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Aburi


I do a bit of writing when I can, which is not often. I'm also willing to proofread and edit, so don't be afraid to contact me!

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Rarity is known throughout Ponyville and Canterlot as generous, beautiful, and a notorious flirt.

Now that Twilight has finally convinced Spike to release her from a long held promise, it's time to confront Rarity over something that has concerned the magical prodigy for a long time

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Thank you for taking the time to read my story. :twilightsmile:

If you downvote it, please let me know what you didn't like about it.

My Sparity side. It's BURNING WITH RAGE. I enjoyed it overall though. Have a thunbs up.

Well that's kind of depressing, but the end makes the whole story really. Never really cared for Rarity, but fan fiction is slowly changing that. Rarity is cool. Well written I feel.

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I didn't like the fact it ended, but such is life.

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This is actually a nice and believable explanation for Rarity's behaviour. The whole emotional Dragon thing, whilst also not without merit, feels a bit forced. But it's a nice and refreshing and somewhat new take on the whole dating a (semi) immortal thing.

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3117830 Honestly, I really dislike the canon Rarity. She's amazingly selfish and manipulative and has few redeeming traits. This story happens to be my take on how I feel the representative of Generosity could be.

3118300 I was unsure whether to use the sad tag, I was aiming for a more bittersweet feeling. But with two out of the five comments mentioning this I think I'll use it. Thank you for the feedback :twilightsmile:

3118247 Thank you, I find that quite flattering :raritystarry:

3118316 yea, I'm not too happy with that part either. Thank you for your compliments and feedback :twilightsmile:

This is probably the best-written treatment of the Spike-Rarity dynamic I've seen - and it also addresses a question Twilight honestly should've asked a long time ago.

Well done.

3121063 Thank you very much! That is high praise indeed :twilightsmile:

Wow, what sacrifice, she truly loves him, but knows they'll never be. This is the heart of Rarity, truly beautiful, thank you.

Always got time for a Rarity story where she isn't just characterised as a one-dimensional ice-queen leading Spike on for her own gain.
I love her portrayal here mate, and I really enjoyed this even though I'm not really a fan of Rarity x Spike.
What else can I say except: Element of Generosity indeed.
Nice job man, keep up the great writing :twilightsmile:

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Thank you so much you guys! :pinkiehappy:
It's comments like these that make me want to write more! :twilightsheepish:

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You should :twilightsmile:

i don't know much about love but its apparent that rarity loves spike:heart:, talk about personal sacrifice. this story was beautifully written LOVED it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :raritywink:

:raritycry: So much FEEL!:raritycry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::raritycry::raritycry::heart:
... Great ending, bro.

Wow...this was outstanding. A wonderful piece of art! :raritystarry:

The feels ... good god, the feels! I cannot even imagine how much loneliness Rarity will have to live with. :raritydespair:

There is an obvious answer to this. Rarity simply needs to become an alicorn. :raritywink:

3128598 But then she'll have to watch Spike die instead of the other way around:raritydespair:

3127528>>3127608 Thank you so much! :raritystarry:

3128469 Don't feel too bad for her - there is a kind of happiness that comes from doing what is best for others.

3128598 Yes... Just call me Hasbro :ajbemused:

3130796 At least They'd have a few millennia before having to worry about it

3131294 Actually I just read somewhere that aside from Celestia and Luna no other Alicorn is actually immortal so Rares would in fact join Spike in the afterlife.

Wow, never before have I felt anything about much anything Sparity related, but this... Beautiful.
Also, I love it when Rarity is shown to be generous to an extreme like this.

Huh. Didn't see that one coming.

I'm not a huge fan of Spike/Rarity, but this... this was brilliant! It really shows Rarity's true character, that self-sacrificing generosity that the show touches upon only every now and again. The whole story felt earnest and true, and I couldn't help but feel sad for both Spike and Rarity, and even a bit for Twilight who now has to live with the knowledge. All in all, awesome job!

Wonderful story! Congrats on making Equestria Daily, by the way.


World's greatest wingpony. Support your Lead, give them everything they need to succeed; relegate your own hopes and dreams below those of others.

It's Rarity's reason to be.

WOW, Rarity really does love Spike, doesn't she ?

However, she knows that they cannot be together. :raritydespair:


You should place this tale under Sparity group, for it sad background. :raritydespair:

Truly a great story...and thank you for that emotional read.

This. Is. Brilliant. :raritystarry:

You've addressed several of the key Sparity issues and done so in a way that doesn't make Rarity, Spike, or Twilight into either jerks or idiots. Good show.:moustache:

Yikes, that's tragic. Silly Rarity. Like that's really going to fix things.

Beautiful. If they would make me feel that Rarity is really like this in the show, she would be my favorite character.

Almost wish we could see what happens should Spike find (and read) those books.

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Wow, thank you all for your kind words! I'm really glad you liked my take on Generosity's bearer :raritystarry:

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I'm sure he will soon enough, but that's another story.

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Thank you! I had submitted this on a whim, and never really expected it to be approved, let alone garner so much attention.

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Honestly, I really dislike the canon Rarity. She's amazingly selfish and manipulative and has few redeeming traits. This story happens to be my take on how I feel the representative of Generosity could be.

Honestly, you need to analyze her character a bit further. Ta-ta.
Have n'other
And yet n'other

Still not convinced? Okay then.

Hm. Something seems to have gone wrong with the code in the author's note; I'm pretty sure it's not supposed to look like that.

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Your first two points are quite good, not sure if I agree with the second two though.

You would have me convinced but for the following things:
Sonic Rainboom - When she gets a little attention, Rarity upstages Rainbow with absolutely no consideration for her friends feelings. And Rarity herself pointed out RD's self confidence issues, so it's not like she didn't know what she was doing to her friend.
Sleepless in Ponyville Everything she did in this episode...
Just for Sidekicks While all her friends gave generously to Spike for his services without needing any prompting, Rarity hesitated to pay at all, and when she did it was with a tiny flake of a crystal compared to the massive jewels given by the others.

But thank you for linking those commentaries. I enjoyed them a great deal. :twilightsmile:

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Fixed, Thank you for pointing that out!

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My interpretation is that Rarity has the weakness of being easily overwhelmed by fame. You see that in Sweet and Elite when she forgets about the reason she came to Canterlot in the first place when she gets noticed. I think the same thing happened in Sonic Rainboom, and she basically got carried away, forgetting about why they were there. The fact that she was the first to show concern for Rainbow and insist on doing something tells me that she is very caring and self-sacrificing about her friends, but she's got that weakness which overwhelms her usual sense (like Twilight and the t-word). At least she recognized her mistake.

Sleepless in Ponyville... and Season 3 as a whole, really... did portray her badly, but I take it as an exaggeration of her high maintenance attitude for the sake of a gag. I wouldn't take it too seriously.

The gem thing has actually been analyzed as well, and if you'll notice, her tiny gem bought the most expensive stuff, and it was one of the bigger ones she had on her dress (and just imagine, a mare like Rarity defiling her art for anypony). I viewed her hesitation as being taken off-guard that Spike would ask for payment up-front, as she would normally be the one to offer something for his trouble, and seems to give it to him after he's done something for her. Spike's behavior was apparently obviously unusual that episode, as I get the feeling that before his b-day in Ponyville, he never really felt the emotion of greed to any significant extent.

Anyway, aside from my required justification of canon Rarity, you've accomplished you mission of inspiring feels. I don't know that it makes complete sense with canon, especially the implication of Secret of my Excess that a) Spike's hit dragon puberty and b) dragon growth can apparently be rapid and reversed. There are a lot of justifications that can be made for that, of course, not the least of which is simply that Spike is just unique, what with the magic fire breath.

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Perhaps it's kind of a cheat, but I don't really put much weight into what is canon and not. In my mind the fact that there are so many different authors to MLP makes the show inconsistant.

Look at the difference in Rarity in Art of the Dress and Dog and Pony Show versus Sleepless and Rainboom - They may as well be different individuals alltogether.

So like I said, I cheat. I take the parts from the show that fit, put them together with fanfics that compliment her personility, and discard those that don't fit.

Perhaps it's not the most fair way to treat the characters, but otherwise I would dislike them all at some points... :raritydespair:

Thank you for your thoughts :twilightsmile:

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I understand. As I said, I don't take Sleepless in Ponyville's characterization of Rarity too seriously, and I definitely don't take Spike at Your Service characterization of Spike or Rarity at face value. Basically, I look at some of the weird characterizations as exaggerations or an incomplete look at what "actually" happened, or at least accept it as an aberration of one's usual character which does happen in real life even if it's highly inconvenient in fiction.

What a sweet little story. I really felt for Rarity at the end of this one. And you presented her longing with just the right amount of subtlety, while having her conduct herself with grace and dignity: exactly as a lady would. Good work!

My Sparity love hurts a bit. But it was a good story.

Depressing, fluffy (in a romantic way, and full of awws both of sadness and cuteness.

I find myself conflicted. On the one hand this is a very lovely story. you capture Twilight and Rarity beautifully and this is an interesting take on their relationship dynamic.

At the same time its slightly creepy that she's essentially waiting for him to grow up.

Still a thumbs up but a slightly unsettled one all the same.:twilightsmile:

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My read isn't that she's waiting for Spike to grow up, it's that she's waiting for him to ask her out.

When he does, she'll let him down as gently as possible.

In the meantime Rarity's not seeing anyone because she knows it would break Spike's heart.

So sad. I disagree with the way you see Rarity in the show (or at least, as much of your views as you vocalized). I find her the most real because of her instances in Sonic Rainboom or Sweet and Elite. She tries to do the right thing, but she has flaws. A lot of flaws, and they sometimes get the best of her. I always imagine her being her own worst enemy, berating herself for all of the failures she's made.

After all, what is more inspiring? The pony that never fails (They have to dedicate entire episodes to the idea of Fluttershy not being kind, and I don't think they ever had a Non Loyal RD when she wasn't brainwashed), or the one that does but keeps on trying? I love her because she is greedy, vain and pompous, but she really tries to do the right thing.

Back to why I cam here, the story! I normally like happy endings, but this man. Shot right to the feels. I think Rarity is being pretty foolish here, but not for the reasons everyone else might. If she fully intends to live out her life alone so as not to break Spike's heart, why would it matter? You do not need to have children to be happy. You don't even need sex to be happy. Perhaps she feels it might be 'robbing the cradle', but let's be honest. Spike has proved many times that he is an adult. He fights to save his friends, makes huge sacrifices for them, and deeply cares about all of them. How could one possibly say his biology means that he isn't entitled to spend Rarity's life with her?

It's a sad story, but something tells me this isn't the end of this little tale. I've got my eye on you, because you are certainly somepony worth bumping into. :P
-Lumino

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If Cadance ascended at the fall of the crystal empire 1000 years ago from a pegasus (Canon, Hasbro book approved!), wouldn't this make her immortal? If so, that statement gets ruled out.Sorry. :scootangel:

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I'm glad you enjoyed the commentaries, at least now you see a more generous, in-depth side to Rarity. I will just retort what you said, but I mean no ill will against you:

Sonic Rainboom - When she gets a little attention, Rarity upstages Rainbow with absolutely no consideration for her friends feelings. And Rarity herself pointed out RD's self confidence issues, so it's not like she didn't know what she was doing to her friend.

You have to understand that Rarity really is a drama queen sometimes. And, although she works hard to keep those "urges" under control, we have to take into account that this was the first time she went up to Cloudsdale. Not only that, but with a beautiful pair of butterfly wings (I almost, almost wrote "fluttershy wings"... what have I done?) to boot. This would be more than enough for her to go completely overboard with everything and just start prancing around going "Me, goddammit!". I will concede that, even for me--a Rarity appreciator--she acted like a real fucking bitch this episode. That is 100% true. But this only brings more depth to her character: she could be giving in to her urges and become a successful fashionista anywhere she went. And yet... she choses to remain in little old Ponyville... a one-horse trick town. Why? For her friends. She is more selfless than we give her credit for.
(This exact same thing is further developed in Sweet and Elite, where she, at first, is torn between her professional life and her lifelong dreams, but then she throws it all away in favor of her friends.)

Sleepless in Ponyville Everything she did in this episode...

Likewise in Sisterhooves Social, Rarity is busy with all her dresses and Sweetie Belle comes to her and emotionally blackmails Rarity into going camping, something Sweetie knows Rarity despises and abhors (like every other kind of physical activity). This, in and on itself, makes Sweetie Belle a bitch. :rainbowlaugh:
Still, Rarity goes and ties Sweetie to the carriage pulling all her luggage. This, you may think, is something that is bad. And, well, do you have any younger siblings? If you do, tell me, what's the most enjoyable thing to do to them?
You fuck with them (for heaven's sakes, not in the sexual sense!)!

And, later on, when they reach... Rainbow Waterfalls of Color and Magic and Happiness™, Rarity throws in her usual "I hate physical activities line" just to show us in the next seconds how excited she really is to be around her friends and her little sister. Just because she hates physical activities, doesn't mean she doesn't endure what she doesn't like for the sake of others (a.k.a. Generosity). Like in Sisterhooves Social.

Just for Sidekicks While all her friends gave generously to Spike for his services without needing any prompting, Rarity hesitated to pay at all, and when she did it was with a tiny flake of a crystal compared to the massive jewels given by the others.

Well, he was the one who came to her, asking her to take care of both Opalescence and Tank. If Rarity wanted someone to take care of Opal, she'd go ahead and ask the pony/dragon. Which means that Spike comes, "creates" a problem for the both of them and charge for the solution. Plus, she was on the receiving end of pure, unadulterated dragon greed on Secret of My Excess. She knows very well how Spike can get when he becomes greedy. Like Zecora, on the very same episode.

And, to be honest, Season 3 is well known for being super over-the-top with the characterizations. I don't think Season1&2!Rarity would tie Sweetie to the wagon (or be super precise with her specifications for taking care of Opal). I don't think Season1&2!Pinkie Pie was that obnoxious (even though she still is my favorite pony). I don't think Season1&2!Rainbow Dash would that much of an asshole.

Curiously enough, the only ponies who were OK in Season 3 were the two most shallow ones: Fluttershy and Ehpurru-Jackuson.


This is the last commentary I'll throw your way.

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After all, what is more inspiring? The pony that never fails (They have to dedicate entire episodes to the idea of Fluttershy not being kind, and I don't think they ever had a Non Loyal RD when she wasn't brainwashed), or the one that does but keeps on trying? I love her because she is greedy, vain and pompous, but she really tries to do the right thing.

I agree with this in principle, but I can't really get behind this when the failings are so far over the top. I suppose you could say that I have more issues with the writers and how they choose to caricaturize these faults, rather than Rarity's character itself.

I think Rarity is being pretty foolish here, but not for the reasons everyone else might. If she fully intends to live out her life alone so as not to break Spike's heart, why would it matter? You do not need to have children to be happy. You don't even need sex to be happy. Perhaps she feels it might be 'robbing the cradle', but let's be honest. Spike has proved many times that he is an adult. He fights to save his friends, makes huge sacrifices for them, and deeply cares about all of them. How could one possibly say his biology means that he isn't entitled to spend Rarity's life with her?

I agree with everything you said right there.

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This, in and on itself, makes Sweetie Belle a bitch.

One of the many reasons I have struck that episode from my head-canon. No one is allowed to make Sweetie into a bitch :twilightangry2:

And, well, do you have any younger siblings? If you do, tell me, what's the most enjoyable thing to do to them?
You fuck with them.

Yes, I do. A younger brother and sister. And I have an older brother as well. Perhaps my family is in the minority, but that sort of stuff never happened. I can't really imagine it either, if I saw my brother or sister straining to do something I'd stop and help... not make the load harder by riding it.

And, later on, when they reach... Rainbow Waterfalls of Color and Magic and Happiness™, Rarity throws in her usual "I hate physical activities line" just to show us in the next seconds how excited she really is to be around her friends and her little sister. Just because she hates physical activities, doesn't mean she doesn't endure what she doesn't like for the sake of others (a.k.a. Generosity).

Yes, that was a great moment, but one positive action does not negate a negative one. life just doesn't balance out like that.

Fluttershy and Ehpurru-Jackuson

Did I miss something? Who is that?

Thanks for that link - it was hilarious!

And thank you both for disagreeing with me! It would be a really boring world if everyone thought the same way, and I really like these discussions. Even when I'm on the loosing side like now. :raritywink:

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Pshaw, there ain't no losing side here. Opinions are opinions; merely personal. :twilightsmile:
I'm just trying to show you that Rarity has a side often neglected. And I think I did just that. Hope you appreciate this fashionista a bit more now. :raritywink:

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