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Jinzou


I have been known to write smol horse words on occasion.

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This story is a sequel to Anamnesis


It's funny how, in a split second, a time of fun and excitement can become one of horror and loss. A lesson learned, perhaps harshly, by Apple Bloom.

Now crippled and in a world of emotional hurt, will she be able to accept herself for who she is?

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This is set before Crusaders of the Lost Mark.

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Cover art drawn by Pabbley

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Featured October 4th, 2020! Thank you all!

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 610 )

Was this inspired by A Story to Relate To? Also, do you think it’s worth making a “disability AU” group?

There are a lot of paragraphs with linebreaks in the middle of sentences in the first half of this chapter, such as here:

I‌ ‌seemed‌ ‌to‌ ‌be‌ ‌stuck‌ ‌in‌ ‌some‌ ‌sort‌ ‌of‌ ‌wooden‌ ‌box‌ ‌from‌ ‌the‌ ‌waist‌ ‌down.‌ ‌Well,‌ ‌the‌ ‌sides‌ ‌were‌ ‌
definitely‌ ‌wooden,‌ ‌the‌ ‌part‌ ‌in‌ ‌front‌ ‌of‌ ‌me‌ ‌seemed‌ ‌to‌ ‌be‌ ‌covered‌ ‌in‌ ‌some‌ ‌dark‌ ‌red‌ ‌liquid.‌ ‌With‌ ‌
another‌ ‌look‌ ‌I‌ ‌noticed‌ ‌that‌ ‌I‌ ‌was‌ ‌also‌ ‌covered‌ ‌in‌ ‌some‌ ‌dark‌ ‌red‌ ‌liquid.‌ ‌ ‌

I assume it’s a side-effect of copy-pasting it from a word processor, but it doesn’t look good. (Also, ending two sentences in a row with the same words looks clunky. Maybe it would look better if you emphasised the “I”?)

Let's be 100% honest here. This is totally the adults fault. Anypony who says otherwise, deserves to get their asses kicked. No I'm not sorry either.

"APPLEJACK!" I screamed, swatting her hoof off my shoulder. "SHUT YER LUNA-DAMNED MOUTH FOR ONE SECOND!"

In Canterlot, Luna has a sudden urge to murder Applejack in the most painful way she can think of. But doesn't know why.

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I have literally no idea what you're talking about in regards to the story, but I think the disability AU would be cool.

The line breaks are so often because I can't write.

Also I'll fix that.

10463490
No, you're right. The adults were being stupid as hell in that episode.

Better hold Luna off. If AJ gets murdered, a lot of conflict in this story dies. :applecry:

Interesting, This is a nice idea. Great job!

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Thanks!

Hey, if you like it, stick around! I'll be releasing a chapter a day till it's done! And it gets better from here.

I’ve never thought about Apple Bloom getting angry at Applejack, but it fits with her character. She’s the most vocal and blunt crusader, so of course she’d be upfront about her feelings.

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She's proven to easily get stuck in her feelings, and in this situation, who can blame her?

That's quite a realistic approach you took here. I always thought they were very lucky to have this survived mostly unharmed. I read a similar story once but that was never finished.

And I can understand Apple Bloom from a personal experience, although not directly

Excited for next chapter.

I'm feely sorry for applebloom

10463505
Will Apple bloom still get her cutie mark?

I really hope Applebloom doesn’t just forgive AJ after a few chapters, this is a serious situation. It also implys that while AJ trys not to lie to others, she might try to lie to herself. Or at least leave out certain truths, her actions crippled her baby sister likely for life, but she was instead focused on her surviving. Like the fact shes dead from the waist down didn’t even matter. I think it might be best if AJ makes herself scarce for awhile, but at the same time I don’t think she will. I can’t imagine being in the same house with her will help Appleblooms mood either, maybe she or AJ should stay somewhere else for a few.... months?.... years.... I also hope that Rainbow and Rarity get some share of the blame too, they did help ruin the race, maybe even end it for good because of their actions.

You really have a solid premise going for yourself in this story. I'm gonna assume that Applejack is gonna be facing criminal charges for what happened here. We can add three charges of child endangerment for each one of the CMC that were injured. To an extent, Rarity and Rainbow can be charged with it too since they're accessories to the accident. We can most likely also throw in reckless driving and endangerment to other ponies with what they used in the race. Whatever happens, I feel AJ has a lot of soul searching to do; especially after she pretty much let Pear and Bright down with failing to consider her sister's safety over traditions.

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A load road it be, I not sure what will happen now, but i do hope the Three so called Adults face punishment, AppleJack already facing the worst of it.
It may be years before she even give her a chance.

Someone call CPS.

Applejack, wait. You're supposed to cry on the inside. INSIDE!!! :raritycry:

I know I am going to get some dislikes but, that image... it doesn't show how its holding up her back half and only leads me to think of butt plug.

10463841
Don't call FPS. That implies Granny and Big Mac need to be punished as bad as Applejack. Those two are innocent.

10463586
Well this story is already finished, I'm just releasing a chapter a day. :twilightsmile:

And I'm sorry to hear you can relate. I hope things are going well for you.


10463612
Should be out 24 hours after the first one!


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:applecry:


10463620
Mm, not in the main story. Epilogue or after, who knows? :raritywink:


10463650
Oh trust me, AJ isn't gonna get forgiven for a loooong time. AB's hatred for AJ is a theme that goes throughout the whole story.


10463729
I didn't really go the court route, but I think you may still be happy with what I did with her in the end.


10463845
:applecry:

I mean I'm not a crier, but I'd also probably cry in this situation.


10463864
I'm sorry, but that comment plus your profile pic are a hilarious combination. And the in-story wheelchair is different, I just maybe wasn't the best at communication while commissioning this.

10463940
Hm, I was studying this and I guess I just went off the human spine, then. Never occured to me that horses may be different.

I'll fix this. Thanks!

10463933
That's good! The story I mentioned, if I may say, was about Noi, who became incontinent through a surgery going wrong.

And me, was born too early, thus my left hand is crippled since birth. So not directly as AB, but I can understand such change. Though, I am doing well, adapting with my hand. To the point, I can do things better with one hand, then my parents can with 2

10463960
Hell yeah, bro. Adapt and overcome and all that.

10463960
Can i get a link to that story? It might no the have been finished but hopefully o can get enough.

Oh my Celestia... three chapters in and already this story has earned its spot in my favorites. Fantastic writing, I could feel Apple Bloom's rage in this chapter, and it was definitely powerful.

10464121
So glad you liked it! Next chapter will pop up tomorrow!

my mood after reading: :fluttercry:

I feel bad when for Apple Bloom I hope he and applejack make up

10463933
Interesting. How many chapters is this story?

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She may. She may not. We'll just have to find out, won't we?


10464284
Main story is 11 chapters, and there'll be a 1 chapter epilogue.

Applebloom doesn't mean shes just upset i know i would be

Holy shit that last chapter was intense. Wow... just. Wow. This story is amazing so far, I can't wait to see where it's going! Also, I feel like this story gives this emoji a purpose. :applecry:

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It gets more emotional and raw. If I may say so myself, I think the final chapter is the biggest emotional punch in the gut I've ever written. I'm pretty proud of it.

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I'm sure anyone would be. There's a difference between a mistake and a fuck up, what happened to Applebloom was a major fuck up by someone she trusted most. I wouldn't be angry, I'd be livid, and I'd make sure they never forget, I'd make sure they fall further than I do.

10464493
Fair enough but i myself am not that vindictive

10464511
I'm more spiteful than anything tbh.

Is it another scootacripple (in this case, ABcripple) fic, or something worthy?

10464631
I'm not just gonna endlessly beat down on her and have somebody else swoop in and solve everything, if that's what you're asking.

Can you be more specific?

10464633
Oh, that's a relief. I'll read it then, thanks!

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