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Trick Question

Being against evil doesn't make you good.


After a tragic accident claims the lives of Fluttershy and Big Macintosh, Twilight Sparkle begins to grow distant from her remaining friends. She locks herself in her castle and spends her life working on a cure for aging in the hopes her remaining friends can be saved.

Meanwhile, Pinkie Pie comes up with an idea for the best surprise ever. For three years she works in secret on a surprise for Twilight Sparkle. But Twilight's gift won't be revealed until the last of her friends has passed away.

What kind of surprise could possibly make up for the loss of your best friends?

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That was incredibly WHAT

It also made the kind of twisted sense that I like the most :pinkiehappy:

Yay! :pinkiehappy: Just don't tell Rainbow Dash: she's still confused! :rainbowderp:

This gives 'wibbly-wobbly timey-wimey' a whole new meaning. Heck, I think even The Doctor himself would go nuts trying to figure this out. :applejackconfused:

What you did here is far greater than what I expected, transcending all expectations as if they were nothing but the fluff they are.

This is definitely going in my favorites, and I'll be waiting for your next epic tale.

Yay! :pinkiehappy: I'm glad to reach a few ponies, because I don't know how to Fimfiction so good.

5406592 oh, reaching people with a one shot is tricky, especially for those with no pre-existing reader base. I hope you get seen. I'd be happy to see this in the feature box.

I do have a small base for the M story I currently am running, but small base is small. Not sure how to get more ponies unless I just continue to be superawesomazing! :rainbowdetermined2:

...um wait, that's not a word. :facehoof:

5406642 We are the writers. We decide what is and what isn't a word :coolphoto:

Well, that one was just one of Dashie's from the show. :pinkiesmile: Rainbow Dash is so silly!

5406685 You're doing very well actually. 90 reads and 11 likes on the first night is better than any of my stories managed.

Oh pony! That is great news. :pinkiehappy:

Thank you for being so nice, and for taking the time to comment! :pinkiesad2:

These kind of stories make me wish I could cry at this stuff :raritydespair:

Don't worry! Fimfiction ain't about to give up on you. :pinkiesad2:

...and on the other emotional side of things, it's really hard to write fiction while you're constantly crying your eyes out! :raritycry:

But it's still wonderful. :pinkiesmile: :heart:

Well this story is certainly unique to say the least. I was looking for a sad story to help occupy my time and I dare say I did indeed stumble upon just the right one. It's also a positive one in a way as well. One that is about friendship and the lengths to which good friends will go to spend time with the ones they hold dear. Very very touching.


Mother of Luna... This story is simply incredible. There was so much sad and then right at the end you hit out with the biggest dose of happy! It was perfect!

A beautiful story. I applaud you sir.

Ma'am even! But whatevs! :pinkiehappy: Thank you for your kind review.

I'm super glad you enjoyed it! :pinkiehappy: :heart:

Wow... story number 3 to make me cry... good job, man. Good job.

thats fuckin beautiful man...:fluttercry:
I'm all teary eyed, and everything

Figures that Pinkie would break the laws of time and space to throw Twilight a birthday party

Ah, I see Pinkie manipulates the timey-wimey ball to her advantage.

5406592 Believe it or not, this actually appeared in the featured box for just a minute; no longer, no shorter. That's where I found it, and that is honestly where it belongs.

Can't stop crying damnit to beautiful

*slow clapping* bravo, ma'am, bravo.

Whoa.... It's been a while since I've felt things. Thanks.

Twilight had turned all of her attention to a single goal: find a preventative cure for the disease of death itself.

Did someone watch the fountain recently?

This gives 'wibbly-wobbly timey-wimey' a whole new meaning. Heck, I think even The Doctor himself would go nuts trying to figure this out. :applejackconfused:

Nah it's entirely closed timelike curves, ie closed loops. Nothing timey wimey and completely follows the established rules of the show.

"Thanks! And yeah, I get that a lot. But what's this "one last time" nonsense? You think we're only going to have like, one party together?" she scoffed. "Puh-leaze! We might be on borrowed time, but we have a whole lifetime to make up for, Twilight!"
Suddenly, it clicked. Twilight quickly did the math in her head. "Oh holy Celestia. I can't believe it. You borrowed time. You actually, literally borrowed time! You borrowed time from everypony's past, so you could spend it in the future..."

I was keeping it together pretty well until I read this bit. After reading this I cried so much. And no it wasn't liquid pride, I cried ok? I bawled like a fool! Very well written, wonderful story. Absolutely amazing.

This is so sweet, I love it.

Not recently, but you caught me: it was definitely an influence. :pinkiesmile:

Woohoo! :raritystarry: Neat! I don't really know how any of that stuff works, though. :applejackconfused:

I'm not going to say I fully understand the concept, but what I do understand makes this a lovely piece of lterature.

I never thought I could be proud to make somepony cry! :ajsmug:

I only discovered this kind of happycrypower of the written word a year or two ago. Through ponies, of course. :twilightsmile: I am very happy that I've been able to touch a few people this way! :pinkiehappy:

Hahaha NO. Why do you all try to confuse me? Quit it, for all you succeed in is to deepen the mind of what shall be your lord eternal.
I'm insane, so I get this easily.

5408405 you should be rightly proud of this story. It's simply beautiful, wonderfully in character and it's just gorgeous. This is in my top three best stories on here as of now

Thank you very very much! :pinkiesad2:

If you know any way to spread the word or let others know about the story, I'm always open for tips. (I am not yet too good at the Fimfictioning.) I don't want hits or followers or anything like that, but if the story touches people it'd be nice to share it. :pinkiesmile:

5409076 I think the best praise I can give, and I give this story a lot of praise, is it feels just like an episode if the show. I can happily see this being a two parter series finale. Once more, awesome story. I wish my own were half as good

I likely never would have read this had you not recommended it to me; I wasn't quite sure what to expect, but I ended up liking it well enough. I'm going to include a review of this story in my next batch of reviews. :heart:

Oh, thank you! I'm very glad you enjoyed it. :pinkiesmile:

Only through the magic of Pinkey Pie logic. . .:pinkiehappy:

They're Pinkie :pinkiehappy: and the Brain :twilightsmile:,
Pinkie :pinkiegasp: and the Brain :facehoof:,
One is a genius,
The other's insane...

You might notice that in the Animaniacs song, they never actually clarify which one is which. :pinkiesmile:
I have no doubts whatsoever that this was intentional. (narf)

(Same thing applies here!)

Why are the insane ones always the geniuses? It's completely illogical and insane. And that's why it's so great. Wonderful story anyways.

5410072 genius / insane two sides of the same coin.:pinkiegasp::twilightoops::moustache::raritystarry::rainbowhuh::flutterrage::applejackconfused:

It's a terrible day for rain... *sniff*

I wrote a review of this story here.

And I really appreciate the feedback (as I mentioned there)!

One odd thing for me to respond to, however: the reason I crammed the description into a single paragraph, oddly enough, is concern about the formatting fitting properly next to the image. It's kind of difficult to read when you have text that wraps twice as far to the left as the previous line, so I've been trying to trim and limit breaks in descriptions, and that may be quite stupid (I also used the maximum size image here I think for tallness quotient). But the wrapping way to the left is still awful.

Yeah, I understand that problem. Admittedly I pay little attention to it when I write my own story summaries (though admittedly, with my last few stories all having single-sentence descriptions, I don't have to), but it really does look ugly when a paragraph gets broken in half and the second part of it ends up way over underneath an image.

I enjoyed reading this. That ending was funny and confusing. Yet, it somehow made sense, though it was confusing. I think it was mainly because of Pinkie. This is one of the top ten stories on this site.

So this was the first story to ever make me actually cry. Well done. :fluttercry:

This story is so sad!!! But it's incredibly written as well.

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