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Professor Coruptus

Let's try again.


The weirdness is only beginning when Dash wakes up in a juniper bush with no memory of the previous night. Now, Fluttershy won't look at her, Twilight and Rarity keep congratulating her, Tank is nowhere to be found, and Pinkie Pie just kissed her in the middle of the street! Her last hope to find out what happened rests with Applejack, but she's going to have to get the farm pony to open the door first.

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#1 · Dec 17th, 2011 · · ·


make more, and then ill rate it :)

@pinkie pie and rainbow dash

Bow chicka wow wow + giggity

It's just a one shot I did for the Writers Training Grounds. I may do a RariJack sequel someday, but this is all for now. :derpytongue2:

I concur with with Crown8 giggity indeed!:rainbowkiss:

Cute little story. Some spelling problems here and there, especially towards the end, but otherwise a very sweet fic. :twilightsmile:

Liked it! But, uh, mandrins? That can't be a healthy flavor.

Please point out any spelling error I may have made so I can fix them guys. I read this thing over so much my eyes started just glossing over the words. :derpytongue2:

LOVELY! let the two happy couple love each other:rainbowkiss:

71675 "defiantly"? Defiant: to stand up to authority, to be a deviant from the norm.
What I think you meant~~ Definitely. Definite: To be exact, punctual. To have a time/place that [something] will happen ie 'the party will definitely be at Sugarcube Corner'

That was...interesting to say the least...Wouldn't mind reading another like it if you decided to write one though...nice work!

Also, I third what Crown8 said. :pinkiehappy:


Now I just wish my Clop-fic could have such an emotional story.

First I was like :trixieshiftright: then after reading this I am like :trollestia:. So in lieu of having a great story, I want moar!

ahhhhhhhh! I am too tired to write a poem so I will just have to say LLLLLLLLLLOOOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVEEEEEE IT!

right? yes? good. nice read, cider is addicting, and stay out of the bushes.

*mentally marked as awesome* wait, that wont do *marked as superb* noooo *absolutely stunning* >.< hmmm *F***in awesome 5 star + watch* eh guess ill be a little uncouth 2day :3

mandarin oranges? or mandarin the chinese dialect? or the monkey? (its a monkey, right?) only one of those sounds remotely appetizing.
the dialect. :pinkiecrazy:

I like the idea but i think it could use some rewriteing and proofing like these two paragraphs here they bug me and kinda jump around.

Even after the kiss had broken, the spell she seemed to have fallen under persisted. All she could recall was that Pinkie had said something, Dash had nodded, and then Pinkie had smiled back before bouncing off to finish her deliveries. How long Rainbow had just stood there in a stupefied daze she didn’t know. It wasn’t until Twilight had poked her in the shoulder and asked if she was alright that the speedster had snapped back to Equestria and shot up into the air like a rocket. After that she had headed straight for Sweet Apple Acers in the hopes Applejack might be able to explain what in the hay was going on.

“I said let me finish. I don’t know what A.J. put in that stuff that could have messed up my head so bad, but if it gave me the courage to ask you to stay with me, then I’m glad for it. You’re the most amazing pony I’ve ever met Pinkie. You’re fun, you’re talented, you’re fast, not to mention totally cute, and these last few weeks you’ve been living with me have been some of the best of my life. And the fact that you’re going to keep on living with me… you are right?” The pink pony nodded under Dash’s hoof. “Good. The fact that you are going to keep on living with me makes me the happiest mare in the world right now! …But in case I didn’t actually ask you last night

Its just my opinion thought remeber its YOUR fanfic :pinkiehappy:

Yeah, the phrasing in those could definitely be better. Still, I guess it wouldn't be a Pinkie Pie story if it didn't get a little jumpy at times. :pinkiehappy:

"Okie Dokie"


Aww... that was cute. But, um, I guess it was just me, seeing the other comments, but I found it kinda...boring? Like there didn't seem to be any tension or build up? Eh I dunno, maybe I'm too desensitized by emotional-rollercoaster fics.

Over one thousand view, but only twenty some comments? Only 64 ratings?:pinkiegasp:
:facehoof: Oh well. At least no one spammed this with one-stars. Then again, with such a good story, who would?

71702 I am going to get on my real account when I get home and defiantly love this story!!! I will love this story against the will of all who oppose me!

Sweet :pinkiehappy:

I think it could have been extended a bit
But I enjoyed it ^^
Except when pinkie opened her moth to speak:facehoof:

thought :ajsmug:was mad at :rainbowdetermined2: because :applejackconfused: wanted :rainbowhuh: but she was really after :raritywink: and i was like :derpyderp2: but it explained itself in the end :trollestia:

72508 I do believe she landed on an ottoman.

Indeed she did. Nice catch.

At first I was like :unsuresweetie: but then I was like :heart::pinkiehappy::heart: !!!

Really good job! I'm impressed!

I loved it, I really liked how the story started off, it reminded me alot of the Hangover which is one of my favorite movies. Dash is my favorite pony cause she is so awesome, and I really liked it :rainbowkiss:

cool story bro.:pinkiehappy::rainbowwild:


Was there hinted TwiLuna in there?

Please tell me that was hinted TwiLuna in that story.

yay~:yay: this was so cute!

71859 2:36 am... So I'll make my own poem. hmmm I KNOW! SLEEEEEP!


May I ask if any trees have been felled by a herring, rabbits have been killed by hoof grenades blessed by celestia herself, and coconuts have been carried by swallows, disregarding the impossibilty of the final one.

Somepony needs to make a Holy Grail crossover, STAT :yay:


Defiantly? But the writer WANTS you to rate this fic! :rainbowlaugh:


Let's not go to Canterlot.. It's a silly place.

well it was twiluna or :trollestia::heart::twilightsmile:

When you rewrite this, I'd suggest giving an introduction that starts during the party at Sugarcube Corner.
Then, rather than the RareJack scene, hint at it in later chapters by them going to dinner. (or, like, seeing them AT dinner)

Also, there should be some closure with Fluttershy, and if you get the chance, Twilight should try her best to get involved. None of this, "none of my business" stuff, it's ALL her business.

Dash's dialogue might want to be rewritten so it sounds more like her, some of it's not nearly awesome enough. Other than that, this works.
I'm afraid I'm off to look for a good DashPie clopfic now, since you've left me with an open ended story.

This was a sweet story. Only a few mistakes, but not enough to get worked up over.

Okay so it looks like "Parties and Cider" finally left the spot light area after being up there for well over thirty six hours. :pinkiehappy:
Seriously, I didn't think this story would get even a quarter of the popularity it did. This is only my second submission to the sight but it managed to gather two thousand views and a solid 4.5 rating after close to a hundred ratings in just twenty four hours! :pinkiegasp:

That is amazing. For all of you who wanted a bit more bite and depth to the story, I have good news and bad news. Bad news is, it's just fluff and it probably won't get much in the way of revision any time soon aside from fixing some glaring mistakes. The good news is, this is just the appetizer compared to what I've been working of for the last couple of months. This has shown me that I actually can write somewhat decently and given me the confidence to start posting my big project.

Keep an eye out for it, and that you all so much for feedback on this story. :heart::rainbowkiss::heart:

74987 i still didn't get why was Applejack so upset with Rainbow? :ajsleepy:

“Ah got a lot on mah mind thanks ta you, and Ah would really appreciate it if ya’d let me get thing’s sorted out ‘fore ya start tell’n me all about how wonderful thing’s are fer ya now.”

Applejack isn't yellow... She's orange.

She is a silly Pony. :applejackconfused:

But thanks for the catch.

Hehe its adorible :pinkiehappy:

Awesome story. I loved it. Amazing job!

some of it i liked and some of it i didn't and i most have slept through something because i never found out why applejack didn't want to talk to dash (never found out what dash had done to her)...

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