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RazedRainbow


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On this day, every year, Pinkie sits at the crossroads and waits for her.

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Comments ( 142 )

Oh, curse you Razed! I didn't want to feel sad today.


But I saw one quick typo in this:

dew nipped at her hooves, and snuck it’s way into her nose;

Just fix that part and it's perfect.

Mmmhmmm.

Its always gotta be stories like this. Always gotta kill off
a character that we all cant afford to miss

*sigh* i don't have time for this! i got stuff to do, why am i reading something so vilely sad?!
You made my heart twist, but my tears are reserved for stories that pull at a special place.

What is said place you might be wondering? Well that is a personal matter and i shall have no intent on sharing it with anypony!

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

...Celestia damn it... :applecry: :fluttercry: :raritycry:

Friends forever... :rainbowlaugh:

...

Friends together... :rainbowwild:

i won't cry, i won't cry, i won't cry...oh buck it all:applecry:

confound these ponies, they drive me to read such sad stories!

great descriptions of the environment, good story . Now to read a comedy to make up for the emptiness :pinkiesad2: :pinkiehappy:

Very well done, wonderful environment and imagery and a spectacular vocabulary :twistnerd:

Nice title, it fits so sadly with the story:pinkiesad2:

:fluttercry: dammit there went my happiness for the moment.

p.s. why is every sad fic that I find has RD dead or dying?:pinkiesad2:

Wow! Thanks everybody for helping to get this fic into "featured" status. Thank you, sincerely.
-RazedRainbow

Congrats on featured.

Great story :pinkiesmile: I love all your description and imagery

That was artfully done. I did not expect that, and nearly shed a tear. I was also listening to the song My Dream Mare Movement at the time, and it hit the climax when I read what was on the sign, so that might have helped a little. I need to find something happy now.

'Twas an honor to be your friend. We'll never forget your Loyalty. *salute*

Well done, Razed. Well done.

This was beautifully written. The sadness was perfect, and the imagery was amazing. Great work.

ugh! god why did i read this! why is it so sad when someone, especially rainbow dash dies/is dead in these things!:raritycry::fluttershyouch::ajsleepy::fluttershbad:

5/5 for being so touching....

A long long time ago
I can still remember how
That rainbow one day made me smile
And I knew if I had my chance
That I could make my family dance
And maybe they'd be happy for a while
But then one day she went and left us
I cried and cried at life's injustice
I looked up and saw her image
a chromatic ghostly visage
I still remember how I sighed
to see her vision in the sky
But something touched me deep inside
The day loyalty died

185753

Nice poem about the story.

Also, this story was written very well. The descriptions were perfect and the wording was used eloquently. These types of stories are always one that catches my eye. This one was a special case for that. I saw a few others and then this one, first click this story:pinkiecrazy:.

once more unto the fray.....
into the last great fight i'll ever wage....
to live and die on this day....
to live and die on this day....
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we stand before tragedy and it before us when the last great soul passes we will all be empty and we will be in a living death.
come forth my friends we must stand together for today is our day to stand up for what is right and fight for your friends and fight for loyalty.

the day loyalty dies is when the rainbows stop shining and we are here to be the end of hate and suffering we will die as friends.

to those who cry and to those who scream we are never alone show what you are able to do join your friends you must not ever forget that friends never die they are always with you and they will wait for you when there time comes we all travel and on the road called life when it comes our time our friends are there with us to guide us to our rest.

R.I.P. to all our friends out there who are no longer with us in body but remain in spirit.
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they are the good ones that are lost and the ones that are found we stand til the end
til all are one til all are one. :optimus prime leader of the autobots.

Damnit you guys your comments have made me read this, I must know what happened.

GOD DAMNIT!!! IT DIDENT TELL ME WHAT HAPPENED!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

sometimes less is more 185868 Rainbow is a brave pony, any number of things could have happened.

185805 Thank Don McLean, this is a shameless adaptation. *walks off humming Equestrian pie*

@Steel Resolve I guess your right. I just wanted to know what happend but what am I to do. Oh this was a great story by the way, well wrighten. I apologise for terrible spelling it was never my strong point.:derpytongue2:

@Steel Resolve I guess your right. I just wanted to know what happend but what am I to do. Oh this was a great story by the way, well wrighten. I apologise for terrible spelling it was never my strong point.:derpytongue2:

whoops. I have got to stop useing emoticons, They make me sound imature.

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Geez... You really hit the spot

:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:


I didn't want to start my morning like this! :raritycry:


5 stars...

It's 6 in the morning, and what is this?
Anyway, i cried.

185753
Oh god! That made me cry harder than the story! :applecry:

185753
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You, sir... In my mind, I'm giving you the world's most powerful brohoof ever.

185753 wow, 2 things made me cry on this one page....

186347 back at you, inspiration is a wonderful thing :moustache:

Damn, bro, damn... Really good story! I don't have much else to say, but I think that is just the best part! :pinkiehappy::fluttercry:

good prose, it's like a breath of fresh air. don't like your use of "cilia" though. Pinkie's not a bacteria cell.

185881

so bye, bye pinkie pie,
my heart's too heavy, my tears will not dry.
i would give anything just to see her fly,
if i stay much longer i think i'll cry
if i stay too long i might die.

185753 A nice poem for a nice story - somber though both may be. Know that in your presence, Rainbow, manly tears were shed; know that you will not be forgotten - and thus, will never truly die. :eeyup:

A memory of yore hangs in the sky;
The sky in which, to this day, she does fly
Fly like no other before,
Like no other pony could ever soar,
Even as she is, a memory of yore.

Hmm, I'm trying to comment, but I've got this strange pain in my chest.

Well written, emotionally charged, and of course, props for picking the pony that will tug the most heartsrings of the readers. Five stars.

a person i knew very well had passed on recently and i did not crie. i had to be strong for my friends but thanks to this i want to crie for every part of my life were i should of cried. thanks :fluttercry:

Amazing story, with amazing vocabulary. I love sad fics.
However, the end was quite predictable.

That's so depressing.

What can I say, detailed on the script. Cannot say it's bad,very detailed and I trust you with vocabulary. Everything make:trixieshiftright:s sense, friend.

Alright, everybody. I'm working on the "sequel" to this story at the moment. It'll be a bit longer, and will be published as a second chapter to this fic.

*Fic by RazedRainbow*
*Sadfic, so I check comments*
*Another fic dealing with Dashie's death*
NOPENOPENOPENOPENOPE
Don't take that the wrong way; you are, from what I have seen, a great writer. Its just that I don't want to spend another 20-40 minutes weeping at a story of this type. I mean, Turn the Season had me crying for at least four chapters...:fluttercry:
Incidentally, is this linked in with said story?
Anyway, will give this a miss for now, but I'll track it to read once I've built some emotional walls up.:pinkiesad2:
(GODDAMN TYPING WITH AN IPOD TOUCH IS FREAKING HARD AND IOS5 FREAKING SUCKS GRRAGH!!!)

185753 And I was singin...
It took me until the second to last line for me to finally get it. I then reread it aloud to the tune.

Bye Bye Ms. Equestrian Pie
I drove my carriage to the levee but the levee was dry
And them good old colts
Were drinking whisky and rye
Singin, "this'll be the day that I die.
"This'll be the day that I die"

Thank you for giving me a reason to look up this great song again.

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Ha Ha, one of these days I'm going to trick you by writing a sad fic where everybody's dead except Dash :twilightsheepish:
Also, nope, this is totally seperate from Turn the Season.

And, if it makes you feel better, this is the look I always get on my face whenever I realize that I've written yet another story where I've done a horrible thing to poor Rainbow
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"I'm...Such a terrible fan...."

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