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This story is a sequel to Celestia's Tiny Student


(Title changed from "Ponyville's Tiny Librarian" for reason pointed in this blog )

Twilight Sparkle is a one-kilogram pony the size of a large rat, shrunken by Princess Celestia following her entrance exam to the Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns to ensure that her power surges would not pose a danger to the ponies around her.

She’s spent thirteen years full of hard training at her new size, facing the life-threatening experiences that came with living in a world of giants. To survive those thirteen years of hardship and joy, of learning and adventure, and of pride and humility, Twilight has challenged herself to be stronger, to overcome any obstacle.

Now that tiny Twilight is on her way to Ponyville to oversee the preparations for the Summer Sun Celebration, how well will this miniature mare fare outside of the confines of the castle? How will the other Element Bearers react to her? How will Nightmare Moon react to the tiny unicorn? Is Twiny prepared to face Ponyville, and, more importantly, is Ponyville prepared to face her?

Credits:
Art cover - kc day

Top editors: (editing and rewritting for months, hope quality is to your liking).
Kydois
Georg

Nightmare Moon's sentences editor:
Bahatumay

Applejack accent editor:
Crimson Star (Chapter 1 - Applejack)
Rebel Brony
The Notebook is grounded

Pinkie sentence's editor:
Plump it UP

Other editors:
Hereward
tana1100
Lab (small editing from prologue to chapter 4)

Pre-reader:
Rated Ponystar

To celebrate the release of this sequel, I created a group called “Twinyverse” for all fans of this story where you can talk about it and track all side stories with ease.
The Twinyverse Group

Chapters (25)
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Comments ( 1516 )

*explodes from sheer joy.* :yay:

You are joking! Man, this is the bomb! What a release, will be looking forward reading this. Big thanks, keep up the good work! :yay:

Sweet it finally here is so great

AND ON MY BIRTHDAY TODAY!?!?:pinkiehappy::yay:
Officially, BEST 20th B-DAY EVER!!

Liked, Favorited, Read when I wake up! It's finally here!
Yesyesyesyesyes!:twilightsmile:

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DID THIS ALL POST IN A SINGLE DAY?!

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This is what my top editors have been working on for months. It is a lot to read so no need to hurry. Just have fun and leave comment what do you think of this sequel or of each chapter, I am really curious how well we did.

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Happy Birthday and have fun. Just do not abandon a party to read this if you plan to make one.

you know a story is good when you don't have to read it to know. all that is needed here is to look at who the author is :twilightsmile:

Pardon my ignorance, but I couldn't help but notice something while reading the prologue. Does Twilight have the ability - if she chooses to - to turn herself back to normal size?

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Does Twilight have the ability - if she chooses to - to turn herself back to normal size?

Yes.
Though she's got poor control when at full size, overestimating things.
Not a problem in 'dust off and nuke it from orbit' type situations. (though she's been reluctant in the past to use this ability)

4584434 I see. I have to wonder how much power she could have in this storyverse when Celestia, Luna and Cadance give her their powers when she is normal size. I'd imagine that Tirek would be obloterated along with half of Equestria. XD

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Thanks, but I still hope that what I wrote life to the standards you put on me, and be aware that most of this is work of my top editors. I may be the one who write this story, but with my limited arsenal of words and English not being my native language, a lot of stuff had to be rewritten for better flown.

So I think that my two top editors deserve a hug.

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Yeap. Returning to her normal size is in Twilight's abilities, but shrinking herself is far above her league. So if she ever returned to normal size, she would need help of Celestia (or Cadence) to shrink again.
And yea, if she ever returned to her normal size, she would most likely push door open with strength that would move two tons heavy boulder, she would hug another pony so tightly that it would put Pinkie's hugs to shame, and by levitating another pony, she would throw her/him flying to other part of ponyville.
As for Twilight getting power from all 3 princesses, she is not that powerful, so it won't make much diference in terms of raw power, HOWEVER, Twilight has been challenging herself for her entire life, delt with giants on her every step and had a lot of compat trainings, so while her raw power would not be greater, her skills and fighting abilities would most likely put Tirek to his knees. (It is like a diference between enraged mage with to much power for her to control and enraged battle mage who has been fighting and hunting giants for his entire life, it would easy break the stalemate).

4584497 I do have to say this series was rather well thought out. The idea of how Twilight had to come to terms with her size changes but still being able to use her powers as effectivly if not more so than in the show itself while still accepting the scale of her size and her abilities. :)

44k words already! :twilightsmile:

Poor Luna. Afraid that she can never be forgiven even when confronted with evidence that Celestia has been trying to make things right for a thousand years.

If I remember correctly there is an episode where applejack is shrunk to the size of a mouse. Twilight would definitely be a big help then.

I love this. Your take on Raritys reactions is simple incredible. So far you have been capable of rewriting the shows start in a new exciting way. And then you get to Rarity you really hit her personality perfectly and the way Twilight got her thinking was just perfect. It was a necessary lesson but damn was it well done. I salute you. Now to read the rest of this masterpiece.

It is finally here :pinkiegasp: it is great :pinkiehappy:more is great

I have read the other story you made and I will tell thise, thise one beats all others and is in my top5 fav. I look forward to more and hope the will as awesome as thise one in ch to come:twilightsmile:

Gods speed old friend.

Where did you get that picture of Twilight after her cupcake massacre? It's too cute for me to ignore. Whose the artist, I just have to check the rest of his/her work?

you know i cant wait to see how strong she will be as a alicorn in the show she could cary 4 of her friends and that was with no strength training
and i cant wait to see how rainbow reacts to twilight being in the wonder bolts:rainbowlaugh:

Been WAITING for this part of the Twiny storyline.:pinkiehappy: I'll be surprised if I'm the only:pinkiegasp:

It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! It's out! YAY!

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Well. Being small is both her limitation and stregnth.

Living a harsh life made her far stronger than in the show, but being afraid to return to normal size greatly limit what she can do.

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Those 44k words were edited for few months. I will update this story as fast as my top editors can edit it, but I am afraid it will take at least 3-4 weeks before I can upload new chapter, so do not read this story to fast, but rather read slowly and enjoy.

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I am afraid that it is waaaaay ahead of this chapter, but yea, she would teach Appletiny a trick or two.

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Actaully, from Luna's perspective, she thought that Celestia banished her to the moon to become sole ruler of Equestria, and now she found out that it happened because Celestia believed that she was going to kill everypony with ethernal night. It was a big hit in her pride, something Nightmare Moon won't forgive easy.

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I love this. Your take on Raritys reactions is simple incredible. So far you have been capable of rewriting the shows start in a new exciting way. And then you get to Rarity you really hit her personality perfectly and the way Twilight got her thinking was just perfect. It was a necessary lesson but damn was it well done. I salute you. Now to read the rest of this masterpiece.

Oh, how I love to reply on comments like those. (This comment rather than say that this story is good, it say why this story is good).
Anyway, thanks a lot. I always found Rarity to have the biggest trouble representing her elements because of her weaknesses, but flaws are in characters so he/she can overcome them, and since Rarity is a noble type of pony, it was obvious that Twilight will dislike her character. As for Rarity, the first step to fight one's flaws is to acknowladge them).

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It took us few months to get those things edited. Please do not read it all in one day because it will take a looong time before next chapter will be up. Just enjoy yourself, but do not rush with reading.

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This story is good, because it was the project I and my top editors put the most work into. "Celestia's Tiny Student" was my first story, a story that helped me gain experience and assemble an editing team. My side stories were more of an experiment and something I wanted to write for fun (my top editors didn't worked on "My Little Medic" so I could update it quickly).
Still, I am unsure what to think of how fast you read everything. It took us months to get this sequel started, and you finished reading it in few hours. Updating it with another chapter will take weeks at best.

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Hello.

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Here it is - http://popcornpuffs.deviantart.com/art/Twilight-Sprinkle-332044253?q=favby%3ACommanderEX%2F56625796&qo=28
I collected all tiny Twilight arts I could found in deviant art in this blog: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/274684/twiny-art-section-full-galery
If you like tiny Twilight's arts, feel free to check it and have fun.

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you know i cant wait to see how strong she will be as a alicorn in the show she could cary 4 of her friends and that was with no strength training

With earth pony magic support and willingness to train it, she sure will be very strong. But keep in mind that Twilight walked with TOM on her back in Discord's episode, so even in the show Twilight was very strong physically.

and i cant wait to see how rainbow reacts to twilight being in the wonder bolts

Did you read chapter where Twilight meet Dash in this sequel, or not yet?

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Hope it was worth the wait. Feel free to leave comment what do you think of what I wrote, I would like to know your opinion.

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Have fun, do not read it to fast and leave feedback what do you think.

4585261 yes i have she said she knows spitfire and got a ride from her not that she was in the wonderbolts:twilightsmile:

"It was only a theory."

A GAME THEORY! Thanks for reading!
... Waaaaait a minute, this isn't a game! This is real life! The horror of it all!
:pinkiehappy:

Yay, the sequel is finally here!
Thank you so much for even writing this! :twilightsheepish:

Are the editor credits in the chapters?

reaction to opening the feed "hmm ponyville's tiny librarion what's that, oh OH! It's here, It's here it's here, *click * *scroll down* "and there's lots of it! :pinkiehappy:

So I'm totally looking forward to reading this, but how much does My Little Medic figure into this story? I still haven't read that one...

I wonder if rarity is going to try and play dress up with twilight?

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If you liked it, check up the art's I collected in this blog

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Well, technicaly she was their medic, not a fellow fliers, but yea, it is still being part of the Wonderbolts.

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Pinkie: Actually it is a fanfic, does this still counts?:pinkiehappy:

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You can thank me by telling me what you think of what I wrote. Every author like to respond on feedback, and mine stories, while have many likes, have surpricely low ammount of comments and feedback, so outside of knowing that people like my story, it is hard to say what they like and dislike in it.

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At the last chapter. I wanted to credit editors in each chapter, but with so many people I worked with, it would be a huge pain to do that. So I put all editors/pre-readers at last one in author notes, but I think I will also place them under story description.

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Yea, but this lots took months to edit, so do not rush to fast over it. Next chapter will probably be uploaded for next few weeks. Also, feel free to tell me what you think of what I wrote, i am curious.

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Events in "My Little Medic" affect this sequel, but not that much. I think it won't hurt if you read "medic" later.

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Oh, You will need to read to see, bwahahahaha. But yea, Twiny would make a wonderful model for Rarity's imagination.

Love it! i'm so glad the sequel is finaly out! Poor twilight take a lot of bitting!
THe conflict with Nightmare moon is very interessant but it's also weird.
At first, it seems that NM tortures Luna and enjoies being in control but after they seem very close, like just one ponny who gets angry/happy.
NM is really a other dark personality at last?
Please continue, your story is amazing! (And your Twilight is a shameless Marie Sue)

Pff...author could began from this chapter, previous ones are waste of time.

Wow.:derpyderp1:
Woooooow.:derpyderp2:
You are the first example I've ever seen of an author who waits to release the sequel until there's quite a bit of it written out... and then releases it all in one day.
:derpytongue2:But I am not complaining.
You and your editors did a fantastic job, and I respect that you went and got experts for some of the more complex characters.
Yes, Rarity and Nightmare Moon/Luna. Rarity is tricky to write well, especially when we're addressing her earlier flaws, in order to mold her into the pony we all know she can be. The clash between her and politically-savvy Twiny also pleased me. Ordinarily, I'd prefer relationships to not start out this way, but having Twiny say nothing and letting Rarity live her little delusion would, to me, go against what you molded Twilight to be.
As for Nightmare Moon... Writing correctly in an archaic dialect is hard.

NIGHTMARE NIGHT, DAMMIT.

LOVE IT:heart::heart::heart: can't wait for more:twilightsmile:

ITS HERE!!!
And its 43,670 words?
Sleep is for weak!! :pinkiecrazy:

that picture at the end was so cute.
but i think the 1 dislike for this chapter is because someone else ate the hot sauce :D

4585261 Thanks for the blog info. I'll check it out in the morning. Seriously though, I rarely ever give a like to incomplete stories nowadays but you have proven yourself worthy of such trust. Keep up the good work with both this and "My Little Medic". This ones like is already well earned.

Ten chapters. This is probably the biggest debut to a fic that I've seen yet in terms of words and chapters for one posting. Fantastically told so far, you've really done well in making this fic live up to its namesake, and I eagerly await more!
MORE TWINY I SAY! :pinkiecrazy:

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Love it! i'm so glad the sequel is finaly out! Poor twilight take a lot of bitting!

Yea, she sure do. I bet that if Twilight was an RPG game character, she would be the one who sacrefices all her luck to improve her strength, endurance and magic, and having - 10 luck sure strike her everywhere she goes.

THe conflict with Nightmare moon is very interessant but it's also weird.
At first, it seems that NM tortures Luna and enjoies being in control but after they seem very close, like just one ponny who gets angry/happy.
NM is really a other dark personality at last?

Nightmare Moon was not torturing Luna, it is just her way of talking to her. And yea, Nightmare Moon is like Luna's darker personality, but while Luna and Nightmare Moon are one and the same, their conciousness and awarness is split up. It is as if two personalities or two minds shared the same body.

Please continue, your story is amazing! (And your Twilight is a shameless Marie Sue)

Aww... But I didn't wanted to make Twilight a Mary Sue. She have many flaws and is constantly challenged by the enviroment around her, and Mary Sue is a character who can solve every problem she encounter without any efforts on her side.

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Pff...author could began from this chapter, previous ones are waste of time.

You mean chapter 2 "Nightmare - Luna" ?
Or chapter 2 from "Nightmare - Sacrefice, Nightmare - Mercy, Nightmare - Luna" ?
And do this mean that everything what I wrote besides Twilight's encounter with Nightmare Moon is bad?

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Yea, it was not easy. With AJ I had no idea how to write her accent correctly, and I didn't know many words she used in the show, so I searched for many people to help out. Sadly the person who wrote her so well in "Summer Sun Celebration - Applejack," ran out of time to work on her and I had to find other people, and man, I had to search a lot.
As for Nightmare Moon/Luna, I wanted to make switch between thsoe two special, so I decided to have Luna speak old Equestrian while Nightmare Moon use modern one, and both of them adress themselves as "we" since they are two personalities in one body. It was not easy, but luckly I found someone who helped with old Equestrian and was good in editing Nightmare Moon (I found him in gorup "Nightmare Moon Hero").
While I searched for AJ editor, I also looked for someone who like to write Pinkie's sentneces to help out as well.

As for Rarity, she is flawed in the show, but it also makes her a good character, because she have flaws to overcome, and since her standards goes against what Twilight believe, their personalities colided. (Not all friendships starts with candy and rainbow).

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Who's that? RealityCheck! An elite author who next to Pen Stroke wrote great Nyx's stories.

It is an honour to receive comment from celebrity like you. Even if those are just three words I am unsure what they mean. I am fan of your stories and I hope that you liked mine.

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You will need to wait weeks. My top editors take their time to ensure quality of every chapter.

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Nope, read it all in one sitting, and I now bask in the contentment.

-Missy

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Please do not read everything in one go. You should read it slowly while rested and with snacks next to you and enjoy every chapter.
It took us few months to get this sequel up, and it will take weeks befroe next chapter will pop out, so do not rush it to fast, or else fun will end to quickly.

Also, hope you can leave some feedback and tell me what you think of it.

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Well, Twilight ate hot sauce in the original story as well, so he should blame it on the show. Also, unlike in the show itself, in here Twilight is already hardened to take on such hot integrents (she endured fireballs, drinking rainbow, eating super hot soup that Philomena prepared for Celestia during april foal's day and so on) so she can take it like a boss. :moustache:

Still, if someone put a dislike on my story, it would be nice to know the reason behind it, but whatever, there is no story that will satisfy everyone.

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Will do. Hopefully I won't fail your expectations in later chapters.

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Well, originally it was meant to be prologue and 5 chapters. But after taking a closer look at edited work, I decided that it would be far better if I split it into more for estetic reasons.
Chapter 1 was turned into Twilight meeting AJ and RD, chapter 2 turned into meeting with Rarity and Fluttershy, and chapter 3 into Pinkie and Nightmare Moon.
You get the picture.
Anyway, it took my editors months to get this sequel going, and it will take weeks to update new chapters, so I hoped that it would last for a bit longer than a few hours, oh well.
Also, feel free to join Twinyverse group. I made it for all the fans of tiny Twilight and I hoped we could use forum to talk more outside of just comments.

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