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The Descendant

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As the Cakes make a very special gingerbread house the act reminds them of their lives together; hinting at those they loved, challenges they faced, and the struggles that continue even after lovers say "I do"...

Inspired by the image "Artist Training Ground Day 22" by Egophiliac. Used with permission.

Chapters (17)
Comments ( 506 )

cool! its easier to read here than in deviantart ^^

Oh such splendid awkwardness.

Loved the use of the old dance hall, nice continuity with Tangled Up In Blues.

Ah, that date, only one thing goes through my mind...

Painted blue.

Dat first kiss, right in front of the future Sugar Cube Corner. :pinkiegasp::heart::pinkiehappy:

It most certainly is!:twilightsmile:

I could scarcely agree more!:pinkiesmile:

You're closer than you know with those guesses, but that's a secret we'll save for later. I'm glad you could see the importance of the setting!:twilightsmile:

Welp, this is was...amazing. I love the Cake's origin story. I'm happy that you finally posted it here. What can I say about this? The characters have dimension, it's well written, it's adorkable (I love awkward teenage Carrot and Cupcake) and d'awww. My favorite part is how Carrot sees Cupcake and how much he tries, the guy's got spirit.


Peace out.

I hope that you enjoy watching their relationship grow and face challenges over the next few weeks just as much as you've enjoyed watching these first few fumbling steps, Waf!:twilightsmile:

Thank you, John! You know that I always value your input!
I'm glad that people are still willing to read a story where the "ending" is know... sometimes it's the journey that matters most!:twilightsmile:

So Ivory is the Mayor? I did not see that coming. I'm loving this, can't wait for more. BTW, forget wat I said about you being one of the best authors on this site. You are without a doubt the best author on the site, and I can't wait for more.

Calling it, this is the opposite of the Mr cake is literally a cake story. Mrs. Cake is literally a cupcake.

Quarry is scary. I'm very curious to see what his special talent is besides being a jerk and resisting my best attempts to empathize with him.

Yes, this story is also the background tale of Ivory Script, who we all know and love as the hair-dyed Mayor Mare! I stole her name from Past Sins by Penstroke!:twilightsmile:

I'm the best author on the site? Hooray! I'm Cold in Gardez!:twilightblush:

Seriously though, thank you for that compliment, it means a lot to me!:pinkiesmile:

Quarry is an... interesting... figure throughout the rest of these first chapters. I don't expect you to empathize with him, but I hope you get to understand him as the story progresses.

Thanks so much for reading and commenting!:twilightsmile:

I love this story keep it up. :pinkiesmile:

By the way, Pinkie Pie appears in the character tags, so what kind of role can we expect her to play in this? :applejackunsure:

She and her family have appeared in a series of little vignettes starting in chapter 2, and will appear in little scenes until her big reveal! She plays an important role in the life of the Cakes, so expect her appearance to be part of their growth!:pinkiesmile:

Thanks so much for reading and commenting!:twilightsmile:

476550 Well o.k. then. :ajsmug:

And what about Ivory Wig our mane dying mayor to be what role will she play? :coolphoto:

She's Cupcake's best friend. If you get a chance to read the last few pages of Chapter 4 her principal role in the story has already been revealed!:raritywink:

The initial bit of backstory we get for Carrot and his mother in this chapter is very interesting.

Nice bit of advice from Ivory, sometimes you just have to sieze the day.

Alright, I think I'm long overdue for a comment, but now that we're four chapters into the story and I've read them all I have enough of a feel for it so I can voice my thoughts!

First off all I'm really happy that you're doing a backstory for the Cakes. It's great to see a story dedicated to them since they don't usually get a lot of attention from writers. I'm also loving the adorable if sometimes awkward interaction of Carrot and Cupcake, and the pacing of their budding relationship feels just right. I'd say you're doing great with the romance side of the story.

Now for the thing that's bothering me a little: where's the conflict in the story? I mean, I know that you've shown us pieces of what's coming, Quarry, Pinkie and the 'Game of this'... But we're four chapters in and we don't really know a whole lot about the conflict in the story. It's one thing to keep Carrot in the dark but as the reader I want to at least have a general idea of what's happening. Of course I remember you mentioning that this story is going to be a long one, and it's entirely possible that this is just a slow start / lot of world-building you're doing before the main events kick off in earnest. :twilightblush:

Anyway, I'm having a great time so far so keep those chapters coming!

Sometimes you have to seize the day indeed!:pinkiehappy:

You are absolutely right that there needs to be a conflict, and there are three rounds of "The Game of This" that will be played. The chapter I update here in a few minutes will give to a strong hint as to where the conflict is coming from and where it is headed! I hope!:raritywink:

oooh. this is getting good. can't wait to see when pinkie comes to them.

There's a lot of story between now and then, but I hope you enjoy the journey to get there!:twilightsmile:


I'm very glad that you are!:twilightsmile:

"Try to go limp" :rainbowlaugh:

Man, Cupcake and Ivory really should have gotten that realtor in on the game.

That feel when you swear you saw a story marked complete, and then it cliffhangers. :applejackunsure:

So the waiting begins....

477014 O.k. then. :eeyup:

Anyone else who's going to play a role in their survival, other than that 'quarry' pony? :unsuresweetie:

Ah Cliffangers the greatest evil in all of history. :raritydespair:

But you're doing good with this, keep it up. :pinkiehappy:

If it makes you feel better, after today we'll be 1/3rd of the way through!:raritywink:

I don't know if "survival" is the right word... but please know that each of the characters are bound to one another in ways you may not have been anticipating!:twilightsheepish:

I'm very glad you're enjoying it!:pinkiesmile:

Wow . . . this story is just amazing and very touching. I got misty-eyed hearing Cheesecake tell her tale. Great job, I eagerly await more!

Man, I really was expecting Carrot to somehow get involved in Quarry's 'incident' at the fountain, that could have gone really badly.

Cheesecake's story was heartbreaking. :fluttershysad:

Beautifully written, the part with Cheesecake brought tears to my eyes. Now I'm wondering, what is it that Cupcake is hiding from Carrot, and where does Quarry come into this? I'm dying to find out.

Thank you so much!I really, really, really appreciate that coming from you, someone who has watched the entire MLP fandom grow from it's first days!:twilightsmile:

Glad that the story is still resonating, DJ!:pinkiesmile:

You will find out in exactly two chapters!:raritywink:

489787 Very well then. :pinkiesmile:

And I'm guessing the cake twins are not going to be making an appearnce in this. :rainbowhuh:

I think 'Quarry' might be the previous mayor of ponyvillie before old Ivory Wig shows up and beats him in the election. :moustache:

Define "appearance"... :twilightsmile:...

I ain't tellin'!:pinkiehappy:

...is it... is it futa cake?

How epic would it be if quarry did nothing bad the entire fic?:trollestia:

>Living in denial

Naw, Quarry does quite a bit... some of what he does is, in fact, the reason I had to give this a "teen" stamp.:pinkiegasp:

494457 Well what I meant by apperance is that they won't appear or be mentioned in the fanfic. :eeyup:

As for why I think Quarry's the mayor he said "My Ponyvillie" and it sounds to me like that means he hold's high authority, and you can't get any higher than mayor, unless you're looking to bust Celestia down a few pegs. :twistnerd:

Aw how cute they snuggled together. :heart:

And this chapter has confirmed our players. Carrotcake and Cupcake, Ivory Wig, Pinkie Pie, and Quarry. :scootangel:


I guess the best way to describe Quarry saying "My Ponyville" would be to say that he's calling it his "territory", as though he's protecting it. I'm glad you liked the snuggling!:twilightsmile:

"I don't want him to feel like I'm teasing him..."
"Lay with me."
"Lay with you?"

"Celestia bless us, everyone!"

499533 I realized my mistake, Quarry is a banker. :twilightoops:

wow. that was soooo sweet! i wonder what she's hiding! :rainbowhuh:

Ah! The vagaries of the English language!:twilightblush:

Yes, that too!:pinkiesmile:

I'm glad you found it sweet! We find out next chapter what her secret is so don't be shy about coming back!:twilightsmile:

Great story. Keep it up :)


ROLLERCOASTER OF EMOTIONS:raritydespair::raritycry::rainbowwild::ajsmug::coolphoto::derpyderp1::heart::pinkiesad2::pinkiesad2::eeyup::facehoof::moustache:

Yeah, that is about what I was suspecting we were eventually going to learn about Quarry, as well as the reason for the Game. Nice reveal, by the way, having the start of the chapter be about 'Cupcake's father' right up until we got the "Thank you, Mister Quarry!" from Pinkie and her sisters.

Oh man, finding out who Cupcake's dad is...I had my suspicions that Quarry was important, but I didn't expect THAT important.

Oh this will be most interesting.

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