, very hard day.

Today will be worse.

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Awh, this is excellent.

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I'm very glad that you enjoyed it, Last.:pinkiesmile:

As per my original comment in The Ravens group, this is superb. Well-written, beautifully characterised, and emotionally hard-hitting, epsecially from the point of view of a feckless university student. Congrats, sir.

I guess this is what happens to every parent eventually..

...This was...

Beautiful. No other word to describe it, really.

Well done indeed, chief.

~Skeeter The Lurker

The hardest thing any parent can ever do, is admit that their child/children are all grown up and don't need them to take care of them anymore. :pinkiesad2:

I didn't need to read this to kno a few facts. One, I will love it, two, I will be broken, and three this is the story tha will warm my heart.

Very heartfelt. I'm glad you gave them a way to begin the healing process, rather than just leave them in sorrow. I would have loved to read about Cup and Carrot' vacation to the far and distant land of Baltimare, but that's a whole other story.

Pinkie was phenomenal. Though not a surprise, since you are an author that seems to understand her, it was highly enjoyed. I'm looking forward getting to her part of Sweet Taste.

I still love your writing, TD. :pinkiehappy:

That was beautiful to read.
Thanks for writing! :pinkiesad2:

I did notice what looked like an error, though:

Now that customers were finding their way into the shop, life seemed to return to normal around Sugar Cube Corner. The chime of Pinkie Pie’s voice drifted around them the Cakes, and a certain brightness seemed to fill the bakery.

I'm not sure what the best way to correct it would be, but something just seems off about "them the Cakes,"

This really hit me hard in the heart. Parents go through that stage where they see their children grow up and they don't want to see them go, after all of the cherished memories they had together.

Well-written and added the sad emotion as well. Excellent.

Wow...That's all I can really say. This was simply a beautiful story and once again just proves your talent as an author. I really liked your interpretation of the characters, and overall this is worth adding and in keeping in my favourites.

Damn...got me all teary. :pinkiesad2: I again look forward to reading more from you, TD. Keep up the outstanding work as you normally do.

-Frost :pinkiesmile:

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I require a sequel from the perspective of Celestia after sending Twilight to Ponyville.

I can only imagine how hearts must soar when you write happy things. :pinkiesad2:

I'm not going to lie. I literally gasped with joy when I saw you were the author and immediately clicked on this story.

Was not disappointed.

This was absolutely beautiful and many tears were shed

This is really a beautiful story. I found it interesting that it was from Carrot's perspective instead from Cup's because we rarely see the point of view of a stallion in the show itself.

At reaching the part with the black clouds I suddenly thought about this song

and at the end

Ahem...

And so ends, the final round of the game of this. Somewhere a certain stallion is watching over them:pinkiesad2: Oh, sweet Celestia, I'm crying again.

You always do this, and I can't stop. Damn you, DAMN YOU FOR BEING ONE OF THE BEST HERE!

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I was certainly hoping that college kids would get something out of this, feckless or not.:raritywink:

I'm glad that you've enjoyed it, Cara.


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Parents hope, struggle, and dream that they eventually get to the point where they can be this sad, Myth.:pinkiesad2:


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Thank you, Skeet. I kinda played to my strengths with this one... sad and emotional stuff.:twilightsheepish:


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Indeed, Pink. Parenting is a self-destructive activity... the whole point of the daily struggle is to make sure that they day will come when you are no longer required.:raritycry:

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Certainly shows!

~Skeeter The Lurker

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I'm glad that you had that kind of confidence going into the work, Al. I hope that you know that "The Game of This" never really ends. Players may take and leave the field, and the venue may change to an "away" game rather than home, but the game itself goes on.:pinkiesmile:


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I'm very glad that you enjoy my interpretation of Pinkie, Hob. She's a character that I struggle to interpret without going overboard, and I'm glad that you feel that I used her well here.:pinkiehappy:


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Oops! Thanks for the grammar catch, Ex! I'll fix that momentarily!:twilightsheepish:


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I'm glad that the story punched you in the heart, Chaos. I mean that in the best possible way.:twilightblush:

So sad but such a part of life, a great epilogue to taste and some interesting hints of future ponyville, rainbow travel? Taking after daring do maybe?

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Thank you, Frost. The Cakes are characters that I empathize with a great deal, and I'm glad that my writing can convey the way I appreciate them. I'm glad that my writing continues to find its way into your Faves.:twilightsmile:


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That may be an excellent idea.:pinkiesmile:


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I really should consider trying to write such works some day, Aeg.:twilightsheepish:


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I'm very glad that my pieces continue to live up to the standards they you guys have set for me and which I continue to try to work towards, Red.

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I'm very glad that you enjoyed it.:twilightsmile:


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I've alway enjoyed these musical interludes that you guys provide.:pinkiehappy:

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I'm very glad that you enjoy my interpretation of Pinkie, Hob. She's a character that I struggle to interpret without going overboard, and I'm glad that you feel that I used her well here.:pinkiehappy:

Pinkie is really hard to get right. But once you have that lightning in a bottle, it's so worth it.

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I'm afraid it's practically inherent in our breed. All students are required to operate at maximum feck at all times.

Glad to have enjoyed it! The pitchfork-wielding horde I mean, your devoted followers undoubtedly eagerly await the next offering.

It's been a while since I've seen a good fanfiction like this.

Well done.

;;

Brilliant as always.
Minor nitpick: The swallows' nest turned into a sparrow's nest when Carrot left for the delivery.

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Thank you very much. I'm very glad that you could enjoy it, and that you found it to be of a certain quality.:pinkiesmile:


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Gasp!:pinkiegasp:

Wow. Towards the end, I was getting teary-eyed, yet for some reason I was smiling as well. Since I'm getting close to when I'm moving out from my parents', this hit home a bit.

Fantastic as always.

Pertinent as well, I just finished my first week of my senior year in high school. I've been thinking a lot about my growing older, but not so much about my parents growing older. I think I'll go give them some hugs. Thank you TD.

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Gasp! indeed. You do realize that you opened a new round of the game of This by introducing Cheerilee and giving her that kind of story?
You monster!:raritydespair:
Don't think that wrinting 'The End' will get you out of writing a sidestory for her. :duck:

Woah, that hit me hard... 10/10!

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It's a big step, and when it happens you'll all deserve the well-earned tears. Good to hear from you again, it's been awhile!:twilightsmile:


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Go and give them some nice, big hugs, Ezio. They deserve them, and so do you. Thanks for reading another of my works.:pinkiesmile:


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You know, it's actually kind of odd that I haven't written more for Cheerilee, considering all that we have in common: we both love kids, we're both educators, we're both watching our biological clocks tick away with alarming rapidity... :twilightoops:...

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I'm very glad that you found it moving.:pinkiesmile:

Words can not begin to describe how moving this story is. You must be an immoral for you write with the sagely knowledge of one who has lived and experienced many things.

I'm about to start my last year of High School, and this hits pretty close to home right now. Can't imagine how it will be next year. Now I almost feel guilty about ageing, for my parents' sake.

So, my dear elder Descendant, I demand your hand in marriage! I need your excellence to rub off on my mediocrity. :raritywink:

Oh, I'm crying.
Oh, oh, I'm crying!:pinkiesad2:
I'm starting my last year of high school in one week. And then it's off to college! But then I wonder how my mom and dad will handle their son leaving them. Hopefully they'll be okay.
Then again, they still have a nine year-old daughter to contend with. So their parenting lives aren't completely over.
Have a like, my friend.

Another master piece.

that hurt, but it was excelent writing. good job man.

Congrats on making it to high in the box!

jz1

Of all the things to read the night before I go back to college!

> Cup Cake continued, “we did. Oh, did you go and forget that already, Pinkie, dear?”

1stly, I thought that is an error, given that, canonically, Miss Pinkamena Diane Pie has an eidetic memory, but then I remembered that perfect memory is unsustainable. I imagine that 2 decades in the future, her memory should be normal. I can imagine the panic Miss Pinkamena Diane Pie experienced when she 1stly saw a pony she knows and knows for a fact that she knows but cannot recall the name and birthdate.

It was an empty nest.

It was a house with all of the children gone.

If Carrot and Cup thought the first day of college was hard, I cannot imagine the waterworks when Pound and Pumpkin get married...
:raritycry:

The upside, I imagine, is that they will have grandfoals to spoil and dote on soon enough.
:pinkiehappy:

So I just hid under my covers for a solid minute and a half... That hasn't happened since... well... The Father of My Children? Yeah...

But I realized I probably shouldn't have read this mostly because I go to college next year and my mom's gonna be really upset again and I don't want to deal with that guilt. And then we have my favorite ship ever dealing with these same feeling and I just can't deal with it.

Anyway, this was stunning, as usual! I mean it's The Cakes! It's great to have you back T.D.! I missed reading stuff from you! FIMFiction just isn't the same without you! And especially a fic about The Cakes? Man what a comeback! :pinkiehappy:

I'd have skipped this over for other stories, but then I saw who wrote it.

Now that I've read it, I'm not sure whether to congratulate you for an excellent story, or swear vengeance on you for making me feel this crushing sadness.

I guess it'll be the latter this time. Minus the vengeance part.

Pylons, away. :pinkiesad2:

So excited to see a new story from you. And you never disappoint.

that pulpy mess over there? that's what's left of my heart after reading this. That's what happened after it was ripped out and crushed by all of the feels from this fic. oh yes, hearts were rended and tears were shed. and for that I must commend you. :pinkiesad2:

Pound Cake, Age 3
Pumpkin Cake, Age 5 ½
Pound Cake, Age 9
Pumpkin Cake, Age 11

wait, is this saying that Pumpkin is two years older than Pound? are they not fraternal twins? or is this just because Carrot and Cup oddly decided to measure them at different ages?


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what about Twilight Velvet and Night Light? :applejackunsure:

like why do you just Celestia including her parents who have a more familial bond would also be two different perspectives

Damn you're good at emotion-filled stories.

Damn you for being good at emotion-filled stories.

;_;

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