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Hm... that's funny. My counter on Microsoft Word 2010 stamps this as having 30,514 words total, not 17,455. Strange.... I'll look into it later.
That is weird lol, then again, I have suspected that the WC program used on this site might be a bit glitchy.
Commence read.
1905942 i actually did put that song on
great story its so well written!
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Thank you! It means a lot
Hmmm....So. Luna ate Applejack's pie.
.....
I'll be looking forward to more 'pie-eating'...
It was a very lovely story to read.
It didn't give me that warm fuzzy feeling though.
Good read though.
This story was vary good
10/10
lol, i wonder exactly how wonderful she smells?
that was good. but for some reason, i didnt get all warm inside. oh well. good nonetheless.
Well well, this was a most pleasant surprise. I found this when perusing the general assortment of romantic clopfics and I must admit I'd never even considered a Luna/Applejack pairing. I am looking forward to seeing how the relationship grows and blooms =)
Ahh, a short slice-of-life chapter for Applejack and some contemplation by Luna. I love it! Most authors overlook the slice-of-life chapters (myself included, unfortunately) and continue on with the main focus of their story, but it is vital for both character and story development. Well done sir Hacker, well done.
Whelp, I was pleased at the beginning of the chapter but worried you might be getting ahead of yourself with Applejack being "caught" but I'm glad you played it off as a briefly awkward moment rather than something to preclude a relationship. I'm most satisfied with the progression of the friendship and I'm wondering that Luna hasn't corrected Applejack more often with the "Call me 'Luna'" request. I was curious as to what Applejack's "game" was going to be, and Haydiving was quite amusing to read. I cannot wait to read more!
Slight typo in this chapter! In the second paragraph you have "Lana" instead of "Luna" =) I like the sauciness of Luna's self-exploration but you take an impassioned moment and turn it on its ear with the guilt, anger, and despair. You really got me to feel what Luna felt, and I'm not afraid to admit I was tearing up a little at the bit about her being an alien relic that "doesn't belong."
I am going to go read the next chapter immediately so as to see what other hyjinks the Princess gets up to in her quest for food.
D'aww! No shenanegans with the princess going out for "lunch" or "dinner" or whatever a midnight meal would be. =( Ah well, more Applejack makes me happy =) And she's in heat too! Oooooo how spicy~ Heh, I'm sure her friends all have a similar thought process that involves her being too busy with the farm, but since this is an Applejack story I'm liking hearing just her side of the proverbial argument.
Now this was a heartwarming scene. Applejack complementing the Moon, making Luna feel wanted and needed. I mroe than teared up. I'm actually still crying, but they're tears of joy :')
And what a way to end a chapter. This is wehre I'd usually scream and demand the next chapter, but all i gotta do is click the "next" =p
Which I'll do now!
Reading this I'm feeling butterflies in my stomach! Its so intense! So elegant! I agree with Kev: APPLEJACK, KISS HER!!!
YAAAAY!!!! They kissed they kissed they kissed!
What the...hellooooo...they want to kiss more?
Oooooooooh, kiss leads to sex,sex leads to.....
embaressment and abandoning your lover post-coitus? WTF Luna! YOU MUST CUDDLE
I cannot click "Next" fast enough!
First couple of paragraphs:
Applejack so saaaaaaad! 
Then Yaaay! Luna's back! I kinda wanna know why she was gone so long and what she was up to, but meh, take what you can get right? Besides, still one chapter left, maybe the next one will explain....
Nice hot sexy love, I approve :D
Aaaand end with snuggles, professions of love, and never leaving each other's hearts. Super super sweet <3
This had better not be the end >( I want more!
Also, I can't help but comment on the feeling that this chapter was rushed. It starts off as a real tear-jerker that you could have easily stretched, perhaps even brought in some of the "court" and even Celestia to give Luna reason to believe the things she said in the beginning about being banished and whatnot.
A sad applejack talking to the other Elements, specifically Twilight, and coming clean would be a heartwarming experience for certain, and possibly humourous when an angry Twilight stormed Canterlot to yell at Celestia xD
But in anycase, it was a very enjoyable read while it lasted.
This is a truly beautiful story and I hope that there will be a sequal. I think that this is probably the only story that I have read that has truly made me feel warm inside because of how the love was expressed in such a pure and true way.
K thats it i just lost it
1905942 I secound that motion!! Lets get a Mob formed!!
yet again i lost it
Dear god man! STop Making Me lose IT D:
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Glad you liked it! ...I think you liked it.
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Thank you very much for your words! A sequel is on the list to be made
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As always, I appreciate all that you do flutterdash
Lunajack.... I think I could get into this
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Yay! A potential (metaphorical of course) customer!
1905425 when will the sequel be out?
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Soon. I don't know if you've heard of them, but "Late Nights With Luna" and "A Week With Fluttershy" have all fared better in the grand scheme of things and this WAS intended to be one off, so I've decided to write the sequels for them first. Mixed with that and the other stories that I'm working on, I'd place the deadline for ALL of them to be out by October, September at the very latest.
2833857 I've definitely gotta check them out man
Alright, first off, what's with all the masturbation shaming? Seriously, get over it. It's a natural process, and that's a fact. Almost literally every person does it at least once in their lives, and most do it many times throughout their lives. You're writing clop, for fuck's sake. Don't be putting down masturbation. And don't try to feed me some "it's for the story" crap, because it's natural to do it, so why would both characters feel that way? I could understand one of them, maybe, but two is just way past the realm of implausibility. Secondly, I am honestly having a hard time even reading this with all the grammar mistakes you are making, all the misguided attempts at adding some kind of sophisticated language, and all the irrational headcanons you are shoving in there. Please, think about what you're writing before you write it, or at least go back and fix what's left in the wake of your creative hurricane.
Edit: If you can't articulate your stories elegantly, eloquently, and fluently, then don't try to. Stick with what you can use properly, and work on the rest, if you plan on using it.
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Back off buddy. First of all, I don't appreciate your strong criticism. I'll accept it, but when it's sincere and not for the purpose of hate. That is not appreciated at all. Second of all, I've taken a peek at your account and I don't see you with any stories at all and furthermore I don't see you with any more than three followers (since I'm such a terrible writer who "shouldn't try"). That's all that matters is that you try and that's what I stick by. I'm sorry if you can't respect that. Lastly, if you bothered to actually read some of the other comments below yours, you'll see a lot of my "mistakes" are intentional. I don't mean to sound overly harsh, but that was totally uncalled for and I do not appreciate it in the least. Now please, unless you comment back with the intention to be kind and respectful of each other, don't comment back at all.
2835099 I'm sorry if that came off as harsh, but I do have valid points, even if I may have posed them a tad rudely.
And besides that, I don't see how that affects the validity of my criticisms.
To start, I know perfectly well which mistakes were intentional and which weren't, at least I hope I do, because if I'm wrong, then you have a bit of a gap in your understanding of accents and grammar.
Secondly, I don't do anything for the purpose of hate. If there's no chance of anyone learning anything from what I say, then I might as well just not say anything. I don't much care if I come off as rude some of the time, but I will apologize later on, if the writer is capable of taking that criticism.
Thirdly, I never once said you were horrible, nor that you shouldn't try. I said you shouldn't try to use terms you can't properly implement into your writing and still have it be coherent an flow well.
Fourthly, of course I don't have more than three followers, because I don't post any of my work here.
And lastly, I would appreciate you responding to my string of probably-more-rude-than-they-should-have-been statements and inquiries relating to the masturbation shaming, which I am a bit concerned about.
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Mhm. So basically I'm not going to get an apology out of you and I can see that you obviously don't view me in a positive light? Small world isn't it? If you're expecting a bunch of errors and just a "creative hurricane", why read? I'm not asking you to read any of my work and I don't very much care if you like it or not or if you read it or not. If we're not going to get along and all I'm going to get is negative, negative, negative from you then what incentive do I have to reply to your comments? None. Look, I'm not going to sit here and fight with you over a minute subject. I'm done with this argument for it is obvious that you and I are only going to call the other's knowledge into question. A pleasant conversation is welcome.
Sir or madam, please know that I work collectively. I will not defend myself from your criticism, but nor will I explain myself. So long as others enjoy my stories and do not bring to my attention anything that majorly needs improving, well, then I see no need to change my methods. If it is good enough for the people that came before you then it is good enough for me. Please remember that none of us are perfect and as such, I believe that none of us has the right to be a perfectionist (I'm not implying that you are).
2835650 I did apologize in that comment, but I'll do it again, if you like. I was implying that you handled the criticism I threw at you and I had apologized and recognized that you handled it well. And I wasn't really very negative there, either.
As for my incentive to read and yours to listen, I don't have to read, and I honestly might not. It's my choice, and even if I don't want to finish the story, I appreciate you putting out content that others might enjoy. My motivation for commenting is the idea that I might be able to help you improve, but only if you listen to what I have to say. I made some very valid criticisms, even if they were muffled by the shroud of toxicity I was putting off. All a writer has to do to improve is take criticisms under advisement. I'm a guy who has an appreciation for the truth. And the truth is that you would do well to improve as a writer, every writer would, including me. If I made a mistake or did something that could have been improved upon in some meaningful way, then I would be frustrated and disappointed if no one pointed it out to me.
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My apologies. I've been driving all night and want to get to sleep here, but I can't. It's funny you should mention that though, for I said the same thing to a person who requested I write a story for them, about being able to take criticism I mean. Forget it, forget it. I'm trying to be the voice of peace here. I REALLY don't like arguing with people that comment on my stories because the whole idea is foolish. I assume that you, like me, are a fully grown man and yet we can't find anything better to do than argue over a sexual story set in a children's cartoon universe. I may make changes to this sometime in the future, but for now, since it is not doing as well in the views as my other stories I will not, there is no point in it to me. You cannot make progress if you constantly go back. You must go back to make improvements on your own time, time of which I don't have right now.
I think perhaps it is that the two of us have different writing styles. Perhaps it is that you write as a perfectionist and I write as an amateur, and that is absolutely a good thing. It speaks about our characters. I, like you, agree that the only way you can improve is to take the opinions of your readers and keep the inside where you can remember them. I really don't mean to sound hostile, I'm just exhausted and I'll admit that I took it you were stating any work is better than mine.
I see now the error of my ways. Are we good?
2835923 Perfectly. Now that is a level of maturity I have rarely seen elsewhere and I commend you for it. And you are right, I do play the part of the perfectionist a little too well.
I can't seem to let anything be when it doesn't seem right to me. But you work isn't amateurish, it simply needs some polishing, and maybe a lesson or two learned along the way. Sorry I started us off so far on the wrong foot, there. I just want to help people improve through constructive criticism, but I seem to make destructive criticisms almost as often as not, so thank you for your patience.
2835923 Well, at least I don't shy away from speaking my mind, eh?
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Not at all
. Now that I read, I was really the dick here. My work could use some polishing, but hey, couldn't all of our stories? Belive me when I say that you're a million times more patient than I am. Hundred bucks says that if I'd have retorted with those last comments with anyone else the F-Bomb would have already been dropped and there'd be no remote chance of us developing a writer-reader, reader-writer relationship. Really, I like criticism, I really do. In my groggy state though, it seemed as if it took awhile for me to register that you come in peace. 
Well I thank you again and again once more for watching me. I'm on my way over to do the exact same now!
2836374 Whoa, slow down there. Let's not make this creepy. The stalker/victim relationship is one-way, buddy.
But here, I was kind of level-headed throughout the ordeal. Not really my best day, but at least it wasn't too bad. You showed a lot more maturity than I did during this conversation. The position of the critic is often the easiest, and I didn't exactly make it easy for you. 
I may seem like I have a good bit of patience, but I'm really quite irritable. I just go back through my comments and remove what's abusive, in most cases.
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I just try to assert my friendliness. Itcoincides with my political belief that we are all equal and must attempt to get along all while avoiding making enemies. That's how I feel you can build a good reputation. Make the people around you comfortable, never to excess though, maybe have a conversation here, a conversation there, and go about your business. It's just how I work. Like I said, it's the methods that we use... It would seem mine are very unorthodox
Appreciated by most though, nonetheless. Keep in mind that I WAS quick to shoot back with a tone of hostility and then had the "audacity", for lack of a better word, to try and get anoter apology out of you. Either way, perhaps the both of us are the culprits of a buckle in our maturity?
2838678 Nay, it is I who was lacking in maturity during this little debacle. And I feel I must say that, while I do respect your political/moral/ethical views and I would prefer to have them, I am unable to do something like that. I feel a deep set need to go after anything that falls under the categories of unjust, cruel, lying (apart from most white lies), manipulation, ignorance (almost exclusively purposeful ignorance, not just the lack of knowledge of something), prejudice, discrimination, or intolerance. Which is a tad ironic because I, myself, am intolerant of the things I listed above. I would like to be able to be kind to others, but almost every person I have ever come across has been suffering from at least one of these things. Also, I haven't had good experiences with people in general, so I just don't like people, which doesn't help my social skills. :)
Any chance of a sequel? :)
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Well... I hadn't intended on it at first, but taking the reception into mind and since you asked...
I think you can see where this is going and what the answer is going to be. 
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Nice! :)
wow.. I've never seen this ship before, but now I think this could work, im so tired of twiluna, and it's good to see some luna x some else besides her sister. golly good show!