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Pascoite


I'm older than your average brony, but then I've always enjoyed cartoons. I'm an experienced reviewer, EqD pre-reader, and occasional author.

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The Canterlot elite have declared Rainbooms the new "in" thing. A monopoly on high culture makes Rainbow Dash the happiest pony around, of course. Really. She's happy.

First-place finisher of the MLPchan inaugural write-off, "Misconceptions."

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Great story. The idea of Scootaloo being colorblind was nice too.

THATENDING!

When she said that Scoot's saw her Rainboom's better than anyone...omfg...I cried..

i was half expecting for her right then and now perform a rainboom

Oh my.
That was...

FEELS.
*dead*

What a :twistnerd:!

A nice little story, one I could see as an actual episode.

Colorblind Scootaloo. Genius! First time I came across this idea.
Something like that would work beautifully in the show.

This was a great little read, and a really interesting concept, one that I'm pretty sure is unprecedented. Also enjoyed the numerous feels-laden precision kicks for my heartstrings. :twilightsmile: Kudos to you, sah!

well, they do say that rainbows come after the rain... but it's a terrible day for rain:pinkiesad2:

dang i had this good analytical nitpick and funny side comment that got all ruined by my emotion statement/response/what have you, and now its ru.. rui.. RUINED :fluttercry: (totally my intentional comment being ruined here *sniff* yeah...)

When I first saw the title, I thought it was Wuten's Colors of a Rainbow.

I don't think Applejack will mind Dash cancelling her shows. I think Applejack figured out how Dash was feeling about it all.

CCC

...I think Applejack will understand.

That was really well characterized! Quite enjoyed it.

... Wow, just wow! I love it! It was all so in character it's as if its an episode of the show, at least! You might have even got it better than they do. I could envision that so clearly, you wouldn't believe. An excellent story about my favorite pony. You made my Thanksgiving, man!

Excellently done. :rainbowdetermined2:

well that was cute

This had a really adorable ending! I thought it was really nice.
The "Wonderful World" references were a little distracting after coming up more than once, though. Nice idea, but not very subtle.

Loved this. Really shows that Dash needs Scootaloo as much as Scootaloo needs her. It's something that could really work in the show. Plus it always makes me happy to see stories involving these two get featured. :pinkiehappy: Thanks for writing this. Really made my day. :twilightsmile:

I really cant figure out why I love this fic.
What is it?

Oh, now I remember!

Character Development.

Why don't we have a "Feels" tag? We really, really need one, especially for this story. And the colorblind Scootaloo was an idea I'd never seen before. It makes perfect sense, though. Great job!

Now please excuse me as I go cry from the feels.

I never thought of Scoots being colorblind. That was really clever. :twilightsmile: Amazing story. :pinkiehappy:

A great Rainbow Dash/Scootaloo story you've created. :scootangel:

I just... wow. At first I thought I knew what this was going to be about. I thought it was just going to be Rainbow Dash languishing in the sides while nopony cared about here, but then you take scootaloo, whom we all know is rainbow dash's one real fan, and... you make her colorblind. That is just so simultaneously heartbreaking and moving I really don't know what to say.

I'm just going to go cry now. :fluttercry:

Oh than god she's color blind. I wouldn't wish color sight on any pony with such an atrocious color scheme! :raritydespair:

I know what's it like to start a fad and no one ever give the credit.

There was this one time I was firin' mah lazar, and the next day Shoop Da Whoop was everywhere.

But never one word of recognition to me. Not even from the guy I vaporized.

:pinkiecrazy:

Original, well written and fresh. Love it, love it, love it.

How the Rainboom was becoming viewed as merely an object was interesting. Liked the touch of Scootaloo being colorblind, I didn't actually see that one coming until the crayons part.

Excellent story! :twilightsmile:

DJRD

Great. Now that I read that ending I'm going to tear up. Just super. :fluttercry:

Wow, that colorblind twist was a really good one. I'll certainly remember that concept.

I am sorry Rainbow, but I took precautions in case of this event.

Applejack brought out a piece of paper with RD's hoof-print.

You remember this, Rainbow?

Yeah, so?

Well, this little document means you are going to be doing those rainbooms for the next three years.

And if I don't?

It will be hard to join the wonderbolts from inside a cell.

Hm. That was well written, but I'm not too fond of how you chose to conclude.

You have all this build-up to Rainbow Dash being ignored by the Canterlot snobs as they admire her work but disregard her, and then you just kind of discard it because "Scootaloo is color blind so have some feels everyone!"

The Scootalove is nice, and it's a good way to drive Dash, but I feel like you concluded this without giving the main plot any kind of satisfying resolution.

You got my appetite all worked up and then just kind of left me hungry, here.

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I guess I'm not sure what your appetite was worked up for, then. Dash came to the realization that she didn't need the fame and came to a true appreciation of her relationship with Scootaloo. The colorblindness was just a spur to get her to realize that the dazzling colors had no effect on Scoots, so she really had the attitude Dash needed. Thus, Dash's internal struggle with her desire for validation is resolved. That's character growth. If you didn't like it, I can't argue with that, but I can argue that it was present.

3560144 Twist? Don't you mean Scootaloo? :twistnerd:

3571698 i see what you did there.

It's interesting to compare this to your earlier fics. When authors reach this level of quality in their later fics, their earlier fics usually have serious issues with things that are easily noticed, but relatively few issues with things that are harder to notice. Your early fics here have good grammar, good sentence structures, good plotting, and decent characterization, but comparatively subtle issues with things like pacing and emotional development. Typically, authors who're so obviously great at the surface-level parts of writing become arrogant and fail to develop further. You must be incredibly humble to have recognized your weaknesses and continued to improve as a writer. :twilightsmile:

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I appreciate the vote of confidence, but to be honest, I haven't always been humble. It's people like you that take me to task whether I've asked for it or not that have hammered things through my thick skull. Plus knowing which ones of those aren't worth listening to, but that's another matter. Really, I still struggle with pacing. I luck into it more than give it conscious thought.

Reviewing for others works wonders, too. It's so much easier to see problems in others' writing, and then you get insight into your own.

Wow, this was so beautiful:heart:

I really enjoyed that. Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

Absolutely wonderful story. Short but to the point with a great moral to the story. Great ending. 7/10 Would read again. :rainbowdetermined2:

Dawww I loved that ending

3567470 ok lets see if i can get my thoughts out without insulting people and if i do that's not what i intended,

first off, I'd like to say I liked this and the ending with Scoots is nice, but like Autumn Wind I think something should have happened with the canterlot/artists group. Yeah they shouldn't have just cut Dash out like that, but I don't think Rainbow should have tried to take credit for the artwork. It'd would be like if Hasbro tried to take credit for this story saying its their characters, but its your story they just inspired it. As for the photos....... yeah that didn't sit well with me, if the photographers had paid her and asked her to try line up the sun and moon for those photos then that'd be different, but if Dash arranged to line the Rainboom up with them then it kinda just feels like their stealing from her......yeah I don't know how all that copyrights and plagiarism laws and such works......but still it felt wrong

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I think you mean "lovely".

4473000

Huh. I interpreted that as "I made the Rainboom", but she was unclear, and they thought she meant the painting. Then she didn't try to clarify.

5313380 You are correct, sir.

5313380 yeah I guess the painting thing was more of a misunderstanding than anything else.

Trees of green, red roses, too. Skies of blue, clouds of white.

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