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Excuse the spelling of Big Mac's formal name. I know that some prefer to spell it "Macintosh" but I went off a mlp.wikia.com article which states it can be spelled either way, and one of the show's developers stated it should be spelled like that. So please, do not point that out. It is intentional.
Why did all my comments get deleted I didn't delete them
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Probably because you are spamming the comments with useless comments that most people (including the author) find highly annoying.
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Well... it's kind of that and it's kind of not that. I do appreciate your taking the time to comment, but please make it useful to the story in the form of either admiration or constructive criticism
These short and repetitive comments were just taking up space and making the comments section look cluttered.
4830901 makes sense
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Oh, and thank you for the fave!
Yes as I read the last chapter I did see only 1 mistake
" Next was Twilight Sparkle, and then came Rarity, and then Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, and lastly Fluttershy "
You said fluttershy twice, and left out pinkie
If Big Mac's harem is the Mane 6 then Spike should have his own harem as well.
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Thanks for spotting it!
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no problem man
The clop scenes were well written, but the overall premise stiles against it. The idea that Big Mac's actions were excuse able because he's a stallion, as if saying that a man who sleeps around with his significant other's friends is okay because "boys will be boys". The fact that Mac seemed so seriously concerned about faithfulness in the first place, then let's himself get lead around by his cock detracts from his character. Ultimately the story synopsis is "Big Mac manages to accedintally sleep with his sister and all her friends, but it's okay because they're all horny bitches". While this might be okay for some, I was hoping it would take a different stance or approach than other harem stories.
Eh. For a stream-of-consciousness of Big Mac's thoughts, this feels a little bit off. I think my problem is that you're trying to make Big Mac look like a prize catch in set-up for the rest of the story, but in the process you made him TOO perfect. Seriously, doing everybody's chores for the next day on multiple occasions? Retiring 'early' means going to bed shortly after midnight? Perfect gentlemanly chivalry? It feels like it shoots to the far extreme of perfection that it honestly comes out a bit as satire.
In my headcanon, Applejack is the enthusiastic one of the three siblings about her life on an apple orchard, while Apple Bloom is still too young to really have much in the way of feelings either way, but for Big Mac it's more a duty and a living than it is a way of life for him. This chapter fits in pretty decently with it, where he uses smarts to apple buck and gets through the day with raw tenacity.
Eh, Big Mac's choice of books seems an odd thing to get hung up over, if only because where is he getting the books from? Reading out of the family's own library? Buying books and then setting them aside? He clearly can't be borrowing them from the library since then Twilight Sparkle would know what he's reading, unless he gets them when only Spike is in the library, but then he would still be shy about that.
Can't say too much about the clop, I prefer not to comment specifically on clop. AJ in a saddle gives a man images, though.
Well, for not wanting Applejack's friends to find out about his reading interests, BM sure didn't have a problem with Twilight knowing about it, librarian's secrecy or not
Even for a fic like this where it's to be expected, that scene at the end seems to move a bit quick, at least on Twilight's part given she's being cast more as the typical librarian girl here rather than the main character action girl the show puts her in usually. But then, Mac has probably never had a problem with attracting all the mares
Unicorn magic is h4x. At least Twilight seems like somebody Mac could be a special somepony with. Goodness knows there are a decent number of fics around that premise.
Considering the amount of work Big mac apparently does A and B the C of D around the farm, Granny Smith certainly comes off as a sourpuss for him being late to work.
Bad Big Mac! No buying something that you can so easily make at home.
I can see why Big Mac would feel that he needs to feel guilty, given that he's connecting with Twilight Sparkle as his marefriend, and then just up and lets Rarity deepthroat him like that. By his ethical standard he should have stopped her, but all the same time Rarity was very forward herself, barely asking permission in turn.
And now this is where Big Mac's canon personality of mostly staying in the background and being a stallion of few words really rears its ugly head and is bound to get him into trouble. He really needs to learn to stick up and take decisive action, because at the rate he's going it'll certainly turn into a mess once the truth comes out.
And then this is where the story just gets completely off-track. There were probably a dozen ways you could have inserted Rainbow Dash. This is not one of them. She is the Element of Loyalty, and Discord episodes notwithstanding, it really is completely twisting her character to have her basically blackmail Big Mac so as to not tell her friends about the love polygon that's going on.
foreshadowing of a not dreamless sleep with Luna somehow entangled in Big Mac's situation???