• Member Since 5th May, 2015
  • offline last seen February 28th

Jarvy Jared

Just a guy learning to write, one word after another.



Twilight is in a room. There is a golden hammer and a cup of water. She must choose between the two.

By the end of this test, an unlikely lesson will be learned.

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“I’ll go get the Elements of Harmony—”

Do you even watch the show? Because I don't think you do

6229571 My mistake! Going to fix that...

Luna let out a relieved breath. “You disguised myself as my sister.”

should that really be like that? id say "yourself" fits a bit better.

Huh, I can't believe I never thought of that. I always over complicate and over think everything.

Wow, this was a deep slice of life story which doesn't need to be overly dramatic. Your writing skills are amazing :coolphoto:

6244917 Thank you very much for your feedback! :twilightsmile:

6245514 I loved how you described each choice and the possible outcome of that choice. Your a great writer :raritystarry:

Well, this actually teaches quite a deep lesson:

...too much realism can hinder and alter judgement.

And you even managed to include a bit of comedy in it. All in all, that was a good short story.

I am legitimately questioning myself why this hasn't had any more heat than what it already has, this has been thoroughly enjoyable and completely believable, it should have more likes than that.

I decided to review it this here would be my first reveiw have so he link

You really have to share this story to a lot of people. It's a very well-thought out and original story, touching upon the character dynamic of the most powerful characters in Equestria!

That's something very difficult to do.

Eh, I thought the answer was literally going to be "one." After all, the instructions were "Choose one." :twistnerd:
Good read for sure. I know I definitely overthink matters much like this.

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