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It was dark. Somewhere, beyond the cave, beyond her cage, it was raining. And the tide was coming in.
Content warning: implied past sexual abuse
Thank you to The Legendary Bill Cipher, Zontan, Lofty, Red Parade, Krazy, themoontonite, and Dioxin for their help with prereading and editing.
Written for a Quills and Sofa Speedwriting Group panic fiction contest, with the prompt "A martyr, a witness, and a cage". Feel free to join us on Discord here, we have a good time.
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It was a great contest, and this was a great entry! Great writing!
Oh no.
Despite the ultimate outcome our main character faces for this, I still found it satisfying. Even if it was only for a moment.
I guessed correctly who our main character was when she mentioned sisters, but it didn't cheapen the story for me at all. I love the way the end calls back to the beginning. This is a really good story, Silent.
It's a good story, Whisper. But you're fired for hitting me in the feels.
Well, Whisper knows how to kick you solidly in the emotions.
-Chessie
Hm, an interesting story, aye; thanks for writing.
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I sure do!
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Thanks! It was a pretty fun contest.
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Thanks, wish. Your feedback always makes me smile!
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I tend to do that, on occasion. Strange, I'm usually the one firing everyone else for this...
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Thank you for reading, and for leaving a comment!
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Heh, quite a bit easier than your side of things, but you're welcome. :)
Wow Silent, this is some seriously remarkable stuff.
The bleak, wet darkness is so well conveyed. I love how you subtly you tell the backstory. Nothing more is said than needs to be, to imply awful, awful things and do it so poetically... it's breathtaking honestly.
My aching limbs shivered at the touch of the first trickle of seawater as it rose to greet me, as gentle as Sonata’s lover should have been.
This line is exemplary of this in particular.
You should be seriously proud of this, its a stunning piece of work
Really enjoyed reading. It's bleak, dark, but oddly enough there is a strong current of hope too.
"A society grows great when we plant trees whose shade we know we shall never sit in."
Thanks for writing
Damn. Damn this is good. The atmosphere is powerful here.
The atmosphere of this story is very chilling though I wonder which alicorn was that. Celestias? Luna?
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You were correct the first time, it's Celestia.
Although I’m a little confused this still hit me hard.
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Do you need anything explained? I don't mind! I know sometimes I can be a bit too subtle (it's a struggle every writer has, and I can't expect everyone to read my mind!)
She said her name is adagio right? Is this the same adagio from rainbow rocks?
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It sure is! This of this as a sort of origin story
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So, how did they become sirens?
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Presumably through this process, if you don't want to take the ending as her actually dying; you could make the argument that she transformed, instead. I left it open-ended. Or you can take the entire thing as an AU.
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What about her sisters?
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Did you read the story? They went through the same thing.
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I did read the story I just thought their dead bodies were in the cage with her.
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That's... not what I intended, but I like the creepiness of that mental image, thank you!
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Your welcome, and sorry about putting that image in your head.
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Hey, I don't mind! I didn't even think about that, it's a different but still creepy point of view about the story!
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Oh cool
Your story has been reviewed here!
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Thanks ♥