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The Delirium


I've always enjoyed reading other great fan fictions and I've always had great ideas for ones of my own. Now I write to share those ides with every other fan of mlp,

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Almost right after Applejack finished her apple bucking for the day, a heavy downpour washes over Ponyville. On her way back to there farmhouse, Applejack finds an odd looking colt who's all alone and is critically injured. After bringing him with her to the farmhouse in order to treat his wounds, Applejack and the rest of the Apples allow the colt to stay with them until they know what to do with them.

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 11 )

I'm looking forward to more of this. :twilightsmile:

A good first chapter and I can't wait for the next one

Whoever disliked this is a trud because its good extremely good

A good start to a story. I did catch two mistakes though.

The clouds had blocked out the son, making the orchards pitch black, but every so soften a lightning bolt would illuminate them.

"Sure are. How's our little friend doin?"

"What did he tell ya!?"

It seems a bit weird that AJ would shout like that. Good chapter though. I look forward to the next one! By the way, just a guess, but Nero's half zebra, isn't he?

What you think this is, Sweet Apple Orphanage? :ajbemused:

:kicks him to the curb:

It was Short but it was sweet nice job

The story has a good premise and concept, but the pacing and writing isn't very good. I am still interested in where this is going though.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

Short and sweet.

Good work, my good man. :moustache:

I like it. I was just surprised when Granny Smith caught his lie and he immediately gave her the whole truth, without even hesitating. :pinkiesmile:

found this one for ya.
Did her answer em?" [ he ]

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