A terrible self-insert, Human in Equestria, where I end up in the fore mentioned world, and go on adventures with Twilight and the gang, while dealing with such problems as depression, home sickness, etc.
Takes place starting after the Season 4 premier.
Original Cover art by Blackshadow of Abys
Updated cover art by Tennis Match Fan
Editing done by molly wormdirt
The story is rated E, as there is no use of language or heavy sexual themes. The only things that will be used are things that have been in the show itself, such as mild suggestive themes and mild violence.
Story has been finished, but because I suck as an author, enter at your own risk. Now it serves as a warning on how not to write stories.
Chapters (28)
1 like, 3 dislikes and Zero explanation of why or how.
Yay???
It's me being a non-brony isn't it?
4239047 I love you.
No comments yet, but I'll gladly leave one for a new writer.
It's a solidly written first person human in Equestria story, and judging by the first chapter it's had a healthy amount of effort put into the narrative's quality. There are some errors of course, but nobody gets away from those even after a hundred revisions. The only real problem, if anyone considers it one, is that there are of course about twenty Human in Equestria stories for every other story on the site. :/
A good start to writing, certainly. Even though you don't consider yourself a brony, I do hope you either do or come to enjoy ponies and the community, Jerec.
Okay, everyone, the next part in this chapter will introduce "me" to the town. Whom should "I" meet? Any suggestions?
I'm thinking about including Lyra in this next chapter, but I'm at an impasse, should I cast her in the usual brony light, as being infatuated with humans to the point in which it is almost sexual (There will be no sex in this), or as the complete opposite and have absolutely no knowledge of humans and react with the rest of the town?
I'll be accepting votes and suggestions until I finish the first part of the next chapter.
If you wish for an OC to appear, please message me directly the characters details such as personality.
For the whole Lyra deal, I would personally have it where she knows about them, but it is more of an extreme knowledge about an old myth not total obsession.
As for others you should introduce I would like to see how Derpy may react, as well as potentially Vinyl Scratch's reaction.
4352494 Well, I am trying to keep it more towards the canon, so maybe instead of an old myth she's curious because of Twilight's trip through the mirror?
Derpy's personality is known to me, so I can put her in easy. Vinyl on the other hand is completely unknown to me besides the few fanfics I've read with her in them.
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Well that sounds good. As for Vinyl think something like a frat-boy personality with a twinge of pot-head, I think I like that representation of her best. Of course also a love for electronica and dub-step.
4353145 The Frat-boy thing, I see, but pot head, once again trying to keep as close to the canon as possible, so they won't be doing drugs, drinking alcohol, smoking, etc.
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I meant more the personality, rather than the actually doing drugs.
4353783 I see.
Why did he just suddenldy start to play games when he just woke up? :s
4363466 Well, since the character is based off me, I'll tell you what my mind set would be at that situation. If you notice, at first I'm trying to make sure as to whether or not it's a dream, since it turned out not to be, I'm worried. When I get worried or other have other negative emotions, I try to calm myself to think clearly and for me the best way to calm myself is in fact video games.
1# hummm
2# hummm
3# lol
10# lol
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i know some artist and i use to dabble in the artes.
at this point in time i carnt rember.
14# humm and lol
pinkie pie better be careful of jump out of compute one she could get punch in the face.
4438830 Lol!
15# oooo
4481905 Well, it's better than the typical brony shipping story.
By the way, not a brony.
16# lol
4483631 Oh, but I thought that to be a brony one had to obsess over the show, had to purchasing the merchandise, go to conventions, etc. I didn't know that to be a brony all one had to do was find the show average at best and write fiction simply out of sheer boredom.
4503477 YAY! Now I get to create the list of all the logical fallacies that that argument brings.
1. You've just completely excluded all "Pegasister" Bronies from you fanbase. Good job Bro.
2. You've basically just said that anyone who's even seen a portion of the show is a brony.
3. That argument could be used to say that everyone is a member of every fanbase known.
Now once again for your complaint about this being a self-insert. I clearly defined that this story is a self-insert in both the short and long descriptions, that being said I can only come to two conclusions about your presence here:
1. Your a troll just hoping to get a rise.
2. You're an idiot who can't read.
In either case take your negativity about this type of story and leave, besides I thought you bronies were all about "Love and Tolerance".
17# lol
I got to say its about time someone did this because it's going to get really funny because of all the awkwardness he's going to get from pony's to scratch them like this
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Why is it that in every HiE fanfic, the humans always gives in to each and everyone of the ponies demands? And don't give me that 'cute' crap.
4588566 Huh?
4588841 Just a general observation from all HiE stories
4588854 Well don't worry, won't occur throughout this one.
This could either be very very
or very very 
are you bringing out nyx?
4653041 Who? Sorry, I'm not very well read in brony fiction.
Nyx?!
it seams to fit... nightmare moon as a filly is best described as nyx, even without twi as her mom
4653350 Once again, I'm not all that knowledgeable about, well most fan-made characters, being a non-brony.
Let's go with shade development and meeting with the royalty
the way you seem to set this up story wise there is only two ways the vote should go that number 5 and number 2.
4797290 So which is your vote?
4798771 that depends so far i see both as an option but by the look of thing and it is esear to a point too have number 2 be done, but number 5 is the one where you cod have your cake and eat it too. aaaaa
4799337 But which one do you want to read?
4800247 aaaaa dam 5
Need some more votes, we have a tie between 2 and 5, while 1 is starting to gain some ground.
#2 =P
I say turn him into a anthropomorphic fox.
#15, wings, claws, natural armour (chitin), ability to use magic, yadda yadda.