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Professor Coruptus


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Rainbow Dash has been suffering from recurring nightmares. Each time she closes her eyes, the dreams get more and more horrific. So far she's been able to hide them from most of her friends, but that all changes when she wakes up screaming in Sweet Apple Acres. Now, it's a race against time, with Dash's very life and sanity on the line. But what is causing her horrible night terrors, and how can they be stopped? It's going to take a bit of Pinkie Pie ingenuity, a little Zebra and Alicorn magic, and a very special kind of loyalty to save the cerulean speedster. A kind of loyalty most ponies know, as love.

Featuring eventual PinkieDash, RariJack, and a special surprise.


Inspired by this image by Don-KomandoRR and colored by AtomicGreymon

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 199 )

Will have to keep an eye on this one

Seems funny, and the pairing I can handle... tracking!

Tracking just for the Shipping....

Nah, ahm kiddin' This looks promising. :pinkiehappy:

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

Really like the story man. Keep it up.

Not toilets, mind you, just porcelain toilets.
I mean, talking ponies and a dragon living inside a tree that also happens to be a library? Yeah, that's ok. Porcelain toilets in the clouds? Well, that's just silly.

:pinkiehappy: MOAR!! this story has me glued, must have more!

toilets? magic (snort )(snort) :ajsmug:

If this ends up being a story about
Dash getting worked up about losing the tryouts for the Wonderbolts or being humiliated,
im going back slap you.

Twice.

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

those must be some horrifying dreams if it's making her physically sick and in agony! Poor Dashie.:pinkiesad2:

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Pretty sure that there's more to it than that, seeing as it was already implied that her friends were killed during the last dream sequences. Of course, the more pressing question is what's causing them; as in, is it backstory/unresolved traumas or an outside force. I'm rooting for unresolved trauma, since outside interference is usually used as a cop out, but if done well it can be really interesting. I eagerly await the next update.

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Poor rainbow :C

Having gone through a rather bad 'episode' of being unable to sleep/being unable to avoid falling to sleep, this is actually very well written.

The one gripe that i have is that unless she's falling unconscious she wouldn't be seeing black-it's a lot more like thoughts just kind of slow down. But hey, the fading into blackness thing is much better for drama so whatever :scootangel:

Not really qualified to be a critic anyway ~~

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Poor rainbow :C

Having gone through a rather bad 'episode' of being unable to sleep/being unable to avoid falling to sleep, this is actually very well written.

The one gripe that i have is that unless she's falling unconscious she wouldn't be seeing black-it's a lot more like thoughts just kind of slow down. But hey, the fading into blackness thing is much better for drama so whatever :scootangel:

Not really qualified to be a critic anyway ~~141997

In my experience, anyway

Shits going down!

Oh dear god.
Shit hit the fan.

when Pinkamena :pinkiecrazy: gets involved, it's either A: Shit's getting real or B: she's gone off the deep end. in this case, it's A. and when Pinkamena gets involved... well, the target is gonna have a LOT of hell to pay. sucks to be who or whatever's targetted. :scootangel:

DAMN, things are getting crazy now. I hope for the sake of whatever's causing Dash's nightmares that it doesn't get involved with Pinkie, cause it will get bucked up if it does...that is if something/someone is making Dash have nightmares.

I must say I'm rather enjoying this so far.
I'm especially liking the little bits of Rainbow Pie - the smile Pinkie gets when talking about getting her cutie mark and how she thinks of something hurting her Rainbow Dash.
Looking forward to more.

Why so serious?:pinkiecrazy: :rainbowderp:

So very good. I'm on edge with anticipation! I can't wait to see more of this story :pinkiecrazy:

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Glad you're enjoying it. The next chapter will be focusing on one of the other ships though, but don't worry there is still much more PinkieDash goodness to be had. :rainbowkiss::heart::pinkiehappy:

Oh GOD Pinkiemena Style?! :raritydespair:

That can only mean one thing... :pinkiecrazy:

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

Came for the Rainbow Pie, got some Rarijack...

I approve :moustache:

Hehe that was cute. I hope to see more with Rainbow. I'z worried about her D:

Okay, love it, but just one question--how in the hell does one cheat at horseshoes? :rainbowhuh:

AJ ill sew your hat :rainbowkiss:

I saw a few spelling mistakes there, but now I can't find them . . . Damnit! :twilightangry2:
So sad, and so beautifully crafted. Nice Rarijack.

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Well let me know if you see them again. :scootangel:

Found them!
" . . . machines made out of candy on a daily bases." Should be basis
" . . . never question anything Pinkie Pie was involved, mentioned in connection too, or associated with in anyway." Should be any way
"Sweet Apple Acer's" Sweet Apple Acres
"her cheeks burning and her eyes fixed on the floor in front of her" no period at the end of the sentence
Gonna check previous chapters now for other edits.

Editing post!
"“Something you never expect to happen is about to happen” Pinkie said. . . " no comma to signal end of quote
"Sweet Apple Acers" Sweet Apple Acres
" . . . Pinkie Pie had shown up to deliver a singing telegram inviting her to gummies birthday party."
Capitolization and possession; Gummy's
"Warm milk before bed, playing music, flooding the room with pleasant smells, changing her surroundings, nothing had worked." use a semicolon
Also some double-spacing spots out there, watch out.
Thank you, have a nice day.

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I have a small gripe ^.^ any instance of "week" that doesn't refer to time. Weak is of course the way we spell it. Well in America at least. I honestly have no idea about the rest of the world's English. ^.^

But, besides minor alternative spellings, I rather enjoyed this story quite a lot and I wasn't even a fan of Rarijack until this. I think it's great now, so you've changed me sir. (or Ma'am)

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Thanks for the help guys. I think I've gone though and fixed everything you pointed out. :pinkiehappy: Again, thank you all so much for helping me with this story, after a while my eyes just start sliding over the words.

The only thing that took me out of the story was this line "The kiss only lasted a second but, Rarity felt the world stop and spark electricity shoot through her entire body in the brief moments the farm pony’s chaste lips touched her own."

For one I think the comma goes before the "but" and two either use spark or shoot but not both so instead it would work better as ...the world stop and electricity spark(or shoot) through... Or just put it as "a spark of electricity shoot"

Other than that and some other less disruptive errors I liked this chapter a lot and though it was well paced and interesting chapter. I now like rarijack ships. I never could tell of I liked apple dash or rarijack better until now. I still love twixie the most

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Thanks for the catch, should be better now. :yay: Though fair warning, Trixy has been cast as "Mare not appearing in this fic." :trixieshiftleft:

TYPOES, TYPOES EVERYWHERE

Great fic so far! Really want to know what happent next :derpyderp2: !

Ah well I'll keep track of this fic so I know when it updates. Keep it up!

The hospital waiting room was almost completely empty save for one lone (yellow) earth pony who sat on one of the padded benches while she played nervously with the hem of her hat.

Yellow should be orange. Other then that I did not see any errors.
Loved this chapter.

Couple small errors:
"If they administered the wrong drug at the wrong time, Dash could slip into a comma"
Should be coma.
And Sweetie Bell's name is spelled like that, no "y", and there's a space.
Otherwise, great fic, really loved the flashback to Rarity fixing AJ's hat, it was very touching.

Love the Fact that Nurse Redheart is actually Screwball. Nice Touch there.

Also Love the whole Fic

Lol nightmare on elm street. Anyway good chapter. Do I sense some twiluna? Lol second best twilight ship next to Trixie. Keep it up broski

Oh noes! :pinkiesad2: Dashie dying is the WORST! POSSIBLE! THING! *summons fainting couch and falls on it*:raritycry:

Poor pinkie :raritycry: she basically just got shot in the heart

Awesome as always. This might sound weird, but am I the only one who thinks Pinkie is gonna go into Dash's head?

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nope, i think that may be why they used one of my favorite rainbowXpie pictures, because that's whats gonna end up happening.

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