• Member Since 3rd Jan, 2012
  • offline last seen Dec 13th, 2017

FailWhale


Just a guy with random interests that happen to coincide. Like writing and ponies.

E

Pinkie Pie writes about her secret feelings in a journal, and makes the decision to admit her feelings to Rainbow Dash. Little does she know, that decision will change her life. PinkieXRainbow Dash, characters will be added when they appear.

Chapters (9)
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!
Comments ( 44 )

This seems like something you can build a story out of. I've never been a fan of Pinkie ships (She's never struck me as the shippable type) but you can do something with this.
Your grammar and sentence structure is perfect my friend :pinkiehappy: I applaud you for that. And your depiction of Pinkie Pie is something I can actually see based off her personality in the show.
Basically, I'm saying keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

Now, I do have to nitpick about one thing: There isn't much of a plot to this. Although it works for what you have, I'd love to see you build off of this (which you VERY EASILY COULD: hint hint :raritywink:)

Now my suggestion? Make this a prologue, think of a conflict, and write a full story out of it. If you could manage to do it all in this style, that would be awesome and I would hunt you down and force you to take all of my stars.

Like I said, you have something to work with, but you should expand on it. So get rid of that 'complete' setting and do it filly!

goo

:pinkiehappy: I think it is very cute!

Vic

I have to agree with 180208

This is a fantastic piece and you can definitely go somewhere with this and I would love to see that happen.
This characterization of Pinkie you have made here is an interesting and unique one to say the least and I definitely enjoy it. I love stories where a character has a secret side to them, Pinkie Pie being brighter than she lets on in this case, and you hit the nail on the head with this short read. You set yourself up for something bigger and better and I urge you to run with it however you can for you have the potential.
Good luck, have fun, and keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

not too shabby. 4 stars for you my friend

180208 Actually, Pinkie Pie happens to be among the most shippable, with Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Twilight, and Fluttershy. Not so much for Rarity though. Most ships are to dirty, so she only boards the ones that have been moped down! :pinkiehappy:

Well-written and well-characterized! I like this interpretation of Pinkie. Would like to see some kind of sequel or follow-up; this sets one up nicely. Keep up the good work!

Well, I can't believe I'm doing this, but I'm taking everyone's suggestion to make this a full-fledged story. I'll try my hardest to make it good.

Ah, I remember this one. Glad you decided to turn it into a multi-chaptered affair. This chapter feels more like a set-up chapter, so I can't really say if it's been wonderful or terrible just yet, but I like the direction you're taking it.

Keep doing your thing, dawg!

Good set-up! If the rest of the story is going to written like this, I'm eagerly looking forward to it. Keep it up!

Looking GOOOOD. Nomally, I don't much like Pinkie, but if something is well written, I can tough it out. It's funny; I think Dash and Pinkie are my second and third least favourites of the mane 6.

Vic

Very well done, I knew you had it in you. I'm glad that you bit the bullet and took everyone's advice because you definitely show some excellent talent in writing.

hmmmmm........mhmmmmm.......im interested my dear boy. moar i ask:rainbowkiss:

Oh man oh man! This is good, I can't wait for you to update!

It's kinda obvious that this is a "I have no idea where this is going" chapter. And it's a GOOD one, but still. I would have preferred if you had waited to put out something more substantial. But this isn't bad, and I love your work, so I'm not disappointed. I hope you figure out what you do with this soon.

... Fluttershy eh? I believe I know where this is going.

Stupid Rainbow Dash X Pinkie Pie
Faved liked tracked.
Anywho I love this story so far keep it up!

Vic

I love it! You are a master, my friend. Those changes in perspective seemed odd at first but when I realized their purpose, it was perfect.

Another great chapter. Keep up the good work!

Vic

Writing on a sudden impulse may not always be as bad as it seems. It feels more natural, it reads like something that was written in spur of the moment, as one would writing in a journal or diary.
Keep up the good work!

Just remember: If you don't want to write something then dont let your fans push you. Writing is fun until it becomes a chore


anyway I'd like to see how this plays out. Not very many GOOD pinkie x dash stories out there.

This, this right here, is one of those awesome PinkieDash stories :rainbowkiss:

I always look forward to when this story updates, and you did not disappoint. I like where this story is going. No need to insult yourself, this chapter was not bad, I think you've improved a lot from when you started. Also, a quick note of advice if I may, don't tell your readers that your work sucks, because if you don't like it, why should they? Anyway, keep on writing, I look forward to the next chap!

really. teh voice had to ruin everything?

You can see all of the houses, and the forest, and it's beauti-" Rainbow Dash stopped abruptly. "Uh, I mean, it's cool and all..." she said with a small blush. Pinkie Pie giggled.
google.ca/url?source=imglanding&ct=img&q=http://www.drunktiki.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/10/I-see-what-you-did-there.jpg&sa=X&ei=pvVkT_f1DYyNigK1zvyiDw&ved=0CAsQ8wc&usg=AFQjCNH4i059RFvBMCtuh2lJec7kXix4gw

Ah, as stereotypical as it was, I have to say that I love the ending. Solid work, and I can't wait to see the epilogue. :twilightsmile:

Wow, gotta love that ending :yay:

A beautiful end to a beautiful story :pinkiehappy:

thatvwas amazing even if the iner pinkie pie vioce was abit creapy when you gave it a little to much power:pinkiecrazy:
it reminded me of fell into the right hooves wich was the first and one of the best shipping i've ever read so hats of to you sir :pinkiehappy:
defently in my top ten

Aww I loved that story, one of the best pinkiedash stories I've ever read, thank you.

rainbow's face when she got kissed by pinkie::rainbowderp:

awwwww, this is such a cute story. I give you 5 pinkies! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Oh great! Not only is pinkie in love with Rainbow, But now she's a schizophrenic. Could this get any better!!! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::pinkiehappy:

I can't believe what an amazing job you've done with one of my favorite ships! Keep up the awesome work on any new stories you may write - and have faith in yourself - don't discredit your own work. Once again, thanks for a terrific read! :pinkiesmile:

YES!I can totally see Flutters supporting these two! *squee* and Pinkie's voice (let's call her Pinkemena shall we) would totally do that to her. Just sayin'. XD
And fwiw, I don't think this was a bad chapter.:3

;-; I have only one thing to say:

Why didn't I see this story sooner?

Been a long time since I last read this, and here I come to find an unread Epilogue! And I thought I'd seen "Complete" last time...

I'm definitely favoriting this. However, I don,t believe Applejack would be even a little homophobic. Homophobia is an expression of patriarchy. Equestria is a matriarchal society meaning that homophobia would be nonexistent in their society.

omg so cute:rainbowkiss:da feels:pinkiehappy:really good

This is the best chapter so far. I like how Fluttershy picks up on what's happening.

The voice sounds like anxiety to me. I deal with this a lot. It sucks.

I LOVE THIS STORY!!! It made me cry and laugh!!

What a beautiful and natural story. Please make a sequel, if you can

Login or register to comment
Join our Patreon to remove these adverts!