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Jarvy Jared


A writer and musician trying to be decent at both things. Here, you'll find some of my attempts at storytelling!

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Argyle came to us by sea. He brought us his notes, a smile, and an impossible dream.


This story is complete, and will be updated every other day.

Pre-read and edited by Stinium_Ruide, Nailah, and applezombi. Thank you for your help!

Featured on Equestria Daily.

Rated Excellent in Ghost Mike's Ponyfic Review #5.

Recommended by TCC56.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 39 )
Comment posted by TwiFan6789 deleted Jan 31st, 2022

The best story I have read in a long time. A brilliant piece by Jarvy; I love it so much. I'll be sure to talk about your story in more detail in my blog soon!

Excellent start. I will definitely be following this :pinkiesmile:

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And that's how Argyle met Sunny's mother.

Even after only a short time, all these characters feel very well developed. I already dislike Easel more than any of the film's antagonists, haha.

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Yep! My intention was to try and render these characters as well as I could even in only a short amount of words.

I am very curious what Argyle's original plans for these dolls was.

Friendship is a kind of Love... Friendship is Magic.. so Love is..

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Introducing the new tagline to the new show!

I’m in love with these characters already.

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Thank you! I hope you continue to love them as you read the rest of the story. :raritywink:

Dang. This sure was dramatic. Easel let his hatred cloud his mind, and he paid the price. Though even if he had survived, the idiotic bigot would've immediately lost his job and gotten blacklisted. With the figures gone, he would've had no proof.

Wow, you weren't kidding about this being sad. Maple doesn't even end up with Argyle.

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And she never was going to, either. Sometimes characters are just fated to come together and leave each other.

So, one chapter remains?

An absolutely wonderful work from beginning to end.

Excellent work.

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Thank you! This is definitely one of the stories I feel really had a concrete set-up and execution, all throughout the writing process. I'm definitely quite happy with this one. :raritywink:

Maybe I'm just being selfish and maybe it wouldn't have worked well, but I think it would have been interesting to see a full conversation/interaction between these two at the end.
Great work. It didn't always do what I expected it to, but it is no worse for it.

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I think that's a valid consideration. Perhaps it would have been interesting to have Maple and Sunny actually have a dialogue. But I envisioned the whole story as a long tale that Maple herself is telling, largely uninterrupted, so I didn't think changing that would have meshed with the intent.

Aww, that ending being for Sunny is super cute. I particularly love the the ending is done up like the opening of the story. I love the parable framing for the thing, with the idea being that love is a powerful force, both a love for the past and a love for others.

What you said last chapter rings true, sometimes people aren’t meant to be together however their fates may cross, and I feel like Maple is all the better for recovering from it.

I could go more into detail about why I love this story, but I’m on a time crunch, so all I can say is that this is some fantastic work right here.

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Thank you! I'm truly grateful you thoroughly enjoyed this story. If you have the time, I would more than love to hear your extended thoughts about it, but no pressure. :raritywink:

I thought Maple would turn out to be Sunny's mom, though interesting twist that Maple is telling the story to Sunny in the end. Learning the history behind her figures must be rather surprising to her. I am glad Maple got to see first hoof what Argyle was talking about though Sunny's accomplishments.

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. And it provided just a bit more lore to G5. I wonder if we'll see the figures again as we have no idea what happened to them at the end of the movie.

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Unless the series intends to use the figurines as pieces of lore somehow... Well, we'll just have to wait and see. I'm glad you enjoyed my interpretation!

Great characterization throughout for all four main characters without feeling like it's too exposition-y, a fun dynamic to see between Maple and Argyle with the whole romance bit and all, all to also get blindsided by Maple not ending up as Argyle's wife and yet that revelation seems to be swept away so quickly without feeling like it was just thrown out for no reason; I do applaud Maple for being mature to hold herself in during that moment.

I don't have much else to say that hasn't been repeated here, so kudos to something great here! Thank you for the story!

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Thank you so much for this! :raritywink:

One of the beat things ever is when you read the first paragraph of a story and you already have a smile on your face. Your writing is beautiful I'm looking forward to reading more later.

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I hope you enjoy the rest of the story. :raritywink:

RDT

Finally got around to reading this.
Yes, I liked the story. More than that, I've always loved the style of fairy tales in modern literary perspective, so seeing another one is always appreciated. Not any author can pull it off.

Perhaps one little thing I could have seen more of was descriptions, fantastic or realistic, of the carving and painting process. Blasphemy, history, fantasy, and hope, all rolled into six little figurines.

The deaths were perhaps a little... deus ex machina. But maybe that's just a consequence of the genre. It's also interesting to consider Easel as a character, filled with the incel-y attitude.

But I digress. I liked this story, and it certainly lived up to it's name of 'parable'.

It takes a very deft hand to get me to appreciate a story with a sad, or bittersweet ending, but you've managed that quite nicely here!

I will admit that I am a terrible reviewer, so I'll just put down some of the thoughts I had while reading.

Very nice touch, giving Argyle's boat black sails at the end. Also, I really appreciate minimalistic world-building, and "Ponyville Badlands" does that nicely. Argyle's character was very well drawn despite him not being the focus of the story. Choosing first person for Maple is absolutely the right way to go. Despite this being very much a fable in tone, it is still a very personal story for her. The story is also a nice match for the feel of the world at the opening of the movie. Superficially bright and pleasant, but grounded in a very damaged world.

And... that's all I can think of at the moment. Excellent work, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff!

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Thank you! :raritywink: I'm glad you enjoyed this story, and I hope you also enjoy my other work, should you choose to read them.

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Just started the next one, and I have to say, I love the nod to Italo Calvino in the chapter names! :pinkiehappy:

Why is "The Cutie Mark Crusaders vs The Cuban Missile Crisis" (by me) in also liked, the premises are vastly different

Like one is a serious story with an actual plot and the other one is pure comedy with no plot
whatsoever and your mom jokes padding out half the word count

Sunny is hearing about this in hindsight--after magic is returned and Maple is at last vindicated--makes this touching and adds a little happiness to an otherwise tragic ending.

Argyle mentioning his daughter (and crushing Maple's intentions) was perfectly subtle. One line of dialog and everything changes course and they part ways. Some people you meet for only a moment and then they slip away, changing your life forever. That just happens sometimes. :applejackunsure:

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Something I really tried to convey with this story is the splendor of the moment and my belief that there is not really much of a difference between mundanity and momentous occasion. A chance meeting here is just as interesting as the work of cleaning and setting a shop up.

Life can be romantic, even, or especially, in plainclothes form. More often it chances to skip by us - so we should treasure the things that come our way, good and bad, because by these things is life weighed in sum rather than in half measure. As most people do not live, nor need to live, lives of epic proportion, I find it is comforting to think that the ordinary is, itself, extraordinary.

I'm glad you enjoyed my fairy tale! :raritywink:

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