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Apple Bloom has every reason in the world to be happy, so why is she so miserable?

This is a story of how mental illness can strike anyone, anywhere, anytime, no matter how good a life a person has, and it's devastating consequences.

This is my first fim fiction.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 72 )

fair attempt, nothing overtly bad, just lacking in substance, but for a first piece it could be given some credit :unsuresweetie:

its not that bad ! :rainbowlaugh: no really :ajbemused: its good for a start ! :raritywink:

I beg you continue this! It was over before I knew it. I was gripped from that first genius use of poetry as a portal into Apple Bloom's soul.

I really enjoy the concept of using mental illness in narrative. In my own fic,What's Really the Most Important. I've been building Scootaloo as suffering from an anxiety disorder. Anyways, this was very sad to read through, even if I found myself unable to stop until I hit the end like a brick wall. I'm worried that all of these different medications Bloom keeps getting changed to are going to play a factor in her mental illness continuing to spiral out of control.

My cousin had a stable case of bipolar disorder and schizophrenia, but rapid changes in his medication weakened him mentally and he had a total psychotic breakdown in the 90's. He'll never be the same man I knew in my childhood, and he continues to slip further down an awful path to something resembling dementia. He's a very ambitious man who dreams of reclaiming his life, but he requires constant supervision and care. It's incredible how the greatest organ all living beings have can be the greatest weapon against their own well-being. I fear that Apple Bloom may not make it in the end :applecry:

This was worth an upvote, fave, and watch. I look forward to more from you.

2489790 Thank you. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and sorry to hear about your cousin. I'll have to read What's Really the Most Important. I haven't gotten around to it yet.

I'm not sure how this fic will end yet. I've mostly been taking one chapter at a time. I don't even know how long this story will end up being.

Awesome, a new chapter! I'll get to sleep... eventually.

I love the upswing in Apple Bloom's fortune. I've got a bad feeling this respite is only temporary, but it'll probably do enormous good to Bloom's psyche. :heart:

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Well, I'm hardly in a position to tell you (IE I have no idea what is planned), but this could very well be temporary.

Somebody with bipolar will often live in extremes. I often think that maybe RD has it, but that's another subject for another time. She might be so happy, that she thinks she loves him when she doesn't.

Who knows?

Interesting story. I'll have to track this

Don't like the taste of beer, Apple Bloom? That ain't right!

Barney's trouble? Well, if he hurts her, I'll be bustin' some kneecaps.

not my kind of story yet i found it well made even though i do not understand the 300 words chapter that usually discourages people from reading.

still thumb up keep writing

Out with the trash, Bloom!

Wonder if Barney will pop up again?

I can associate with how suddenly and devastatingly mental illness can strike, after my grandmother was hospitalised with a severe case of depression when I was a teenager. She's still alive, but she's nothing like how I knew her when I was a kid. Recently my sister was diagnosed with depression, and my uncle was diagnosed three years ago

Again, you mange to handle a touchy subject well.

However, we still ha our little flaw of the hyper short chapters. You should work on expanding these, since your writing is capable and the poems you've written are actually very very good (apparently you did write them yourself and didn't go the lazy route and just copy paste some other poem. Respect)

So, I will fave and like this story, and I hope all ends well for Apple Bloom.

2525221 I'll try to make the chapters longer, I know I'm bad about that. Yes I did actually write all these poems myself.

Thanks for the nice compliment and the fave and like. :twilightsmile:

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I hope you won't mind if I use one of these poems for a project... will you?

2526026 As long as you give me credit for the poem, that's fine.

WoW! Ooh, as a lover of poetry, I can feel Applebloom's pain just pouring/seeping through the words. Truly heartwrenching first chapter. :fluttercry:

Writing her heart down into her journal/diary is at least a real good thing for her to do. However, keeping all that pain and sorrow in her, I just have a sinking and bad feeling something bad is going to happen. I truly hope not though. :pinkiesad2:

:fluttercry: Aww..truly heartwrenching, yet beautifully touching with Applejack promising her little sister to be there for her and help her. Great strength Applebloom it took her to finally tell Applejack.

Cliffhanger! :pinkiegasp: Haunting one too. Indeed, first the illness/problem is solved, a solution is found, but now still the long road to full recovery begins now. :fluttercry:

C'mon Applebloom, you have to fight the monster inside you. You cannot let him/her defeat you. You can do it! :yay: This story is real good, and I can relate to this, because I have a family member that had been diagnosed with Bi-polar.

Ooh, I can feel these poems so strongly. I feel for Applebloom so much in this story. She just needs to keep fighting the monster within her and never let him win! :flutterrage:

No,no,no please Applebloom, NO! :pinkiegasp: Wow! Her poetry reminds me of the legend of dark poetry, Edgar Allan Poe.

This story is so hard-hitting and so much reality is in it, and it is just so good. I hope her poetry will keep helping her release her emotions, because if she dare stops, that I believe will truly be the end. Poetry, or any kind of art is the perfect outlet to release one's soul. :fluttercry:

I am happy for Applebloom in finding a good coltfriend in Barney and also in Storm Cloud. However, I agree with 2490198 That ending kind of sets me on edge. :twilightoops:

Too much of a good thing always turn out to become real bad. :pinkiegasp:

Good for you Applebloom! :yay: Tossing that no good low darn colt to the side where he belongs. Hopefully he is gone for good.:flutterrage:

A sequel!!!!:pinkiegasp:
I love your stores bro
they are so true, I cant wait.

Aww.. finally Applebloom have defeated that monster that for a long time has been tormenting her, she has gotten better with a good and liable medication, and found true love in a colt, Bright Heart. :yay: Oh, I can't wait for the sequel. :pinkiehappy:

Oh, gosh. :pinkiegasp: Going to start reading it right now.

I have to go air out my keyboard now I cried into it:raritycry:

Sleep, who needs sleep. Eye twitch:pinkiecrazy:

Whelp, If Barney DOES hurt her, there will be blood tonight!! :flutterrage:

During the first part of this story, this song kept playing in my head:
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Great job, I loved this story! :pinkiehappy::scootangel:

Edit: This song is more fitting.

OH THERE WILL BE BLOOD IF BARNEY HURTS HER!!! D:<

We very much like this concept, thou hast excellent insight and good writing style. We very much approve.

This story is just wonderful. It might as well have been a copy of my life written as a fic.

I thought the falling in love was quite abrupt, but it's such a sweet story, it doesn't even matter! Looking forward to the sequel!

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Not back yet, but will be in 15 hours or so! Just winding down now, so I'm catching up on my.ponyfics, and you've been keeping me entertained for the last two hours!

I like it when people can evenly spread feels-inducing moments between two short chapters. Plus, I can relate to this story ^^:pinkiesad2:

I have depression, and there is no cure. Since I was 17 I've been on some sort of antidepressant. And at age 20 I was diagnosed with Asperger Syndrome, a mild form of Autism. So yeah, I can related to some extent to what's going on.

2612286 Depends on what kind of depression it is. Some types can be cured over time.

After she was home a couple of days, Blossom was delighted to go outside and see Barney waiting for her.

I'm gonna guess that should be Apple Bloom, right? I'm surprised nobody else seemed to notice this.

2612397 You're welcome. Gotta look after my fellow writers :raritywink:

2612397
LOL When you wrote Blossom, were you watching the Powerpuff Girls? :pinkiehappy:

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