"We were so used to them wreaking havoc and walking away from the most ridiculous wreckages that it was easy to forget they weren't invincible. Fate was a cruel mistress to take one of them from us at such a young age...
I was fortunate, but somepony close to me was not. It was hard for me to imagine the loss she felt. It was so difficult. I wish there was more I could have done to comfort her, but my attention was focused elsewhere. Sweetie Belle lost one of her closest friends and she needed me to guide her through the grief and chase away the occasional nightmare. I devoted so much of my time to her that I dared not acknowledge the plague of strange happenings that fell upon Ponyville soon after the accident.
I was such a foolish mare..."
with only 3 likes, how is this on the top ten all time?
regardless, i really enjoyed your work here.
nevermind on my last post. was remembering the last story i read. either way. this is good.
Okay......you have my attention.
Wow... just wow. It was really amazing, I could almost feel all these emotions. That last scene is truly heartbreaking.
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Thank you very much. The feels were meant to be strong with this one.
Ooooohhhhhh.....There's a bad moon on the rise, allrighty.......and it's got three apples on its haunches.........
I'm trying to picture a fatal carriage accident, with the carriages pulled by ponies. It's not working.
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Ponies (horses) are powerful creatures, my friend.
Imagine a small carriage of only two ponies (Applejack's parents) being stampeded by a taxi drawn by twice as many ponies, especially if they didn't have time to brace themselves for the collision. It wouldn't be pretty.
God, I love the execution of this chapter. It has really tugged at the strings in me.
My god this story was done right. Why do I feel like fangirling all over this story right now?
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Wow, thanks! I really appreciate the compliment!
5396199 Oh no, thank you for being so good at you do. I couldn't have asked for such a better time to run into you and your story.
Well, we have something of an antagonist here. Perhaps whatever dark spirit that menaces the others will feed off of Applejack's misplaced rage.
Wow. This is perfect. Can't wait to read more!
Stories like this are why I'm glad we see so few children in the ER where I work, and what ones we do see are generally just mild illnesses and injuries.
Shit's going down
Great. A villain team-up with Spoiled Rich. Nice one, Applecrackaddict.
Oh god. I do not see a bright ending ahead for this.
Yes, please, more!
Really enjoyable read
Oh well now that's not a good thing...
Oh lord, the Alicorn Amulet...
Things are gonna get interesting from now on.
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Nice surprise to see a new chapter
Enjoyed it
That was increadibly depresing though listning to this definetly didn't help
Ah, horseappales...I smell a family reunion next chapter.
Uh, yeah, no, I don't think so. You can't really tell me that's the end, right?
should be know
Convention of the genre "You don't see a body they ain't really dead -and they WILL be back"
Eh, could really use an epilogue. I'll leave it unrated until then.
Poor AJ
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Oh boy...
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Oh wow, Applejack is really losing it now
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You know, I can definitely see something like this happening, given that they are ponies and all
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You know, for some reason, I can definitely see Spoiled Rich doing that
The truth is that what happened was an accident, and that Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo are not to blame, but you can’t seem to accept that
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EXACTLY!!!
Oh so you’re saying you’d have all three of them die Applejack? Is that it?
You do that and the only justice your going to get is justice brought down upon you
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Took the words right out of my mouth RD
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Alright, Applejack has officially crossed the line
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Oh crap
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We’ll see Rarity...we’ll see
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Oh no...
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Oh come on
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ICR who said "Some stories leave room for a sequel. Other stories leave a hole the size of a sequel."
This is one of them
That’s quite an ending. Quite the story, as a matter of fact. I can’t say I can fully picture Applejack doing such things, but I can certainly imagine it more than Rarity or Rainbow Dash, what with her bullheadedness and history of not listening to her friends or family, as well as the ability to pull the wool over her own eyes. Still, it’s kinda tough seeing her go down this path, but... well, grief can make monsters of good people.
A lot of people probably see it differently, but I rather admire the ending. I’m not sure I’d go as far as liking it. It could use some more interaction, some dialogue, something like that. You could probably find a way to deliver that wham line with more wham and making it feel more like an ending, but I do appreciate part of what it seems to convey. Applejack left the Amulet behind; to me, that signifies that she’s starting to move past her revenge plot, leaving it behind. I see an open end that also has a hint of hope for the future.
Maybe that’s just me, though.
You have talent, my friend.
I truly hope to see you write more in the future 🤗