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Cosmonaut


Writer/Artist who's been active since the inception of the fandom.

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After an exhausting day of practice, Rainbow Dash finds herself wandering town for food, but ends up biting off more than she can chew...

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Comments ( 23 )

Short silly shipping story

That was sweet and fun.

Nicely written, as always. I really enjoyed it even if it was too short to have real emotional development between the characters. Have some Spikes for the good work :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

I don't know if you care for tips from a random stranger, but I would explore the use of the beautiful semi-colon for some sentences. For example "Thinking of a new trick was easy, Rainbow Dash thought of new stunts to pull all the time." could become "Thinking of a new trick was easy; Rainbow Dash thought of new stunts to pull all the time", which just seems neater, to me anyway. There were a couple of instances where I thought a semi-colon would have tidied it up.

All in all, very good :pinkiehappy:

hmmm interesting story, a little different then what I expected :rainbowkiss:

So touching :pinkiesad2:
Thumbs up +1 D'awwwwwws +298,989,098,284,674,876,263

I remember reading this somewhere before...I cant remember where but it was still fun reading it again!

all of my d'aaws

aww so sweet. I love it!

354631 Just be careful. I sometimes semicolon spam.

Wow! What a nice story! You sir deserve 5 "Eeeyuuups" for that!:eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup:

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I second this, I can't remember where it was, and I am not sure if the intro changed, but the part once Dash starts looking for food is the same.

Excellent.
I would love to see you put up some more pairings. :ajsmug:

cute little thing, should have been longer though :P

I'm not usually a fan of the shorter shipping fics. But this one worked pretty well. :pinkiegasp: It could have been longer but it was still pretty good. :pinkiehappy:

Well that was...sweet. A cute little romance between a very cute couple, AND it was not clop. I liked it quite a bit. Now, I really want some chocolate and other sweets. I look forward to reading more from you in the future. Keep up the great writing!

Wow so short yet so good. Awesome work!

I Could Have Seen All Pinkiedash Stories But Never See One That Brings My Favourite Things Together. Pinkiedash And Chocolate

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1. pinkiedash is best ship :heart::pinkiesmile::rainbowderp:

2. love this story!:derpytongue2:

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