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Venerable Ro


Have you tried setting it on fire?

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In the magical land of Equestria the borders are kept by the watchful eyes of the fourth tribe. Evergreen Hold, one village among many, guards the endless forests along Equestria's southwest border. But lately something new has crept into the forest, it seems there is a change in the air...

Many thanks to Destiny Chaser and Comma Typer for their encouragement, and to ClockworkMage for his gracious help in editing this. Any errors that remain exist by my own efforts.

Cover art generously provided by Comma Typer.

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Comments ( 26 )

I helped pre-red this. It's genuinely one of the better stories I have read, not just on FiMFic, but at any point in my life. That's not a small thing. I have a Masters Degree, minored in Creative Writing. I have read so many stories they blur together at times. This is good. So good I don't want to spoil a damn thing for anyone, but please do read it.

This is the kind of life I'd like to have mine look like in slice form.

Like, day to day reality in a world fundamentally not our own.
But with ponies!
Well, changebugs...

For a first submission, this is pretty damn good. Keep 'em coming, Ro.

Amazing, human in Equestria with an almost Tolkien - Lord of the rings vibe, old Equestria rise of Nightmare Moon timeline, with a younger less bitter Queen Chrysalis. I love it thumbs up and favorite for me.

Sadly I am unfamiliar with the word "Aiet" and several attempts to look it up have proven unsuccessful. What does it even mean?

This is one of those stories that I will come back to to read and reread, such charm and wit and beauty of soul. Magnifique.
So glad that you decide to publish this my friend, God bless!

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'Aiet'
From the Dune series. A declaration of grief and anguish of tragedy that simply is, though one wish it not.

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Thanks for your help Meep!

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High praise indeed coming from you, I'm very glad you liked it!

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Thanks again for the editing, it was a pleasure to work with you. Hope to have another story in the works soon.

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I'll try to!

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Yup, that's the one. It tends to come up a lot in my writing, one of the benefits of being well-read is that you'll pick up all sorts of nifty little terms. Glad you both liked the story!

Oh my god... That was so BUT so beautiful!

For a first properly finished/published fic this get's a 9/10 for excellence. It would be higher, but then, just as I told a featured story today, there'd need to be more.

Nadus #12 · 1 week ago · · ·

Reads like a fairy tale. I like it.

Amazing piece, Ro. It had me reading rapt; you'd be hard pressed to find someone who'd put this down.

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I'm glad you liked it!

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High marks indeed! I'd thought about making it longer, but the plot of this particular story wound up being pretty compact. And once I got to the ending, well, the ending's the ending, you know?

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That was the goal, glad that came through!

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Just what any author wants to hear, thank you!

Needed more hiding things in barrels. <__<

This was great; the changelings as playful fae is just a lovely idea. :pinkiehappy:

Reese #16 · 1 week ago · · ·

Well, that was both nice and interesting, I thought! Thank you for writing. :)

(A question I'm wondering about, though; I hope you don't mind me asking:
How did the rangers get to far-off Everfree what seemed to be so quickly? By whatever method the word too travelled fast, some sort of magic?)

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Glad you liked it! Changeling faeries were a natural progression from the original thought, which was passive love-collection aided by deliberate "cultivation" or lightening the mood. Once I had that thought the next idea was pranks and trickery, and from there the whole theme of faery was just a breath away. It all goes much smoother when "mom" isn't an embittered old nag...


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This world's thick with what you might call "reasonably applied magic", which is a very powerful thing indeed. Emergency use of bottled dragon-fire sent the messages out, the muster converged on various pre-arranged gathering points, and liberal use of cloud-walking spells ferried groups the rest of the way on specially-managed cloud constructs. Excellent time made in exchange for outrageous expenditure of resources.

Everyone had to walk back though...

Reese #18 · 1 week ago · · ·

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Ah, thanks. :)

Nice sense of world building, and good pacing. Overall, the story feels like a unique twist on the Changeling's abilities and desires. It would make sense for them to eat to essentially farm love i a community away from ponies, and making the citizens feel comfortable with them first with gifts and misunderstood attempts to help were both really well written and cute.

A charming little story and a great pace. I'm surprised this is your first story on the site. This is a testament to the potential you have for other stories if you ever decide to publish another one.

A Ro story at last! And a lovely one as well. Excellent fable, and a far happier one than many that deal with mysterious forest folk and broken promises thereunto. Thank you for it. Here's to many more!

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Thanks for the read! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I certainly hope to write more things in the future. Yes, Changelings are doing their best, but they don't always get "helpful" on the first pass.


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Well the devil's in the details when it comes to promises, certainly Halvard had a better excuse than Psyche, and Chrysalis was more than willing to forgive him when all was said and done.

Razzy #23 · 1 week ago · · ·

Huh, great first story. This world begs to be explored further.

At least the lings are trying tu help! Even if they clearly know next to nothing about how to do that.

Well this was quite unexpected. I've never checked admittedly but I somehow got the impression that you'd never posted a story, not on this site anyway. I figured you were the type content to simply read.

It's a nice surprise though, and the story was interesting. I'm not sure if it's what you were going for but it almost reads like a classic fairytale.

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It's a new development, and I really was trying for that classic fairytale. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Seeing as how it was your story that inspired me to make an account in the first place for the purposes of commentary, we've rather come full circle, no? Funny that...

This was lovely! Everything felt like it fit in naturally, you introduced things very well. Definitely hit the fairytale feel. If you ever decided to release more bits in the future they would sure be welcomed!

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