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The Cutie Mark Crusaders know that Babs Seed was bullied back in Manehatten, but how bad could things really have been? And how does Babs feel about returning to the city and the ponies who have hurt her the most?

(Note: to avoid confusion, the first few chapters of this story deal with past events that occurred before "One Bad Apple". I will add an Author's Note to the chapter that begins the "present" state of events and continues forward from there.)

Followed by Sweet Apple Anthology and Severed Roots.

Now with a TVTropes page! Thanks to vren55 for putting it up!

Rated Teen for some violence, language, and darker elements.

Chapters (26)
Comments ( 1344 )

Haven't read it yet, but will do so later - I love Babs. *hugs her*

:twilightsmile::pinkiehappy: I'm liking this story already

Yes! I was waiting for someone to do something like this. I am now much more glad I decided to follow you. I was expecting great things from you, and I was totally right.

Have my like!

I'll add this to read later. Looks promising :raritywink:

Squee! This story is absolutely astonishing!

Keel going!

Yay Turner to the rescue! Also this chapter was just fablous:raritystarry:

This story is amazing.

I shall put this on my "Read Later" list!

'Tis always good to see a fic about the newest Crusader. And so far, this one seems to be the best.:twilightsmile:

:pinkiegasp: new chapter?! :pinkiehappy: YAY!
Citrus Blossom is nice also this story is awesome! Keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

Thanks everypony for the comments, views, and votes so far! I really am enjoying writing this. :scootangel: Be advised, though, I intend on this one being a long one, and I was only able to churn out four chapters because this is one of my days off. Updates may be a little slower until Tuesday rolls around again. :rainbowwild:

I'm glad I'm getting a lot of positive feedback...good to know other ponies like Babs Seed too!

Good, very good, not what I expected. So congrats! I'm featuring you on my page! (That sounded a lot better in my head)

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Thank you! :pinkiehappy:

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I thought "Kinky Pie" was a pretty awesome username too. :trollestia:

Babs Seed is best CMC ever since her first appearance. She also replaces Dash as the PF2 Scout, if any of ya get it.:scootangel:

:scootangel:that was amazing, please keep writing

Looks interesting, will read later!:scootangel:

I likes dis. 1748664 She will eat all our hay sanwiches!

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First thought when I heard her voice: "She is the new Scout, now I just need to wait on the pics and fanfics."

This story is awesome! :twilightsmile: can't wait for more!!! :moustache:

Oh, Celestia, the name Gray Hoof...doesn't help that I already finished Story of the Blanks before reading this...that aside, this fic is turning out to be quite interesting. Tracked and voted up. Keep up the good work!

Already striking me as a liiiiittle overdone. This is MLP, not Micky Spillane.

I liked this story so far. Although I have two complaints. 1) Babs Seed is on the cover of this story, and yet she was only mentioned once. Will we hear more of her? And 2) the description does not do this story justice. I thought it was going to be a mediocre story, but it was much better than that. I was pleasantly shocked at the wonderful language used in the beginning, and the description of Manehattan just blew me away. Well done, and I hope to see more! :pinkiehappy:

minor point:

"Youse" , while being New York slang, has a specific meaning--- it's mostly used when addressing a group of people. Similar to "You all."

:rainbowderp: Wait...

:pinkiegasp: GREY HOOF?!?!?!

:applecry: PLZ NOT BABS

Chapters named after Judas Priest songs? My attention is caught.

Ever since the new episode I've been waiting for a fic like this; a story of Babs' life in Manehattan prior to the events of One Bad Apple, and I love it! :pinkiehappy:

:heart: Please continue sir/madam! :heart:

A blood-red colt with a mane black as night,

I might like your story, but I can't forgive you for that.

AT BASE MINIMUM, it's not an Alicorn. For that, you receive exactly one mustache.
:moustache:

It's a good story so far. I like it.

>> Bad_Seed_72
"Viddy well, little brother. Viddy well."-Alex

It deeply saddens me that the system I am using at this moment cannot activate the watch button. I will do so at my earliest convienence.

It is about to go down.

I know, you can take a page from Pinkie Pie's book and lug an ufeasibly large weapon around with you everywhere you go.

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Read the other three chapters.. the attention shifts back to Babs. :pinkiehappy:

Murderahs, that's what I think is up in here.

I don't know how or why but this song makes reading this story better. For me at least.

And then this.

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I had no idea who Mickey Spillane was. Thanks for mentioning him... Now I have a new author to read! :)

I agree, this story is a lot darker than the canon will be (and I hope the canon stays nice and happy). I also didn't know that about "youze"; I've always heard it as a substitute for "you". Forgive me and my West-Coastness, lol.

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Heh, no alicorns here. Nor will there be.:moustache:

I was hoping to see good stories with Babs and I was not dissapointed. I really warmed up to her, having been bullied myself.

Uh, I want you (the author) to realize that in the show, they literally pointed out TWICE that it was only teasing. Kind of like with the CMC.
That's all it is. Mindless teasing.

This story is brilliant. I live in New York City, and I know what it's like out there. Hell, I was in the same position as Babs Seed. Sure, the accents and slang are downright stereotypical, but it gives folks such a better understanding of the story. I'm giving you props, I feel like this is my own story.

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That is very true. I love "One Bad Apple"...my favorite episode of Season 3 so far. :pinkiehappy:

Trust me, I don't even pretend that this story is even light-years close to canon. Manehatten in the show canon is probably a very nice place to live.

But, to play a little devil's advocate here, Applejack knew about Babs Seed being teased because somepony else--maybe Babs' sister or her parents--told Applejack about it. That pony who knew could have been told of the teasing by Babs, by a teacher, another foal, etc. We don't know.

This will be addressed in a further chapter, but in this story, Babs only tells her sister/family what she wants to tell them. It isn't necessarily the full truth.

Thank you for the feedback though. :twilightsmile:

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Thanks, Spalding! I'm sorry you had to go through such an experience. I actually had some run-ins with gangs in my hometown growing up, but nothing, nothing like New York City. Hope everything's going good for you now. :raritywink:

It's good, but they're accents strike me more as drunken cockney Brits.

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