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Rainbow Dash is having an awful, terrible, no-good very bad day. Nothing seems to be going right! Pinkie Pie, being a dutiful friend, steps in to whisk her friend away to a one-day-only shop called the Make Me Better Boutique. But will she be able to cheer up her best friend? And will that cheering up lead to something ... more?

(Femshipping, but no wilder than a G/PG movie. Fun fact: This was one of the first (possibly the first?) fics that explored the idea of 'wing boners.')

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knighty
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One of the first fanfics I read....it's very....sweet....like a certain pony.

Wow, that's one amazing story. The writing was just perfect. Just perfect. The characterization, the description, the dialogue, I like it all! :twilightsmile:

TwiDash is still best ship, but this deserves crazy amounts of credit. Like, over 9000 credits. :trollestia:

After today's episode, I got wondering. Is there even such a thing as TwiPie shipping? I've never seen one :rainbowderp:. (I got wondering because when Pinkie threw Twilight out of the house the only thing I could thing of was, "REJECTED" :rainbowlaugh:)

130436

Yes, TwiPie exists. Though, it's as unlikely as RariDash is, if you ask me.




as for this story, I LOVED it. It was one of my first fics.

Thank you all so much for your kind comments! ^_^

Oh god I remember this fic... I think it was one of, if not THE first :rainbowkiss::heart::pinkiehappy: fics.

lol From way back when it was still considered slash. :trollestia:

DAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWW
ALL MY "DAWS" THEY BELONG TO YOU

i died of a hnghhh-- attack
many D'AAAAWWS to you...5 stars and fav'd

N'awww. Faved and 5 starred.

First fanfic I ever read, brings back good memories

Oh man, I loved reading this fic when I first saw it on EqD! This is pretty much one of the most adorable shipfics I've ever read, and I like to re-read it whenever my brain seriously needs a large dose of cute, cuddly ponies (or otherwise some sort of palate cleanser :derpytongue2:). :3

This is also one of the fics that makes me question whether or not I love DashiePie or FlutterPie more. They're both so adorable! :twilightsmile:

D'awww, that was cute :twilightsmile:

130544 I will not stand for TwiPie being called unlikely.

http://philthetimewizard.deviantart.com/art/Love-is-Confusing-Part-1-of-2-217104950
http://philthetimewizard.deviantart.com/art/Love-is-Confusing-Part-2-of-2-221165825

Read that fic.

Anyway, this story was good. Nicely characterized and cute. Good job.

I can't believe there were no wingest boner jokes in this comments section until now. :trollestia:

aww cute

Whoa! Blast from the past! This is the fanfic that invented wingboners! :pinkiegasp:

That's it. This is my OTP now. I'm gonna have to accept that sooner or later.

Love that pinky can be so innocent and yet so psychic when it's appropriate to the occasion. Still panting a bit.
No I do not clop!

130436 Oh, TwiPie exists. You know what doesn't? Raripie. I cannot, for the life of me, find one. Certainly not a well written one. It's almost distressing in its absence.

133953 Good catch, i couldn't think of a better name and I haven't really read much Pinkie shipping so there you go. Now I know lol, Twinkie! That's rich, just like the delicious cream-filled yellow sponge cake thing! Yum! :rainbowwild:

This is on EQD? never saw it, but I LOVED it, very well written, very cute. Rainbow Pie is totally my favorite pairing, so this gets five stars from me, Good job! :heart:

134043 Thank you very much! :) If you'd like to see it on EqD, it is there! Along with most of my other fics, which I am still (slowly) transferring to FIMFiction. You can find them all under my handle, "Jimbo." Here's a link to the story! http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/01/story-make-me-better-botique.html I think if you click the keyword "Jimbo," my other stories should come up, too.

Wow, I posted this story to EQD a little less than a full year ago. Dang! Time flies!!

AAAUURGH WHAT IS THAT DESCRIPTION FROM. I KNOW I'VE SEEN "terrible, awful, no good very bad day" SOMEWHERE BUT WHEEEERRRRREEEEEEE???????

Anyways, HHNNNNNGGGG, D'AWWWWW, etc.

Do love reading me some old fics

Really cute and sweet story.

Love any PinkieDash fic, but this one is also very sweet.

However; "Dash was just a nice person" :facehoof:

Very good writing, but I would not call it the best in my opinion. For a couple reasons, but mainly for the initial kiss. It was completely out of the blue and rainbow had no reason to kiss pinkie pie. Rainbow was having her usual flight fantasies and pinkie ate a marshmellow and BAM! Rainbow is trying to play tonsil hockey with pinkie! No sign that rainbow had any feelings for the pink mare, just that she liked the feel of the hairdryer on her skin... It would have been acceptable if she at least MENTIONED liking her at the beginning, but without the title this fic would have gotten a 0 for Plot. Because at least the title told me what was happening, I will give the Plot a 1/5, the writing a 4/5, and characterization 4.5 out of 5. The total story is 3.1 so 3 stars

Hmmm... Pinkie Dash? I've never thought about that... Is this a one shot, because it can go somewhere.

134657 Haha, whoops! Thanks for pointing that out. XD
134797 Yep, it's a oneshot, but thanks for the input!
134368 It's from a children's book, actually! "Alexander and the Terrible, Horrible, No-Good Very Bad Day." I loved that book as a kid!
134675 Thanks for your input! I don't agree 100%, but I do appreciate you taking the time to critique it. I feel like, if every kiss started with "I fully intend to kiss this person with the full understanding of the weight of my feelings and my considerations towards them"... a lot of kisses wouldn't happen! Sometimes you just get overcome with the strange urge to just kiss someone, due to closeness or repressed feelings or the heat of the moment or whatever - and it doesn't require a lot of thought, or even liking the person 'like that' beforehand. That's where I was writing it from, at least, but I could understand how it might read as a little 'sudden.' :)

ohoh, boner alert!

I read my little dashie then this... THANK YOU FOR CHEERING ME UP! I D'awwwwed,hnnnnghed,and had cute overload all at the same time!
Bravo for Rainbowpie!( I used to get sooo mad when ppl said RBD was les or bi. But now out of this im with them but not in the troll way though...)
:pinkiesad2: Thank you for the cute.

Why is it that no amount of D'awww in the comments would explain how much this one feels:heart:. Sweet and perfect if you ask me. I wish for more!

Ooh, this is the fic that made PinkieDash my main ship! I'd forgotten the name. Thanks for posting it here!

It's cute, sweet and warm and I love it to pieces. I tend to agree with Brimstone in that the initial kiss was a bit quick to happen, though I don't think it's quite so damaging as he seems to. The surrounding elements more than make up for my one problem. Your descriptions are beautiful, the dialogue is solid (humorus, to boot), and the whole thing has this pervasive warmth to it that I can't quite grasp. Great work!

I look forward to seeing more from you. Good luck with school!

I loved this story mainly because you never had them actually break character. I specifically like how Pinkie Pie was still Pinkie Pie even during the intimate moments. I don't like it when someone's personality changes during intimacy. Because they basically become someone else.

I also hate what people have done with "wing boners" after this. Everybody makes wing boners a reaction that all pegasi have. But this story makes it more like something that's unique to Rainbow Dash.

On a scale of 1 to 10, I would give this story a 15.

I loved this story when I first read it and I love it just as much now, short, simple, sweet and in character. Fav 5/5.

I remember this story...
*nostalgia*
Have my stars, a fav, and a watch, just in case.
But something may have been lost in translation:
prompting a sharp, sudden gasp from the peg, breaking The peg? I'm gonna go with pegasus on that one. But it's s'okay :eeyup:

203312 Bellum, it's just a short for pegasus, nothing other than that- so it's not a mistake. Awesome story though!

:pinkiehappy: :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiegasp:

needs to be a little longer:rainbowkiss:

Wow,

That was amazing, very good job!

134368 Was it a Ramona Quimby book or something? I know it comes from an old children's chapter book.

Man, this fic brings back memories of my early brony days.

130795
Nah.
The Anti-pony Shipping Series is one of the first ones to make it off of 'chan posts.

Man, this fic brings back memories.

No long backstories
No theatrical finish
And No romantic build up.
It's the simplicity that I really like about this story. Just pure, simple, physical attraction. I'll give this an A+

awwww! :heart: that is adorable :pinkiehappy:

I just realized it's been a long time since I re-read this. Time to rectify that. :twilightsmile:

That fanfic is so adorable!!:pinkiehappy:

Oh, dude, cool. This fic is on FIM. I used to read it on fanfiction.net when I was bored.

So you might have been the first to have done the wing boner? You sir, have my utter most respect.:moustache::heart:

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