A fine fellow by the name of JustAnotherTimeLord said a whole lot of critical words in a few chapters about my story, so I did what I usually do and conscripted him to edit it. (Naw, he offered to. But watch your backs.) He helped me tweak out a whole bunch of little things about it, like at least 300 things, maybe 340. Besides some grammar derps, the scene at the end of A Tree in Canterlot got expanded to hopefully get Sweetie's

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So yeah, the finale sucks. Worse yet, there's no way to improve it.

The entire story was structured around Twilight going back and Sweetie staying. That can't be changed. Not without what amounts to a complete top-to-bottom rewrite.

Sweetie goes back? The CMC lasting to help future-Sweetie? Wouldn't happen. Without that, there's no Apple Crisp, no Spot light, no troupe. The Sweetie-statue? Makes no sense.

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After some thought I've decided to go for less of a sledgehammer approach to altering the chapter.

The changes to look for:
References to 'Sweetie's mother' in the prose replaced with Twilight's name, hopefully to make it a little clearer that Sweetie doesn't quite have it down. She also slips up when she's upset.

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So as more than a few commenters have pointed out, the latest chapter of Three Hundred and Fifty kinda sucked. As I consider it to be the most significant chapter in the story, next to perhaps the ending, this ain't acceptable.

I think I just got too eager to hit those particular scenes/lines and forgot to, you know, properly tell the story. Yeah yeah I know some earlier parts have issues too. I'll fix those eventually.

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