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Void Chicken

I wrote a horse story once.


My name is Twilight Sparkle, and 350 years ago, Sweetie Belle and I vanished without a trace.
Now here we are, in the future.
Equestria has become a utopia, with everypony living in peace and harmony.
Everything is perfect. All a pony could ever want, and more.
My name is Twilight Sparkle, and I want to go home.

Editing provided by Stereo_Sub and JustAnotherTimeLord.

Cover art courtesy of Geomancing.

Reading by lieilengi

Spanish translation by Spaniard Kiwi

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 1981 )

This.... actually seems like a great story. Will read now

Yup. Definitely a good story.

Now this is what deserves to be in the featured box.

EDIT: Totally called it.

If I had a dollar for every time I wanted to say that, but didn't because I would be saying it too often...

Chapter 2 - Princess Celestia Fixes Everything

Twilight drug her aching feet through. dragged maybe?

Good chapter, I remember reading another where Sweetie Belle turned out to be a cyborg, but I don't remember what it was...well, anyways, when the part about the "clicker" came up, I thought of that. *sigh* memories... hope to see more of this later! :heart:


Well, with a box full of sequels, common crossovers and "My Little (Somepony)s"/"(Somepony)'s (somepony)" knockoffs, I don't think anyone would mind some fresh content.

I love it.
Nice writing, and although it's 6000 words, it feels short.
Can't find a grammatical error, which is refreshing.
The future is plausible, which I like.
The author's note and your humor also boost your rating.
Most future fics would just have a lazer that would zap Sweetie back to health.
You made a rational fix, which is good.
Moustache-Applejack smug.
Comparison: 9.3/10.

Well, this is really something. A story with pacing at the speed of light but actually pulls it off, and pulls it off well? As the first fic I picked out from the featured box in quite some time, I can definitely say that I am not disappointed. On to the next chapter!

From the feature box? What are you talking-- *checks*
Holy crap!
edit: Great I jinxed it.

Ah, fascinating chapter. Loved the idea of everypony having horns and wings through some sort of magic gem-things, and Twilight being Sweetie Belle's surrogate mother should definitely prove interesting as the story goes on. Definitely looking forward to more!

Does "everpony" include the other races? Are they at peace with the Changelings? :rainbowhuh:

I declare this story impossible unless someone changes the character tags.

1863166 Heads up! Your story is now back in the box.

This is awesome. One of the best I've read in a while. Can't wait until Twi meets Celestia...only Celstia isn't going to be Princess anymore, is she? Or maybe not remember Twi? I dunno...

this is great.

did you know that the part that your summary gets cut off right after the line "I want to go home." So if you want to see the credits? no that doesn't sound right.....hmmmmm:trixieshiftleft: meh i think you know what i mean


Oh wow i want more.

Great story!! words, sequence, conversations, EVERYTHING!!!

@I'm part mechanical now!!, made me laugh:twilightblush:

Based on the description, I have seen this concept four times in this fandom. I have seen it literally dozens of times across books, movies, and television. I always read these stories, because it is one of the single, best setups I can imagine for a story. I'm going to read this right now, I'll let you know if it holds up.
[edit] Yup. Yup indeed (thus far). Tracked.

I like stories set into the future. More!

??? When did one thumbs up equal 2?
85, i hit thumbs up, 87
Good story though, love it ^_^
"Yes, listen to your mother,"

And we now have Sweetie Bot, v0.001.

*rolls eyes* because someone else thumbs up'd it.

1864222 Because somebody else thumbed it up before you, so your thumb made it load that one. Seems like it'd be kinda obvious, but since this isn't the first comment like that on this fic alone.... *shrugs* I guess not :unsuresweetie:

From the description alone, it seems very similar to two fanfics I've read: Lost Time and, as 1864020 mentioned before, Millennium Wake. I just hope I will not be disappoint by blatant similarities. Will read later to hopefully be proven wrong.

I haven't read either of those, so any similarity will be purely coincidental, promise. :twilightsmile:
(Where's the happy Sweetie Belle emote I want a happy Sweetie Belle emote.)

Hello Celestia, it is I, Twilight Sparkle, your protege...
Celestia spits out her tea... "But you vanished centuries ago?"

1864293 When I was reading comments I proceeded to skip a lot of them that didn't seem important, so.... That first one just caught my eye cause of similarities

1864290 We shall seeeeeeee..........

1864319 Take it! Take it and deeeaaaaaal with it! :trollestia:

Originality. I love it.
Even if it wasn't in the feature box, I'll still read it.
Anyway, I've read both the prologue and chapter 1, and it's already good to me.
You have promising skills.:rainbowwild:

bullshit pinkie pie knows exactly when they will be back

You spoke too soon. I just saw this from said featured box.:twilightsmile:

Funny how that happens.:rainbowwild:
I'm not surprised though. It's a really great read!

I listened to this idea of yours awhile ago and I've this to say:

I'm impressed :yay:

10/10 Mr. Void Chicken :twilightsmile:

timey wimey wibbly wobbly

Was the alternate title 'Tree Fiddy'?

Fascinating story. It lacks the menace of other time-travel scenarios I've seen so far, but it doesn't sound like it stays that way. They're probably trapped; maybe advanced magics are illegal? That one pony seemed flabbergasted by Twi's teleport spam.

And thus, Sweetie Bot was born! :unsuresweetie:

Great story. MOAR. :twilightsheepish:

THIS Is a neat idea! I WANT MOAR :flutterrage:

part mare part machine all adorable!:pinkiehappy:

Considering my father has exactly what Sweetie Bell has... and, as of last year, is now the proud owner of a new "ticker" himself, I could relate so incredibly well with this chapter. More so than alot of thigns that I read on this site.

I'll definitely be tracking this.

I wonder how Celestia and Luna has been holding up for the last 350 years.

This. Is. Amazing. No more words.


Wow, this is amazing. Great story. At the rate this thing is going, we are going to have here perhaps one of the most popular stories on the site.

1864290 I REQUEST MORE INTERESTING CHAPTERS ON MY DESK ASAP if you don't mind :fluttershyouch::moustache:

This sounds interesting. will read later.

Very interesting start here. I am really interested to see where you take this, especially how you deal with the princess's reactions. I also wonder how the world will have dealt with the sudden disappearance of Sweetie Belle, but even more so Twilight Sparkle, Element of Harmony and protege of the princess. :raritystarry:

My need for more chapters of this story currently exceeds the materials currently available to me, as such I DEMAND MOAR!!!:flutterrage:

Comment posted by CMC4TW deleted Dec 28th, 2012

Oh my... the things you can find while browsing :rainbowderp:
I'm looking forward to the things to come! :pinkiesmile:

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